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Twilight Sparkle lives through a long life as an alicorn, but eventually that great lifespan comes to an end after five thousand years. Now she is able to reunite with her friends, her true friends that could never be replaced even after so long.
Author's Note: This goes by the theory that Alicorns are not immortal but simply live longer. Please do not start an argument over this as neither of which have been officially stated.
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Want me to make a critique? (I´ll edit this comment after you responded)
Now, let´s read this!
EDIT:
Hmm... Let’s see. First of all, I liked it. Not a fav, but I´ll put it in my custom bookshelve.
Oh, I might want to mention this: This is a warning to everyone who wants to read this story.
Spoilers ahead
I´ll shorten it dow to just the key moments so I can work with it better. Final spoiler warning.
1. Twi is on the edge of passing on
2. We are told Alicorns live for around 5000 jears.
3. Spike is with her. We are told he is nearing his end as well, but will live for a few more centuries.
4. Tia and Luna died two millennia ago.
5. Twi really misses the the others of the EoH crew.
6. She still has Flurry and Luster. Candy and Shiny were murdered.
7. The families of her friends, [...] were the only ones Twilight considered close to having true friends. (Also, Flutters had no kid?) She talks with them.
8. True immortals can die if they wish to. Discord let himself fade after Flutters passed on.
9. “She just wanted to be with her friends now.”
10. Memory book, Twi uses her magic which speeds up dying.
11. Twi says good bye to Spike and passes on.
12. She meets the spirits of her old friends.
13. Spike, Luster, and Flurry look at Twi’s grave.
Now, I´ll break dow the parts one by one.
1. + 2. Nothing interesting here.
3. So dragons live longer than alicorns? Huh.
4.+5. As expected.
6. So an alicorn lives 5k jears, but only gets weaker in the last few, just as a normal pony would? Since Flurry and Luster appear to be just fine. Also, the murder feels unnecessary. Shining wasn’t alicorn in the first place, and Cadence’s death would´ve , in my opinion, been more effectfull if she´d only died a few jears ago(she was only a decade jounger than Twi).
7. Of course she is closer to them, but her only true friends? Doesn’t seem right.
8. Huh. So he is god and not a manifestation of chaos.
9. I´d wish for the same.
10.+11. As expected.
12. Spike is not there, ‘cuz he´s not ded yet. But why only her friends? Sure Candy and Owlowhatshisname and others could wait a bit, but where is her mother or Shining? This is a bit confusing.
13. Nice little extra.
Just so you know: ‘m just saving this comment as-is, but I´ll come back to it. (Or rather, I´m still writing on it, ´m just slow.) Feel free to answer/comment on anything I write, I´ll check for ‘em once a few minutes.
Oh, and Sam(I am allowed to call you that, am I not ?), just edit your already existing response, it´ll take up less space. That is ... if it´s okay with you...
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Sure.
Dang 500 years She have to wait till the time comes It must be very painful to wait for this long Again and I know that I said this so many times I can't even imagine living this long while your friends and family die But she didn't want to leave spike alone in this world I almost forgot that dragons can live a little bit longer I wonder if smolder have to gone through like spike it makes me sad to hear that she has to see her friends go as well before her but anyway twilight can finally rest and see her friends may her r.i.p. Anyway this was a pretty good story better sweet but Good 😢
I did mention About dragons live longer like spike it makes me wonder how smolder felt like when she has to see her friends go 😔
This song kinda reminds me of this story kinda
How twilight will meet them again
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Oh I like that song. Been a while since I heard it.
But seriously you kind of overdo it with your comments.
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Usually that happens when I want to say something then one time as long I don't put any Spam hates comments
Something I don't always think that about isn't just how Twilight might feel being alive thousands of years, but how Spike might feel about his naps. When he takes those hundred-year naps, he'll wake up with someone he cares for gone and he wouldn't be able to be by their sides during their final hours.
I would have a hard time going to sleep if I had to go through that. The only possible upside is that he wouldn't be grieving as much as Twilight would, since he'll spend much more time asleep than her
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Yeah Fluttershy and Discord weren't compatible to reproduce here. Though its possible with Discords magic he could alter his body or something. Or maybe Fluttershy would be too scared of the pain of giving birth.
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Or far more likely, neither of them had a romantic interest in the other. In The Last Problem, for all of its problems, only Pinkie being married to Cheese was ever confirmed as canon.
Everything else, romance wise at least, was nothing but inuendo. For those who aren't fused to the AppleDash and Fluttercord ships.
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I would definitely say Discord was in love with Fluttershy. The writers left it up to us whether it was canon. Discord did let Fluttershy use his portal and he was transporting a lot animals, Fluttershy even said love during her part of the song last episode.
Good story.
I will say this is an interesting way to look at alicorn and how they age. They live X amount of years before they too pass on, hence why Celestia and Luna passed their roles onto Twilight, and I assume Twilight onto Luster and Cadance with Flurry Heart.
To paraphrase the Sith Rule of Two: "Two, there are. One with the power. The other, to one day, take it."
That's not the actual quote. But it's close.
Cool story, though 5 thousand seems a bit long for this story.
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Probably.
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A master to embody the power and the apprentice to crave it.
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But she would probably have at least a couple more decades. I hate to think that the Alicorn dying process takes years with them all trapped in their deathbeds, if it is alicorns having long lifespans that is. Twilight's age was never said in the show as I recall. She was... what? A teenager when she moved to Ponyville? She did refer to herself as a grown up in growing up is hard to do. I was kind of focusing more on other things rather than that in this story such as the feelings rather than how close the other characters might be to the end of their lifespan. I left it vague with Spike here, we don't know long dragons live either. Heck, Flurry might even live longer than five thousand years as she was a naturally born alicorn, I've heard some say they live even longer than turned ones.
What about Pinkie Pie?
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Oh, forgot her.
Don't make my cry please.
Good job!! That was an enjoyable read
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Thanks. I recall sharing my main theory on how Twilight wont outlive her friends in the forum. Hope you'll check out that story as well. Though I'd be good with her just having a longer lifespan like here.
Edit: Slipped my mind I had PM you on this. Sorry about that.
Not the first story to use this idea (alicorns live insert random number of years). Granted that one was done long before any of the Season 8 and 9 horseapples were even on the radar.
Not sure who did it better though. And I did read this one.
FEELS! SO MANY FEELS!
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sgu2AiBcVmY
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qV9cvXaBRFE
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-xKM3mGt2pE
Play these when reading the story, feels get deeper.
Pretty good, and I notice a lot of upvotes this time.
And anyone who dislikes, please just ignore this and go by your own headcanon.
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Yeah, I'm glad for that. People are just more for Twilight outliving her friends. I'd be good with this though, just a longer lifespan isnt so bad to me.
Apologies for deleting the past comments but the person was not decent at all. He acted like a jerk in my opinion and tried to feed me a lie claiming Lauren Faust said alicorns were immortal, even of she said that it was never said in canon which he contradicted without giving proof.
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What was his problem anyway
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Thinking alicorns are immortal and being stuck in that idea, saying Lauren Faust stated it. As far as I know it's a lie, and he was not nice at all.
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I mean didn't somebody in the writer staff talk about the Alicorn theory about their powers and how they're limited to lifespan yeah and whoever he was not a very good person at all I think it's one of those trolls who just signed up and try to spam hate
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Yeah, I heard some people say it's just the sisters possess immense magic power to the point 50 years is like one something. The only thing that says they are immortal is a trading card thing according to the mlp wiki page on alicorns, and that was said to be "could be canon".
would they though? Who is going to make the day and night happen? How can we have Pokémon Sun and Moon without the sun or moon? XD
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Haha. Who knows? Maybe if there is no vessel for the power to rise those it will just go back to rising on their own.
Could someone, like, get rid of the onions? I'm really sensitive to them...
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Might like Goodbye My Child as well then.
Came back here after G5 started. I think you got it right in that Twilight wasn't immortal. Whether it was 5,000 years is anyone's guess I suppose, and whether Equestria degenerating into what it did was Luster's fault...
Guess time will tell (not saying too much in case you haven't seen A New Generation).
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Yeah. Anything could have happened. My main theory on what happened is that after Twilight gave Luster her power over the sun and moon which was the source of her immortality in my primary headcanon, Luster passed it onto another. Then the cycle went on with each princess doing the same until one became corrupt. If its not immortality though and the longer lifespan, while not sure. Though the corrupt princess could still apply in that view.
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Except G5 has the sun and moon moving on their own. I refuse to think any alicorn would have ever let Equestria degenerate into what it did, and not fight to stop it. Which makes me think they're all dead. Killed, since we know they're not invincible.
Or something else. Corrupt alicorn is too easy, and I hope Hasbro has a better idea than that.
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Hmm... interesting. Maybe if the intended successor killed the current wielder that would cause the powers to simply vanish and the sun and moon would then rise on their own. But who knows? I heard a rumor there was a corrupt Alicorn in the movie, or was that just that... a rumor?
Edit: I also recall that the sun was going down in the last FIM scene, but Twilight wasn't doing that. So either she found a way to automize it, I read one story where there is some wheel she made that does it. Or she gave someone else that amulet to do it when she's busy.
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Well looks like I was right about the corrupt alicorn as we saw in Opaline. I still say it's an au though but whatever.