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Daring Do needs an expert in ancient seapony languages. Minuette needs a vacation. Moondancer just needs to get out of the house more.
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FYI, I've been writing over a thousand words a night until like 2-3 am for the past five nights to get this done in time for the deadline tomorrow and the final cut-off date next week, so maybe don't expect Shakespeare, but also like I've written over 8000 words in the last five days and I'm super wired right now, send help
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Can we send lyra instead?
9549255
*sends caffiene*. Those words won't write themselves, y'know
(this bingo competition really seems to be bringing out some awesome stuff)
9549440
Heck yeah! It's a pretty nifty little competition. I'm looking forward to reading through all the entries myself.
9549371
Lyra is always acceptable and appreciated. (On that note, I should be sending some Lyra your guys' way soon.)
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I'm always serious.
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Missing the 's' in 'does'
Missing space after the period
"What, you didn't take that elective at Celestia's School? Could've sworn I saw you in there."
"That was probably Twilight."
Great work in conveying the alien sensation of transformation.
Wow. Those dogs have very impressive lung capacity.
Loving this so far. Eagerly looking forward to more.
Why isn't there a Daring Do tag?
So Moondancer, Minuette, and Twinkleshine? Interesting. Makes it seem like the run in with Twilight and them was inevitable.
9560947
Probably because she's a minor if vital character. She appears at the beginning to set things in motion, and end to wrap things up, but while she is mentioned, most of the story doesn't focus on her. The tags are supposed to be main, or at least major, characters. Were she tagged, it's possible that readers would be disappointed in how little she is involved. It would be kind of like before the character limit, when some readers would try to include the tag for every pony who appeared in the story, even if it was only for one paragraph or sentence.
9560947
Probley a mistake
Missing a quotation somewhere in there, I'm guessing right before 'Point'
Patootie?
This was a fun little adventure, good times.
"That's still not as bad."
"Minnie?"
"Yeah, Moon?"
"Shut up."
I'm honestly surprised the Dogs didn't just dig through the walls. I suppose they might have been worried on bringing down the whole labyrinth.
I suspected what the gimmick was, but I hadn't expected the Z-axis component. Nice touch.
And I've always hypothesized that any given pony can be a hero given the right stimulus. Excellent little adventure, especially the stinger at the end. Thank you for this, and best of luck in the judging.
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Patootie. Keister. Tuchus. Rump. Additional cute term here.
9561801
Butt
9560947 I... don't know why there isn't a Daring Do tag on this. While she is more of a side character, she's still prominent enough in the story to warrant inclusion in my mind. Thanks for pointing that out.
9561252
By the way, thanks for the edits. I usually just thumbs up editing comments, but I've been in such a rush to get all of this out that I didn't have the chance to proofread it as thoroughly as I normally do, so your service is doubly appreciated.
9561801
Oops.
Well, time to do what the pros do and lampshade the heck out of it.
9562142
No problem, if you want I could send them to you in a PM. Which... I may have mentioned before or somewhere else I can't remember and I feel like I did
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9562142
Haha stupid dogs.
I wouldn't at all be surprised if Minuette knew that Daring Do was real from Pinkie Pie. It would certainly be in character for Pinkie to do so together with a Pinkie Promise not to tell it further.
Maybe the ancient civilizations were warned by Discord that they would dissappear and then he made them disappear whihc would fit him. On another note Cthonia is a very strange name for a hippocampus since cthonic means from the earth(at least that's what Stephen Fry claims in a book about greek mythology).
The appearance of Twinkleshine at end was just great.
9561801
Perhaps this is in the universe where Lyra is Twilight's secret bodyguard IP-002. That would suggest Lemon Hearts has some hidden function at the palace, but what?
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"I mostly plan the big events. Weddings, state dinners, assassinations, that sort of thing."
"What was that last one?"
"State dinners."
This was a nice read. Here’s to people. And a shoutout to Estee for bringing you to my attention.
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No better place for a princess-planned interrogation than when the patient's stuck in the dentist's chair. Moondancer just happened to be the last to get sucked into the madness, after repeated hints from Daring Do that she might want to do "field research" went unheeded.
You can has review!
This is a pretty interesting start of a story so moondancer is having a hang out with her friends but apparently she's always late but this time she's early and Minuette is there and wondering why is Moon Dancer here so early so she asked her what's up she only told her half the truth that she's meeting a friend at Mt. Aris and she's pretty nervous to go out there because she never left Canterlot but Minuette convince her to go which she did and she is pretty dang nervous to be out there and she made it to the train and she's not alone Minuette decided to tag along with her despite how many times she needs to do this alone her friend wants to help her once they got to the place it looks like trouble is already starting apparently a couple of the diamond dogs are looking for Daring Do and I wonder what they want from her and also I am pretty surprised of Minuette acting that was awesome
Whoa I didn't know that moondancer has a fast hooves to take someone necklace
Ok so both of them got away from the Diamond Dogs but Minuette needs to know what is going on and moondancer have no choice to tell the truth that Daring Do Is Real and basically asking her help to find a lost item that can potentially destroy the world and summon a demon sort of thing after that they decide to sail to the location and apparently Moon Dancer got the Pearl to transform herself and Minuette into Seaponies so they can swim underneath the water for a cave and it looks like they found it but moondancer hesitated to go inside because there's some potential traps in there but what makes things worse is the diamond dogs are there so now what they're going to do
Wow that was pretty something so the Diamond Dogs found Minuette and Moondancer but she use her light being too blind dogs and they made a run for it running inside the Labyrinth but unfortunately they keep getting lost and it's been a few hours and moondancer is starting to losing her mind so they decided to take a break but they had a pretty sweet moment together talking about how things are and pretty much not just only special people but also normal people can go through something like this some people can have their own adventure but it looks like moondancer figure out the puzzle and they finally found the crown and a return to the surface went back to Mt aris and it looks like Daring do had a busy day and she was surprised that those two found the crown and then when she went back to Canterlot She gave it to twinkle Shine for safekeeping which I did not see that coming this was a pretty interesting story of moondancer and minuet nice job keep up the good work