30 year old man from California who likes to fight with swords. Author of Successor, Love Mark, and Daybreaker at Canterlot Wedding Verses.
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This story is a sequel to Daybreaker vs Chrysalis
In the aftermath of the battle with the Changelings, everypony is feeling guilty for not heeding Twilight's warnings and hopes for a chance at redemption. But when Daybreaker suddenly returns and kidnaps Twilight, they're going to get a chance much sooner than they thought.
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1st comment!
Loving it so far, keep up the great work and looking forward to the next chapter!
So Daybreaker wants Twilight as her own daughter. Interesting.
I know how it can be to try to beat deadlines. The thing I do to help avoiding have to rush is to write and edit a few chapters before I submit the story and the first chapter. How many I write before submitting usually depends on how long the story is, or how long I'm projecting it to be.
Interesting... this should be good.
nice work
Wow. The sequel is here now.
I do like this first chapter. Great work Sam. 
Be really funny if in reacting to ”let me take her” Celestia started jealously battling Daybreaker.
The words I highlighted in bold are the ones that need to be inserted. Otherwise, great chapter.
It's Great so far
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Thank you. I will likely get a new chapter done by Saturday I hope. Have to get one done on my Luster Dawn story right now.
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Okay
this Saturday? u making new chapter? u got me confuse
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Yep, working on the new chapter now.
thank you I cant wait to see what happens next!
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Glad you're enjoying it! Hopefully will have it posted tonight. Already got nearly 400 words in.
I'm so excited to see the new chapter I'm dying to know what happened next😍😍😍
Well, I suppose the term foalnapping really does apply in this particular scenario.
Oh god! Daybreaker turned Twilight into a baby!
I think she want to raise Twilight as her own daughter. 
awesome! Thank you please complete this as soon as possible maybe you can help me make a story like this
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I'd be happy to give you some tips and help out I guess. I don't know when the next chapter will be out. I have my other in progress story to work on which I haven't gotten as much work done on as I would like. I also have my own original story to do, and someone's put in a request for a fic where Twilight gets killed in the wedding.
Wait...why is she not best mare anymore?
Could have been to me? I'm not sure what you were trying to get at here.
Overall I think there's a lot of dialogue here that works to move the story forward, but has grammar issues or doesn't sound right to say out loud. Beyond that though I'm still interested in whats gonna happen next. Just please keep grammar in mind!
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She is best mare, this is just Shining talking about how he might have punished her if she'd been wrong. He would have let her back in the wedding but maybe not as best mare. As for the second one I guess I left out the word lost in the sentence. Lost to me. Though looking at it now I think maybe "that's twice in one I could have lost you" would sound better.
That whole turning Twilight into a baby part took me by surprise! I guess it would make since Celestia knew that spell since she lived over a thousand years and must’ve mastered that spell.
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Yeah that could be how shes lived so long rather than the whole alicorns being immortal or long lived theory.
Good luck with chapter 3 you have all my support 🤗🤗
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Ah I see. Thank you for clarifying!
My parents thinks some thing is wrong with me after reading the second chapter 😇
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Why?
I don't know but they think I am though but I'm willing to help you with the story ^_^🙂 and what days do you work on incomplete storys?
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Well I have work most days. Usually days off are my best days for working on stories. Wednesday and Saturday, sometimes I can get a little work in. Btw, if you have any questions please direct them to me in a private message.
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Ok I will! Thanks
Interesting yet not surprising that Daybreaker took Twilight as a foal. Celestia always saw her as a daughter. It was 50/50 between either wanting Twilight as a mate/marefriend or daughter.
I guess she's going for the Hot Momma part.
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Mare friend seems a little bit much for me. I always saw it as more mother daughter relationship kind of.
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Looking forward to what you have planned 😊
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Thanks. In a bit of a runt right now but that will pass.
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No problem. Take your time.
Other than another good chapter, I got nothing.
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Thanks. I was thinking of changing things a little bit by having Daybreaker turn Twilight into a dark unicorn or something similar to the Nightmare Sparkle story and having her take revenge on her friends for abandoning her.
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Same.
Wow, you know how to make Princess Celestia go so far to protect Twilight. Now I really want to see Velvet trying to fight Daybreaker.
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Yey!!!! Chapter 3 thank you I'm gonna read it every single day and night 🤩🤩🤩🤩
Welp, if you're going down that route, I suppose that IS the next logical step.
Not that logic is playing a role in this at all, but still.
Nice chapter. I wonder how Velvet will face against Daybreaker.
Wow. Great chapter again Sam.
nice work looking forward to more
I like Twilight Velvet letting out her inner Momma Bear! That's a MOM right there!
On a related note, here's a error I saw: The apostrophe is missing in "bear's."
You know what the Deus Ex Machina for this story would be?
Faustia popping in to scold Celestia for her actions, apologize to the ponies for her elder daughter's behavior, restore Twilight to her former self and provide a proper punishment for Celestia.
But this is your story, so you get to see how it goes.
Man I wonder what Luna is going to think? Will she really erase Twilight memory? Update soon.
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I think with Daybreaker, it can be seen as more of an "obsession."
Twilight isn't somepony to be loved. She is an object to be possessed.
I can actually picture Daybreaker doing something like this.
That is just sick!