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Writer, blogger, saucy chat mom, occasional bitch. Hablo español. She/her/ella.

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It took Twilight a long time to build up the courage to ask Applejack out, but she finally did it. What she hadn't prepared for was the two of them triggering an Attunement, an incredibly rare magical reaction that unicorn fillies call 'True Love's Kiss.'

And the date was going so well, too.

(Takes place in late season 7, after Once Upon a Zeppelin but before Shadow Play)

Editing by Formerly Committed and JetstreamGW.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 34 )

Ugh, now I'm feeling all sappy. But this wait was worth it, thanks Bats.

I still say Pinkie could pull that shit off with a particularly energetic high five.

Such a satisfying ending.

Twilight floated the lemon wedge out of her glass. She rubbed it along the rim, then squeezed the juice out over the water.

I don't think I have ever been as envious of unicorn magic as I was when I realized that she did this without messy fingers.

She was writing because of a problem she was having with his best friend.

Wrong pronoun there?

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Thanks, good catch, don't know how the heck that made it through edits.

Very nice. I like the philosophical questions and discussions. Be interested in reading a sequel if you ever choose to write it.

It was so wholesome and lovely!

Romantic as :yay: and really interesting premise. Well earned favorite :twilightsmile:p

But book horse would DEFINITIVELY write a book on it, considering she experienced something with little to no data on. For SCIENCE!! :pinkiecrazy:

“How does anypony make a choice?”

Seeing the future, everything set in stone, isn't about not making a choice, Twi-Twi. It's being shown the results of the choices you'll have made for yourself. The only reason we think differently is because after we're shown the choices we'll make, we want to make new ones just as a fuck you to ourselves, or rather the personification of destiny, purely because (generally humans, other species shouldn't have to deal with this) of our own hubris, snatching back some control from something that never took it from us to begin with. And in doing so, we sabotage ourselves. Everything you saw is what was going to happen because it's how you would have wanted things to go.

Edit: Finished the chapter. Jeez man, come on. I didn't want to cry today.

... You missed a perfectly good opportunity to show us Applejack getting to feel what it was like being raised into adulthood by 'her' parents, in Night Light and Twilight Velvet. I can't tell if it's because that would have been an even bigger waterworks issue tacked onto the happysads you gave us last chapter, or what.

But thank you for this story, I mean it. I may be more of a Rarijack and Twilestia sort, but a heartwarming story is heartwarming, regardless of which camp you dug your trench in.

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I second the sequel sentiment.

It could be about their last days, where both remember baking, laughing and going to sleep... They talk, and talk, and talk. They are't going to let these possibly last moments be wasted on a pie. Very high on the night tough, tireness wins, and they go to sleep for the last time.

And then, the day after, Twilight wakes, and sees Applejack at her side, unmoving. She freaks out internally. Is her love just resting? Or did Twilight escape fate's claws, while AJ left her behind? At the verge of tears, she hears a faint sound. Hopeful, but still worried, she slowly gets up. Just to be greeted with a loudass state of the art snore.

Pleeease?

Huh.

You know, this is one of the purest example of speculative fiction I've seen on this site - taking a single premise, examining and analyzing it and everything it means but not losing the human connection that makes that examination matter.

Very well done.

Wait it only has three chapters? Where is the rest? It was just starting to get great.

Wonderful story :twilightsmile:
Thanks for writing it.

Consider the True Love's First Kiss thing taken for my own ships. Too awesome to leave here.

Man, it's been way too long since I read a story here, but lots of adorable TwiJack and a neat hook is a great way to get back in the swing of things!

Oh. My. God. That was... Very impressive. The entire opening scene had me dieing, (and considering I was listening to it while driving meant that could have been literal). And the entire rest of it was extremely compelling. What made it so impressive was that you literally did this through pure character interactions, nothing but them having a conversation. "I was just worried that...I was overthinking things." Of course Twilight was over thinking things, you captured them both perfectly. Honestly, it made me a little disappointed when the weird stuff started happening. Them seeing all that stuff made me sad that I wasn't going to get to see them experiencing those things through your writing. But I'm definitely going to trust you know what you're doing for the time being. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Ah! A Bats TwiJack fic. Also known as Insta-favorited.

Gods dammit Bats why can you control my emotions better than I can :fluttercry:

I would just like to point out that "Magical Lesbian Spawn" is a thing on Derpibooru.

You ARE welcome! :twilightsmile:

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Uh, thank... you? :rainbowderp:

Anyway, I know it doesn't matter, but I'm on team not actual future memories. The lines about not being able to know if Applejack took a title or not struck me as sufficient evidence.

My headcannon for this magic is it takes all their past memories up to the moment of the kiss and uses those plus their imagination to generate a series of future memories for each of them. Actually knowing the future seems like it should be impossible.

Love this fic! There's not a whole lot of Twijack, and it's nice when it pops up. Really like the opening particularly, and the overall premise regarding the potential future is great.

I featured this on episode 263 of my podcast, Pony 411.

Ok ahole. You literally made me feel the exact same thing as your characters, you don't have to spend an entire chapter bragging about it. Seriously though, that was an amazingly well created scene. I felt the emotions of the characters right along with them the whole time. And once again, it was purely through their dialog and interaction with each other. I think you really captured the characters well. Not sure what the next chapter will hold, but it seems epilog sized which I think is all the story needs at this point.

And a perfect cherry on top. Take your like, take your fav, take it all.

love the chapter.

i enjoyed how you relayed AJ's history and i didn't feel lost.
or was this only what twi saw?

but wouldn't a spastic twi teleport away from the issue?

Magnificent work. I especially love how persuasive the "Equestria's never threatened, so the memories can't be real" argument is. :rainbowlaugh: I can just imagine Twilight's frustration during the Pony of Shadows incident, Tempest's attack, Cozy's coup... None of that was on the schedule, darn it!

Lovely, thought-provoking Twijack from start to finish. Thank you for it.

Applejack stooped halfway down towards the barrel of apples and froze. She shot back up straight and a smile crossed her face, then she flinched and dug back into the apples. “Sure, Twi.”

And sold.

Seriously, I like romantic shenanigans as much as the next person, but it's so very refreshing to see this kind of thing start organically. It definitely gets crazier later, but starting a love story with someone being asked on a date...and then they just go on a date, that had me on board with this story right from the beginning.

She saw the apple orchard sprawling out in front of her in the dying light of the evening, lit up in tiny flashes by thousands of fireflies,

Nice reference to Spellbound Fireflies

Goddamn. This was a novel and clever idea, and the scenes were very touching and emotional, they felt real. Twilight sharing Applejack's memory of her mother back with her was intense. It's actually raining outside right now but that's no excuse, I teared up reading this chapter. Well done.

MOW

I like the way how the second chapter is similar to the first, but with premonition instead of just predictability. Well played, bats.

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My headcannon for this magic is it takes all their past memories up to the moment of the kiss and uses those plus their imagination to generate a series of future memories for each of them.

... of how things could have played out had the kiss been a normal one.
So in a way, the attunement gives them that future back, if only as memories.
A suspiciously normal future, that even appears to not include the elements and alicornication affecting their ability to have a normal life. So in a way, this magical alteration at least gives them back their normal life in the form of memories.

Actually knowing the future seems like it should be impossible.

That future already became impossible when they got each other's past memories, even disregarding those of that future. This might even be the magic's way to make them get the hint and stay together, for whatever reason it has to do so.

Very well planned and executed, as expected. Enjoyed a lot, thanks for writing.

Reminded me of Nietzsche’s Eternal Return, less expected, but also enjoyable.

I admit I would love to see Cadence’s reaction to Twilight going through a rare love related phenomenon like attune mentioned.

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