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I half expected that spell Twilight used on Trixie in chapters 12-13 would make a appearance, but you had to make Dash believe that mare on mare action is OK without the use of marecocks, dood.
so far, so good, dood.
well that was certainly interestin way of dealing with dashie......me gusta
<,<............i've found several pics with this situation in mind....lol......gosh dashie's face would be priceless
You know, I was expecting some half baked chapter where Dash forgives then because she's just jealous of the mare love or something then it cuts into some half baked sex scene to make up for it. I'm please to say I shouldn't have doubted your writing prowess. You continue to amaze me by keeping your story in your clop scenes and making them fit, while still being incredibly sexy. Bravo good sir, have a mustache.
Sooo... weird, but it was really good! You are doing great. I am just freaking out over what just happened, otherwise it was really good! Keep up the good work!
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
oh rainbow dash, trying to deny the rumors
Another update to complete the day! Excellent! Tracked eternally!
Why do I have the odd feeling of jealously?
Whoa Twilight must really be loosing it if she thinks rape would make someone see her point. And yeah you cant say it isnt rape since they didnt wait for Dash to allow them but forced her to do it.
If it will "make" Dash see their point ,whatever it should be, you can say "its just a clopfic so deal with it " either way.
Will probably need a Dark tag as it goes on?
I thought there was going to be futa action, but that was interesting lol
So now Twilight is a sexual deviant...COOL!!!
I shudder to think how she will get the rest of Ponyville to change their opinion of Trixie.
I know this story is called 'Of Maids and Mistresses', so Trixie and Twilight will be in thier roles for quite awhile. However, I still have to wonder how Twilight will deal with Trixie's real issue...her past.
Yea whoa I mean Poor dash
I dunno what Twilight did was so
Twilight is such a retard. A hilarious one, though
So good! This was an exelent idea! Just when i was getting bored too! Thank you!
well then......i have no complaints whats-so-ever cant wait to see rainbow come around
The whole village?
suddenly a wild twixiexDash rape appears
Rape is the answer to everything in porn!
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"Twilight literally exploded" Trixie and Rainbow Dash were subsequently jailed for the rest of their days. The end.
I have to say, the premise started good, but then I felt the whole maid thing got a tad overbearing.
It was all good and everything, but this chapter kinda turned me off (and I'm not talking about THAT way). I don't know, there was something about how it was handled (the content, I mean) that just... eh.
Still, I shall hold my judgement for a future date, I suppose.
Oh, I forgot to say... I think this has been the first story (regardless of type) in which Dash actually seems to be straight. Random mussing.
Intriguing...
I wonder though. Is Dash straight, because it seems like she would be in this situation...she seemed to handle it a lot better than most others I think would handle it though (you know, without fists flying and broken teeth flying all around the room, ala me being forced to get my dick sucked off by another guy. I'd be punching like mad out of rage :l.)
Sadly, this is where the story ends...for now. I can't wait to see where this goes, and it seems you've built a pattern for yourself. Two chapters of story to one chapter of fap. Good pattern, it gives you time for exposition, and the fap is spaced out well.
Seems like Twilight and Trixie are two hella good troopers though, they've been at it every single day for the last 3 days now. You'd think either of them would get exhausted :V.
944185 Help us all...
I just have to wonder if it was a male or males that forces themselves upon and basically raped Rainbow Dash in an attempt to prove she's straight or that heterosexual sex is fine if as many would be "me gusta" about it.
Not sure if want anymore. It started out strong, and the maid thing was pretty funny, but this chapter really threw the fun train off of the tracks. It was all lighthearted and stuff, but then I could spot the shitstorm clouds on the horizon last chapter, and I was like "he's not taking it THERE, is he?" Sadly, it did go there, and a lot of the fun was sucked out of this for me. I thought this was going to be a nice Twixie shipfic, but then, BAM! Orgy time. FORCED orgy at that. I'm going to continue to read this for a few chapters and hopefully regain some of the previous feel back, but this changes things.
941976Honestly, I expected the same as well. I thought she was either going to give Trixie the cock, or give Dash it and have Trixie suck her off from beneath the table.
"You don't like us dating? Let me rape you! Why are you flying away?"
This has been quite OOC for a while, but MAN did it ever jump the shark here. Forcing sex on someone isn't the way to go about this, you know.
I agree with Wrabbit. Seriously, what the hell?
...What the hell are you smoking Twilight?
Whoa, Twilight you crazy bitch! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rainbow_Dash.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Trixie_lolface_1.png
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I was going to fave this story. Then I read this chapter. AND THEN SUDDENLY RAPE -- not cool. I mean, even if you get off to that, it's pretty bad form to not give a warning about it.
(also, Twilight as a dom is believable. Twilight as a rapist is not; even allowing for being in a sexual fog/mania the past few days. Trixie is the one I'd expect to have a weak/vague sense of morality, not Twilight. It's like Celestia doesn't exist (as a reason for Twilight to avoid doing insane stuff))
Okay let me say this is not a comment on your writing style ( which is good) but this chapter killed it for me. Although it was not just this chapter this one just pushed it over the edge. I really enjoyed the start of this story, but I feel you have gotten ooc with Twilght. Sor far ooc that I can not continue. Straight up rape and mind manipulation is not something I enjoy.
945170"Oh, I forgot to say... I think this has been the first story (regardless of type) in which Dash actually seems to be straight. Random mussing." Try Xenophilia by anyponydashie. Dash will forever be straight in my head cannon because of that story. It's probably my favourite story of all time.
Duuuuuude
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And this is the only thing that was on my mind the whole time, besides the hot clop action...
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That was the best threesome (involving ponies) I've seen!
WOW. dose this mean Dash will be back to live with Twilight and Trixie too!!
Because that would be swell
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Yeah, I think Twilight's lost it, too caught up in the sexual pleasure and the power bit of being a mistress to realize exactly what she's done. I think she needs to read a book on psychology, because what she just did is more than likely capable of having the exact opposite effect.
I do however, like the dark path this is taking. Oh, sweet sweet darkness, muahahahah!
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Ah, but your assuming she does try to actually take care of it. You saw the bit at the bottom. Trixie is "happy" being her maid/sex-slave, and if she could end up making everyone else happy then...what does it matter? An ignorance is bliss sort of thing, you know.
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I will never watch that episode again without laughing, thank you very much.
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I have a sudden desire to see MPPT3K have a go at this.
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The dominatrix stuff has clearly gone to her head. However, I would suggest you continue reading. For some reason, I have a feeling that things are going to end up biting Twilight in the plot (not literally) at some point in the near future.990582 same to you as well.
Really now? This control Twilight is exerting over Trixie has just gone way beyond creepy and into outright disgusting territory. I refuse to read any more. I don't care what comes next. Good day.
It's a shame; you had a great backstory all set up, but you had to go into brainwashed cultist territory with this plot arc.
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=Critic unable to finish entire article, no review given
As a well read and open minded individual, I feel it is my duty to help writers in every way improve themselves by critiquing. I can't believe I'm saying this, but I have failed you. This is the first time I have never been able to finish a story, fanfiction or elsewhere. To me, this is just too much as much as it pains me to do so, I am unable to press on. I am so ashamed. The story is good but I feel like the characters are varying too far, almost as if they were completely different than the template characters. Trixie's backstory failed to convince me that her submissive attitude was enough to make her a sex slave among other undignified things. Twilight makes me sick. Rainbow Dash makes me feel confused and scared. I have always been an equal rights for homosexuals activist in my community. This somehow makes me feel disgustsd, with the story and myself for thinking about my people so negatively. Check my newest account for whatever reason: Critical Lighthouse.
Me motherfucking gusta my freind! Fav+Like
...Dafuq? OK, so I've determined that this isn't actually a romance story. Just another fucking clopsauce.
I can't help but think that Twilight is abusing the situation.
This can't end well.
Sorry, tried reading the chapter after this one (as in "Diplomacy", not the non-clop version of this chapter), but this chapter has completely killed this story for me. Sorry to dislike the story, wouldn't normally go that far, but I'm not letting it keep the thumbs-up I gave it before this chapter. As an earlier reviewer said, you really jumped the shark on this one.
Again, sorry. I was about to favorite this story, but there's tragicomedy, and then there's "Twilight has mind-raped Trixie into helping her rape Rainbow Dash". So, yeah. No. Just no.
Edit: You know, maybe if I'd known that this was going to be that kind of fic beforehand (I've read, and enjoyed, worse), but I came into this expecting a Twixie story with some clop thrown in. This chapter is more something I'd expect out of an actual dark fic or a straight-up clopfic. Maybe the importance of that demarcation to me is my own fault, but this chapter has to be taken with clopfic logic to not be seen as something tremendously darker than I (can't speak for anyone else) was expecting...
OMG! Rape! How could you!? It was not even like Rainbowdash could say stop and they wou..................nevermind my previous statement, nice chapter
Okay, totally skipping whether or not I liked the cloppy bit, it was unexpected.
Remains to be seen if it's shark-jump impossible to reconcile, but I could see how some thought that.
Still reading. STILL WANT MOAR.
I regret nothing!
3299768 here here!
The way that twilight took control of the situation is confusing to but she is so used to being in control
This is an awesome fic