The world is falling apart at the seams, and there isn't any time. Those in the right place at the right time must make their choices in the final moments.
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-GM, master of time.
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My thoughts exactly, Pinkie. My thoughts exactly.
Eh, you made it work.
Have a Like. :)
Normally, I'm not a fan of tradgedy. But this, this was beautifully written. Instead of taking forever on the build up, you had the problem be even the beginning. Each and every character was written so well and in character. They all showed great maturity as well. Though normally they might not be as mature, when the situation arises, they meet it with maturity. They all knew what would be too cruel for some to endure. I think the one saved that will have to deal with the seperation and lass the most will be Celestia, losing her sister once again, this time, forever. I think that Sunset will be good for Celestia through this, and Celestia for Sunset. I think that, even moreso than Twilight, Sunset needed Celestia in this new world. Again, this was amazing. Great job! If there is a sequel, I look forward to it. If not, I am content with where this lies.
Yes, but I'd think "vengeful time-travelling unicorn" would count as "even weirder".
Which would make him one of the best candidates for solving this.
I do name this phenomenon a "time singularity".
EVERYONE RUN FOR YOUR LIVES!
… Oh wait, there's nowhere to run to.
It's okay, Applejack, it's the best choice you could have made in those circumstance. That goes for everypony else, you all did your best in a situation in which there is no best.
…
Of course?
It is a inescapable rule that those with more power also have more influence, for better or worse.
Oh thank… Discord.
I can't bear Twilight's horn staying broken.
Welp, that was one heck of a story.
All those lives lost in but a moment…
Sunset is an element as well, of an alternate dimension, sure, but one. Being born of Equestria and home again, she probably could have helped if given the chance. Although I don't even want to know how hard such a choice would be on the embodiment of Empathy.
... fuck, the only two leaders are the ones wracked with the most grief right now. Celestia has lost Luna, her sister, after finally getting her back only a few brief years ago, and Twilight's entire family is dead. The rest all have someone from their family, but they only have each other(and sunset, I suppose).
I do think it'd be better if time was going faster farther away- that would mean more energy could arrive faster because the internal reference frame allows more energy to arrive via compression- magic piling on top of itself as it shifts into smaller and smaller portions of tome, like light blue shifting and gaining energy when entering a gravity well. Plus, energy is mass and gravity distorts space-time, causing time to slow within the reference frame of the mass.
Well, that's the basic version that's taught in schools and is 90% incorrect but gets the broad strokes accross anyways. The real truth is way fucking weirder. Remember- everything is travelling at light speed into the future!
And then Starlight appears because she's the 7th element.
Interesting. I enjoyed it.
Thank you very much, this is very well done. I really liked how you handled the characters especially the choices of the elements.
I do appreciate Pinkie pointing out the arbitrary nature of the sadistic choice. Nice way to lessen the blow of the chronoclasm, as does the fact that it literally exploded twice. Looking forward to anything else you do with this, assuming that that Incomplete tag is supposed to be there.
Like, holy damn.
I wish I'd discovered your work sooner. Your storytelling is something I could just read forever.
If only there was some million word multiversal epic that could tide me over...
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Glad you enjoyed! But, sadly, one does not simply allow a main course to 'tide them over'.
(see you in a month. Or two. Or three. Good luck, you'll need it.)
-GM, master of mastero.
Im excited for where this is going
Also i agree with discord theres never enough chaos
Holy smokes, this is heavy
Gripping, but heavy.
How the hay do you churn out all these ideas so fast and easily?
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For every idea I write, there are twenty or thirty I don't. I am a guy with a lot of ideas, too many to put down...
As for the speed, I forced myself to write for two hours a day with a physical pen for several months. I came out of that with a quick mind for the words.
-GM, master of prices.
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Holy carp, I need that kind of commitment myself ;-; You're inspiring
And in a very different world, a Scootaloo felt a sudden pang of empathy for her favorite person without knowing why.
In any case, it should definitely be interesting to see what else comes of this in the future. Especially when the natives makes their presence known. Also, nice touch with Sunset's morphic uncertainty. It makes me wonder what shape she'll have when Twilight pulls her out of the roots.
...wait, multiple chapters? What?
Eh. More content, I guess.
Im super excited for this new adventure and where it goes
An interesting first day in this new world.
Really enjoying this story so far, sad to see favourite pony is gone but her character tag gives me hope.
I see you still tend to occasionally mix up your Sunsets
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You think I'd know better at this point... (Fixed)
Regardless, apologies about the Starlight tag. I forgot to remove it after the story extended beyond the oneshot. Whoops.
-GM, master of gold.
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I'll live but it won't be a good life
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Another interesting chapter.
As always you have a good grasp on the character's personality and emotional state.
It was good to see the characters start to interact with this new world and how the elements are adapting to their new powers.
Looking forward to seeing how the next day goes.
Thank you.
I understand why Celestia poked at Sunset's mental state—better she confronted the loss of her previous home now rather than let it fester—but it still felt a little callous.
A wild Discord appeared! And me without any Ultra Balls.
Oh. Oh. That's a lot bigger than a Torterra.
Fascinating bit of techno-animism with Sunset. The circuits know how they're meant to function, and want to fulfill that purpose.
Meeting with the locals should be interesting indeed. Especially given the mysterious theft. Looking forward to it.
Do you have much of a plot cooked up for this one cus im excited to see how far itll go
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Me and the guy paying for it hammered out a 13-14 chapter outline, so yeah, we know where we're going.
-GM, master of great I used 'me' wrong up there...
Well a dyson sphere is hardly the worst place to end up, you'll never run out of space.
This may prove fascinating. I do so love a good nation-building story, and this reminds me quite strongly of Island in the Sea of Time.
You know, trapping a creature like that is likely only slightly less traumatic than cutting a pegasus's wings off. Just an observation.
Interacting with the locals and creatures from this new would. The more details that come out about the world the more interesting it seems I love how you have given all the locals their own personalities and how their conversations went. Also Discord being Discord.
it was interesting seeing how Celestia dealt with being attacked by the mage and how powerful she can be. Also Celestia being so checky when Twilight was named Queen was a great touch. I guess should say all hail Queen Twilight Sparkle
Thank you for another interesting chapter. Looking forward to the next one.
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I feel it would be more akin to breaking or disabling a pegasi's wings through some means, since cutting off implies that it's permanent disability.
They did force him to get rid of the elevator music. After all, they were trying to make a good impression.
Then it's definitely a good thing they got rid of the elevator music.
Bit of a catch-22 there. She needs information about the world to accurately disguise herself.
Very interesting magical automata. That crystal should be most enlightening... provided it can't regenerate.
In any case, the situation's getting political, and there aren't any convenient windigoes to force the local tribes to work together. Twilight's got her work cut out for her. And they haven't even met Sunset yet. The tech advantage is real.
Long live the Queen. Long live New Equestria. The alternative doesn't bear thinking about.
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Aye, that is the better comparison.
Yay natives i cant wait to learn more about the forest beast
Wraiths remind me of the creatures Picard trapped in a force field.
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Season 3 episode 18 allegiance sttng.
Nice Worldbuilding.
It is always good to see more of what this new world has to offer and learn more about how the creatures interact. Some well-done interactions (I wonder how Twilight would actually smite someone?)
Another good chapter thank you, looking forward to the next one.
"I'm also the resident gadget monkey."
A shame no one preserved Vinyl Scratch.
It had nearly eaten her entire foreleg before Rarity got her to stop. (Unless you meant velocity.
)
I get the feeling everyone will need these sessions. And that's assuming wraiths don't keep interrupting them. Even Dash's omniscience has limits.
In any case, the fuse is lit, though the powder keg is still a ways away. We'll see what else happens prior to the explosion.
See, Twilight's problem with the shapers is that she expects them to be static. They're really not, 'twould be antithetical. they are always changing, always flowing, shifting.
Diplomacy continues. I can't help but suspect that something will go wrong soon, but there are so many potential failure points that I'm not sure which one will strike first. We'll find out soon enough.
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The problem is that their arguments are whirlpools, constantly revisiting the same points and grievances and never actually getting anywhere.
With the possible exception of the Gourds. Because gourds.
I can't help but think how much different the response to the wraith would have been if Pinkie had died to the wraith's poison.
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you cant truly kill laughter, for one to die two other rise in its place.
A good chapter with some great characterful moments, looking forward to the next chapter.
“I don’t exactly… do revenge, Ebony, kay?” That isn't exactly HONEST Pinkie Pie.
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Good thing I'm Laughter then, huh?
"Alone, Laughter doesn’t care how it gets its laughs and smiles, even at the expenses of others, which is a terrible thing. " Pinkie may represent laughter but she is far more than that even back in the first season.
Pinkie Pie: Is someone over there? Who're we gonna squirt? Who're we gonna squirt? Rainbow Dash: [chuckles] Fluttershy. Pinkie Pie: WHAT? [spits] Nononononono, we can't prank Fluttershy, I mean, she's so sensitive. It'll hurt her feelings, even our most harmless prank.
What is interesting is that Fluttershy has been Pinkie's project from the very beginning of the series.
That aside, simply calling Pinkie Pie Laughter is a disservice to Pinkie Pie.
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On a completely different note, I feel sorry for the Wraith and I feel the one who will pay the most will be Ichor.
"key" ponies? Just HOW are they going to deal with Discord?
Silly ghost type ponies.
Me likes VERY much~!
Maybe in the long term. For now...
Well, for now, the wraith may well make a truly terrible mistake. One that could do nearly as much harm to New Equestria as to themselves. Because anything that hurts what little Twilight has left will be eradicated down to the individual atoms. Ichor could end up saving everyone, depending on her choice.