Chapter 6- First Impressions are Important
Having control of a body again felt like a double edge sword. On one hand (or now hoof) I felt like I existed. I wasn't just a thing anymore. I was physical, solid, alive. Then on the other hand/hoof, I was suddenly an intruder again. That killed all the good that came with being in control again.
Spike was looking at me with utter contempt in his eyes. He was not happy with me, and for good reason.
I decided to put ‘my’ hoof down. Twilight’s ears were splayed back against her head. The ground was looking mighty interesting right now. Anywhere that wasn't in Spike’s direction seemed pretty good right now.
“What do you want?" I heard Spike ask, a startling amount of hate audible in his voice.
I felt Twilight’s ears snap to attention and my gaze shifted back to Spike, “What?”
“What. Do. You. Want?" he repeated deliberately.
They felt like a blade to the heart with each word. “I’m sorry, Spike. Really. Twilight will be back in control the second I fall asleep. I acted rashly and it scared Twilight and you. I am truly sorry.” I replied with Twilight’s voice. I was being honest, even if it wasn't on purpose, I was still at fault.
The room was so quiet you could hear a pin drop from two miles away. Goddamnit, was this uncomfortable and awkward. I could already feel the guilt inside me swelling up. Of course he has no reason to accept my apology, hell, or even believe me. These thoughts of guilt were interrupted by a long sigh.
“Ok, I forgive you, just so long as nothing bad happens to Twilight.”
I finally met Spike's gaze. He was still looking at me with a stern expression, steel in his eyes. However, it was lacking that bite and hostility it had before.
I was dumbfounded. I mean yeah they were understanding and compassionate on the show, but this took it to another level. I just took over his surrogate sister and he forgave me. I couldn't help it.
I hugged him, “Dude! Thank you! I promise I’ll make this up to you.”
Resistant at first, the dragon eventually gave into the hug before adding, “Yeah, no problem. Can I mention how weird it is to hear Twilight say ‘dude’?”
I put the baby dragon down while letting out a chuckle. “Yeah, it is a bit weird.”
So yeah a bit of forgiveness. Feeling a bit better. I was preparing to ask Spike a question about Twilight’s research when I heard somepony yelling at the top of their lungs.
“TWIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIILIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIGHT!!!!!”
*WHAM*
A bright pink pony with equally pink poofy mane and tail had just slammed the library door open. She was looking around the room until she set her focus on me. This was none other than the Party Princess Pony, Pinkamena Diane Pie. Pinkie was shifting her gaze between me and different locations around the library.
“Twilight, I need your help! There’s a new pony here somewhere and my Pinkie Sense is telling me that that somepony is here! Have you seen him?" She asked.
Wow, the Pinkie sense has some amazing reaction times. I’ve barely been here ten minutes and Pinkie has already pinpointed my location. Regardless of the almighty power of the Pinkie Location System, this could be bad. Pinkie’s abilities are a rogue element. If she found out what I did she might get mad.... and I did not want a pissed off Pinkie Pie after me…
Nuewp! Do not want!
Ok I need information on how best to deal with this. I looked at Pinkie and spoke in my best Twilight voice, “I think I might Pinkie, but can I talk to Spike about something first? It’s kind of important.”
Pinkie sat down on her haunches and gave a smile and a nod, “Sure, Twilight! I’ll keep looking! I know that new pony is ‘round here somewhere!" Her head was swiveling to different parts of the library and she was checking under errant objects.
I smiled and turned to Spike and motioned him to follow me to the kitchen. The kitchen was fairly simple and had all the amenities one could want; a simple stove with an oven attached, a decent sized refrigerator, and a simple sink in the middle. Oddly enough, the cabinets looked like they were more a part of the tree itself, rather than objects that were brought in and attached.
I held the kitchen door open for Spike and let it close behind him. Pinkie was checking inside books looking for me. I looked at the baby dragon. He still wore a mask of unamusement, but it wasn’t as bad as before.
“What did you want to talk about?" Spike inquired with his arms crossed.
I leveled with him, “I need to know how to break this to Pinkie.”
Spike arched a brow. “Just tell her."
Blunt, Spike, very blunt, and not too helpful, I think.
“Well, yeah, but what if she reacts badly to all this? What if she doesn't even believe me? I really don’t want Twilight’s friends to hate me.”
Spike’s brow furrowed this time, “How do you know Pinkie is Twilight’s friend? Better yet, how’d you know my name before?”
Ok, I actually have a valid excuse and a way to avoid exposing them as characters in a TV show this time.
“Celestia gave me the rundown of Twilight, you, and her friends. I’m...kinda alone here. I think she figured if I knew about you, Twilight, and her friends y'all might...help."
I was only half lying. Celestia didn’t need to tell me what I already knew. However, being alone in this new world and body for me will be taxing enough as it is… I could use some friends.
Spike’s expression softened a bit. “You..don’t have anyone? You don’t have any friends?”
I shook Twilight’s head.
“Family?”
I shook Twilight’s head again.
“Wow..." was all Spike said, trailing off.
“Yeah, I’m sorry for taking over Twilight but-”
“WHAT!?” a familiar voice said from nowhere. Suddenly, Pinkie exploded out of the oven.
My god mare, I know that you like to make the laws and constraints of reality your bitch, but could you lay off the cardiac arrest please?
“What did you just say?" Pinkie said, inches from Twilight’s face.
Spike and I were both equally startled. I had felt Twilight’s ears shoot to full attention,and absolutely dumbfounded by Pinkie’s spontaneous teleportation. “Uh...duh...what?”, was about all I got out.
Pinkie was eyeing me with suspicion. I mentally snapped myself out of it and decided that there was no way to predict where this would go. Best keep it short, sweet, and truthful (to a degree).
“Pinkie, you know that new pony you were looking for?”
Pinkie nodded, still holding a suspicious look.
I took Twilight’s hoof and I used it to pull away part of her mane on the back of her neck, where I was. “Do you see that spot? That’s me. My name is Dante.”
I watched Pinkie out of Twilight’s peripheral, staring at me. Then she raised a hoof and...oh no.
*Poke*
I giggled. Twilight’s hooves shot to her mouth. Oh God, tell me she didn’t hear that.
She looked at me again. Her eyes narrowed and she moved to poke me again.
I whipped around and backed away.
“Twilight isn't ticklish there." Pinkie stated.
“I am. Please don’t do that.” I requested.
*GASP* “You ARE the new pony. But not a pony! You’re some kind of black Gak thingie! Ooh, Ooh! I should throw a welcome party after we get you off of Twilight. *Gasp* I should get the girls!" She said out loud, before she was moving toward the kitchen door.
Uh oh, going down hill fast. She was about to zip out of the kitchen when I reached out and grabbed Pinkie by the tail with a tendril. I heard Spike gasp, and Pinkie soon shared the sentiment when she investigated what had stopped her.
“I know it’s freaky. I know both of you are concerned for Twilight. I know I’m making her look kind of evil right now. Just please, hear me out before you go for the cavalry.” I begged Pinkie. Her eyes were glued to Twilight’s.
I let my hand tendril retract and Twilight’s eyes return to normal. Pinkie still looked surprised and Spike was sharing the expression. I couldn't read past the surprise, I need to humble myself a bit more. “Look if you don’t believe me when I’m done. You can take me off of Twilight. I won’t resist.” I meant it...it was gonna suck, but it would show my sincerity.
Pinkie looked at Spike and he looked at her. Spike made his way next to Pinkie and took a seat, Pinkie mirrored him. “Okie-doki-loki, but I’m still going to get the girls after this. They deserve to know.” Pinkie informed me, still suspicious. I didn't protest.
I spent the next few minutes going through the events of the last day. I told Pinkie and Spike about my death, my entry into Equestria, and what happened after I linked with Celestia leaving out the assassination attempt. Of all things, to make them worry about, that wasn't one they needed. Celestia had it under control....I hoped.
Neither one of them interrupted me. I finished and awaited judgement. It was silent for a moment. I looked up to gauge their reactions. The Pink Party Pony pensively pondered perceptively my problematic positions. Spike looked a bit more distraught. I had mentioned I was alone, but I can imagine the tale of my death had put a new spin on it. Poor little guy...
Pinkie chimed in, the bubbliness of her voice had given way to a sort of monotone pitch. “I’m...I’m going to go get the girls. I’ll be back in a bit.” I just nodded and walked Pinkie to the door. She made her way into Ponyville, not saying a word as she left.
As she stepped out, I could see several ponies going about their business. Some stopped and waved at Twilight wishing her a good day. I gave them a courteous wave and closed the door. I turned to see Spike in the center of the library, waiting for me. I let out a sigh and I approached Spike. I had to make this right. “Spike, we need to wake up Twilight.”
Spike looked at me with a confused look. “How do we do that?”
I had to think about it. I could just slap her face until she woke up, but that might not be enough. I needed something that would shock her straight to consciousness. Hmmmmmm. OH! Time for another cliche!!
“Spike, do you have any ice?”
“In the freezer. But why do you need ice?”
I gave a bit of a devious smile. “I’m gonna add water and apply it directly to Twilight.”
Spike lit up like a Christmas tree. “YES! I’ve always wanted to do this!" He was as giddy as a kid in a candy store. I couldn't help but chuckle.
It didn't take long to find a bucket and fill it with ice and water. Spike led me to the bathroom, and I made my way into the tub. Heh, Hi, I’m Donte Morelo and this is my contribution to the Ice Bucket Challenge!
I gave Spike a nod and with gusto he dumped the contents onto Twilight’s head. The reaction was instantaneous, Twilight’s body tensed up and I heard a voice screech in the back of Twilight’s head.
“KYAAAAAAAAAAA!”
Well, what do you know. Cliches work! We were both drenched and cold, but the desired effect was obtained. I informed Spike of Twilight’s regained consciousness.
“Welcome back,” I said mentally. I felt Twilight’s mind attempting to recap what had happened. She seemed to have gotten as far as when I had arrived and when she fell, then reached a blank.
“What happened? Why can’t I move!?" Deja friggin' Vu.
“You tripped and knocked yourself out. Spike helped wake you up. We’re going to disconnect me from you before your friends get here.”
Twilight’s mind did a backflip. She must have thought I was just taking over. The fact I was willingly removing myself seemed to put her at ease.
“Spike, I’m gonna need a towel and something to grab onto.” I said out loud. Spike gave a salute and took off to get the requested items. Twilight was balking at her voice being used without her say so.
“How are you doing that?" She asked.
“When you are asleep or unconscious I can take over. Once I’m removed or I lose consciousness you will take over. I was overzealous to try and do something without letting you know first. I hope you can forgive me.”
Twilight was processing what I had told her. I let her think. Meanwhile, Spike returned with a towel and a broom stick. I used Twilight’s hooves to cradle the towel and rub it against her magenta fur and purple mane until both were no longer drenched. The cold we had been feeling before subsided and a natural warmth was beginning to return.
I gave the towel back to Spike and I motioned for him to follow me again. We made our way back to the center of the library. I explained what I wanted Spike to do with the broomstick and he nodded in understanding. Twilight finally came off her train of thought.
“You said your name was Dante, right? I’m not sure if I can trust you completely, but I want you to explain everything to my friends. If they are willing to trust and forgive you. I will do the same.”
“I understand. I’ll need to be in contact with you or somepony else so that I can communicate. Is it okay if I just stay on your back so you can relay my words for me?”
“Yes, that will be fine… Also, I keep getting these thoughts that aren't mine, are they coming from you?”
“Yeah, they’re probably mine. Celestia and I figured that when I’m attached everything must be shared. So, I can feel what you feel and I can understand your thoughts. We’re essentially synced with one another.”
Twilight’s mind went to determining how that was possible but ended up filing it away for study later. Twilight gave me the go ahead to remove myself. I told Spike to ready the broom and get ready to pull. He readied the stick and I used my tendril hand to grab on.
Spike began pulling and I tried to relax myself in the hopes that I’ve come off a little easier than before. It seemed to help out a bit. Poor Spike was straining himself to yank me off. With a final yank I came loose… right into Spike’s face.
I heard him yelling verbally and mentally. I on the other hand, was plastered all over his face that feeling of numbness from before. Eventually, I felt a purple aura wrap around me and I was removed from Spike’s face and placed on the back of the glowing purple aura that was Twilight.
“Uugh, that still sucks.”
I was able to link with Twilight a little. I felt a part of me wanting to connect with her completely but I was able to resist.
“Are you okay?" Twilight asked mentally.
“Yeah, I think getting disconnected drains me a bit. That and of the two times I’ve been pulled off of somepony, I’ve now immediately hit something twice.”
"What did you hit last time?"
“A wall.”
I wasn’t fully connected but I was still able to see her stifle a giggle.
“Not cool, Twilight.”
She didn’t say anything and just rolled her eyes. Um, rude!
“Well, I’m not sure how long until Pinkie gets back with the others. So, I’ll tell you what I told Spike and Pinkie in the meantime.”
It was a few minutes before Pinkie returned with the remainder of the Main Six. Thankfully, I was able to get Twilight through what had happened in the last day up until today.
The Mane 6 were all wearing looks of concern, asking if Twilight was ok. Apparently, Pinkie hadn’t given many details; only that they needed to come to the library. Twilight took the mantle to explain what had happened.
She went over the assignment Celestia had tasked her to identify a strange condition and how her research had led to something called Symbios as the possible cause of said condition. Rainbow Dash was the first to make a comment.
“Whoa, whoa, wait a second. You’re telling me there might be a thing out there that can make a pony into some kind of awesome warrior?”
“If what I’ve found is to be believed then, yes.” Twilight responded.
“That’s. so. AWESOME!"
Should have seen that one coming.
If her expression was anything to go by, Fluttershy didn’t seem to think so, and Rarity shared her sentiments. “Well, surely a creature such as that must be truly quite the brute.”
Gee, want to check your privilege there, Rarity?
Twilight caught that last thought. “Relax, they don’t know you yet. Let me finish, and then you can voice your concerns.”
I wasn’t happy with that. Not having a mouth sucked! I resigned myself to staying on Twilight’s back as she continued.
The unicorn scholar went on to explain how Celestia had sent her a box that contained something to assist with her research of the Symbios. That then led to what had transpired with Twilight, and the events that led up to Pinkie going to collect them.
There were mixed reactions from each pony: Rarity looked abashed, Rainbow Dash looked angry, Fluttershy was covering her mouth with her hooves, Applejack was probably the most stoic seeming to just let the information sink in and mull it over. Pinkie was looking over Twilight’s shoulder at me and back to her friends. I still couldn’t tell what she thought of me.
Rainbow was again the first to speak up, “Well, what happened to that ungrateful little freak!? I’ll make it pay for taking over your body when you were just trying to help!" I shrank...not liking where this was going.
I could see Fluttershy trying to say something but I couldn’t hear it. Applejack moved toward the now hovering Rainbow Dash.
“Take it easy there, Sugar Cube. We ain’t heard its side yet. It may have had a good reason doing what it did.” Her down to Earth country accent gave a calming tone to her words. Gotta love the voice of reason.
Applejack’s statement seemed to quell Rainbow’s anger a bit, “Ok, fine. But if it doesn’t, that thing is in a world of hurt!" Ok, that’s four times I’ve been referred to an “it”. I happen to have a- wait… do I?...
DAMN IT!! I don’t know if I even have a gender anymore!
Twilight turned and nudged me. It got my attention and snapped me out of the realizations that any erotic escapades for me were likely off the table for me until I could get back home. I looked up at her and she motioned to her friends. I guess it’s time for introductions.
“Girls, I know that this might be odd, but I want to introduce you to someone” said Twilight.
All the ponies present looked at Twilight as I craned my body around her side so I could be seen. Rarity and Fluttershy gasped, while Rainbow and AJ just looked stunned.
“This is Dante, he’s the Symbio I mentioned before.” Twilight held her hoof under me and I let myself fall onto it. She took the extended hoof and presented me to the others. An oppressive silence almost immediately fell over the room.
“Uuuh, Twilight...this is a new level of awkward silence.”
“Just give them a second. Remember, as far as anypony knows you’re the only one of your kind.”
“Somehow that doesn’t help much.” I thought solemnly. I was going to say something else when I felt warm air touching Twilight and me.
Twilight looked up from me and saw Fluttershy was a few inches away from me. When had she approached? Fluttershy was just staring at me. Her light green eyes were looking over every inch of me. Twilight looked at the others who hadn't moved an inch.
“Can...can he talk?" Fluttershy inquired. She didn’t seem as timid as she was in the show. Maybe she sees me as more of an animal than a thinking creature?
Twilight nodded, “He can but you have to make physical contact. He communicates telepathically”
Fluttershy was hesitant for a second, but eventually she raised a hoof and made contact with me. I felt the connection with her and with Twilight. Ok, this was weird. I could hear both of their thoughts. Too weird.
“Uh, Twilight, can you put me down? I’m hearing two sets of thoughts at once. It’s weirding me out.”
Fluttershy must have heard that as she retracted her hoof. Twilight seemed to understand and put me on the ground. I lost her sight and swapped to aura sight. Now, I could see and observe all of their auras.
Fluttershy’s aura was a light yellow that seemed to flow off her like a waterfall. Rainbow’s aura was cyan but her aura looked buffeted. Each time she beat her wings her aura was forced down to the ground. Rarity’s aura was more of a vibrant white with a blue underlay that started from her center and radiated out. Then there was Applejack and Pinkie’s aura. Their auras were different, it was like their auras were flowing out of the ground and building within them. I think I should remember this, Twilight might be able to make something out of it.
I saw Fluttershy approach me again. She extended her hoof, and I moved up and made contact. “Hello, Fluttershy.”
The small amount of contact was enough for me to see through her eyes...wow, I was small. Fluttershy was surprised but also interested,
“Oh um, hello. My, this is different. I’ve always been able to understand animals, but never like this!" She stated out loud. I felt her getting more excited, she put both hooves on my and I felt myself being lifted.
I wasn’t expecting this, and It’s starting to freak me out on an instinctive level. My body reacted before my mind and it started to curl around her leg. I wasn’t linked with her yet, but an omnipresent urge had grown, was getting really strong.
“Fluttershy..I-I need you to put me down, please.” I pleaded. It’s really starting to get harder to resist linking with her, and if I did, she might freak out. Good Lord, I could only imagine the rage of the bronies back on Earth if I traumatized Fluttershy.
Fluttershy was too enthralled by the prospect of a new creature to learn about that my thoughts didn’t reach her. The urge was getting unbearable. I just… needed to… not....
I saw myself in Fluttershy’s eyes. My whole body was spazzing! I had to act or the urge was going to overtake me. Shit, I’ve got to do this, or else something worse will happen. Please don’t hate me....
I yelled at Fluttershy.
“PUT ME DOWN NOW!!!”
That got her attention. She immediately relinquished me and I was airborne for a few seconds. I saw myself before she let me go. Just before i’d disconnected, I could feel that I had spooked her.
Hey, whatddya know, Guilt seems to be done crushing me. Now it was just content putting me in front of the firing squad and just shooting me until I was torn apart. Oh, what’s that? The firing squad actually practiced, and knows what sights to look down this time? Lovely.
Then I felt something new grab me. The connection let me see myself again but I was still in the air. Through the connection, I felt a strong urge to protect, and an anger that was directed at me. Whoever had me was about to toss me out the window.
That’s when that same urge that got me into this mess took over. I snaked up the arm of my soon to be host and found myself nestled in their mane.
“What the!?" I heard my host yell as I fully linked with them. Heart rate was up, muscles were tense, and wings were beating hard. Ok, Fluttershy tossed me, and there was only one other pegasus present.
I was linked to Rainbow Dash.
Well Fuck all KINDS of duck!
Ok, not feeling good. My is now attached to Rainbow Dash without my say so, I had yelled at Fluttershy, and I’m pretty sure I just blew any chance of gaining anybody’s trust. God DAMN IT!
“Hey! Quit shouting in my head and GET THE BUCK OFF OF ME!”
Aaaand now Rainbow is supremely pissed with me. I would have done what she said but that spaz attack from earlier had me rattled and I just couldn’t leave my host.
“R-r-rainbow Dash...Please...I...feel wrong....Please let me stay.” I pleaded, sounding pretty pathetic.
“No way! Get off me or I’m going to yank you off!”
We were still hovering near the library window. Rainbow was shouting her responses, while I was confined to telepathy. The others were listening to a one sided conversation. I tried to beg Rainbow to let me stay when I was suddenly feeling really tired. It felt like I’d just ran a marathon with the flu and hadn’t eaten for a week. I was starting to feel faint, and dizzy.
“Rain..bow...wrong...me...help....please” I managed to squeak out that last sentence before the tunnel closed on me, and my world fell into darkness as unconsciousness took me.
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RD over reacting to every thing yet again and making thing worse.
The one thing I had a problem with this story all those years ago and now is how submissive he is, he wasint like this with celestia, apologetic and cooperative sure, but once we got to the main 6 his personality took almost a 180. Yes he messed up by being to forward with making contact with twilight but it wasint his fault she knocked herself out and he took control of his body, so all that hate glaring and negative remarks said about him is just uncalled for, twilight shares a little with the blame, and celestia shares a big one by not properly informing twilight of dante and what he could do or need. Very big oversight on her part, so theres no reason for him to be submissive, apologetic and cooperative sure, but the main 6 should be more understanding then this.
Apologies for the small rant, I think I wrote one just like it to the original author all those years ago. Xp
Now this is what you call a quality story so far.
This is melodramatic as fuck.
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... in a good way?
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He actually was like this with Celestia. He was at 0 fault for what happened with her, but still felt intense guilt over it, and continued to apologize to her even after she told him it wasn't his fault.
His personality just seems different towards her because he bonded with her emotionally, and in the original he does the same with Twilight, Rainbow, and Luna as well.
I'd say his personality is pretty well established, and consistent throughout the story.
Very nice. Misunderstandings and shenanigans abound! I look forward to more!
I love this story ^^
I can only imagine he wish he could do this when he try to wake her up every morning.
im guessing he isnt ment to disconnect like he has been and this is a side effect
Ooh, ALS awareness, totally forgot that was a thing... 😇
Geeze us Rainbow tone the prejudice and malice down! Your telescopic tunnel vision is going to kill someone some day!
What a surprise......
We all knew how a walking pride month flag would react
I don't know why you decided to go with the mane 6.
Sticking with Celestia and Luna would have been much better, not so boring and predictable.
Twilight could just go to Canterlot for research
Awesome chapter
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Intense guilt isint really the same as being submissive. Thier 2 different things.
Too many good reasons
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He's not being submissive though? He's trying to be considerate to the fact that he's basically leeching off their hospitality, and trying to insure that they're ambivalent to his attempts at friendship, and survival.
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Ahah! Thank you! I appreciate it.
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No problem and keep up the good work!
My guy is probably starving and needs a cheeseburger. Also he needs a bit more of a spine, I'd suggest when he wakes up to give him a bit more of a back bone and chalk the meekness up to disorientation.
It has been a looong time since I’ve read the Symbio story and I somehow still remember the first chapters. Good job mah dude! I’m glad you’re going to finish this amazing story! ^_^
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Celestia asked twilight to study and help him [thou she technically didn't say that last part which was stupid of her] so hes technically not leeching when both parties agree to do research.
Also what real hospitality? Due to a misunderstandings they've treated him as a malevolent thing then a person mostly.
OH GOD SHE KNOWS ABOUT GAK! EVERYPONY RUN!!!
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To be fair, all these chapters being posted are taken straight from the original version (which is on fimfetch). Far as I can tell, the only thing that’s been changed is the fact that the last two paragraphs or so of this chapter are actually in the next chapter in the original.
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He's a literal invertebrate, by the by.
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......you do release I chose those words intentionally BECAUSE he's an invertebrate, right? It's wordplay.
Me está empezando a gustar esta historia
Wow, I just caught up and I have to say that I like it.
My only nit pick is that being sent by Celestia should be enough to convince the Ponies that he is trust worthy. Ponies really have drank the coolaid when it comes to anything Sun-Butt does.
But even thats a minor nit pick. I do love the story and Im looking forward to following it.
The Monk
“To say that Twilight Sparkle went bugfuck would be like saying the Incredible Hulk had some mild anger management issues.” -DustTraveller
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LOL dude I lived and breathed that series when I was growing up. I have the hardback editions of The andalite Chronicles and the Hork-Bajir Chronicles and the Elemists Chronicles. Not even sure if I spelled them right but LOL. Even watch the Nickelodeon show for the short duration it was on. it's just a reference I never thought to see again haven't had reference in over 20 years and I still know the name LOl
Been some time dude. Everything alright?
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Yeah, Just the holidays. ^^
The comments to this chapter has also had me sitting here thinking about possibly a small rewrite, so I've been trying to piece that together as well...
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Oh dont take what I said to heart bro, I meant nothing negative by it against you.
I know that reference!
I don't remember the name of what show/movie it's from but I remember it. 
Edit: actually I think I might know two references. The second is one of the remakes of "The Three Musketeers."
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I honestly wouldn't say so. I mean, it's certainly still readable, but did you really need to put in, what, 3 different introductions in the exact same way? The one with Celestia seemed kinda excessive with Luna suddenly trying to bop it, but the scene was written relatively well, and it fit in the most general sense so I'm fine with it. The second time I think would've been better with Twilight, idk, not immediately panicking and passing out. Then, we get an introduction again with the 6 and sure enough more drama. Now drama itself isn't bad, and this is written 'okayly' but, you've reached the point where throwing more STUFF IS HAPPENING into the readers face is no longer interesting, especially when it's done in the same way.
I wouldn't suggest writing the rest of your story like this, non-storyrelevant drama over and over again. Especially because it sets up the rest of the story to be overdramatic. If you wanted to put in a bit with Dante being sad that his family is gone and he has to start over with a new life? It won't seem like character development, or story relevant drama, it'll just seem like another THIS THING IS HAPPENING to get the readers attention.
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Oh no, nothing too extreme, (though the next chapter does involve one of the big changes I will be making to the series and Dante's character progression, so that's the delay on that one.)
It's This chapter that I'm considering a bit of a rewrite for mostly defending his interactions, but also cleaning them all up with all characters.
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Really it's all up to you, write how you like.
I hate it when I read good stories only to catch up and have yo wait for a new chapter. Hope u update soon this story is added to my tracking
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You're welcome haha keep up the good work :)
Gak is (on Twilight's) back!
Symbio gotta monch, disconnecting constantly is exhausting :V
Please update soon ^^
Can't wait to read more.
I thought it was weird that I couldn't find this story!
will there be more chapters coming soon?
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Huh... I can't believe I forgot this story was a thing... Though, after feeling the despair of finishing an incomplete and never to be a complete story I guess I've got time to explore.
continue com essa historia por favor ta muito legal mesmo eu amei essa historia por favor
Columbiaguy sounds seriously familiar
What's that supposed to mean?
Please continually to write, I’m really liking this story