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First! But now I suddenly feel like a scumbag. Didn't even read it yet.
Edit: Just finished reading. I gotta say I laughed pretty hard at some parts, like “Apologise until I forgive you all over your face...” and “Trixie hopes you weren’t planning on walking tomorrow...” It made me crack up, good writing too.
Competitive sex? Seriously?
This part really had some of the best lines. This story is just so much fun to read.
You know, you probably shouldn't substitute 'clitoris' with 'little knob'. It creates a bit of gender confusion for us British people, since knob means cock over here. Just a piece of advice.
The clubhouse?
I can Imagine it now....
Applejack! Rainbow! What are ya doin in our clubhouse!
Well, ya see AppleBloom, when a Mare and Mare love eachother very much.....
haha great ! i like it ! can't wait for the next chapters !
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Don't you mean ?
I knew it! I knew this would be AppleDash the moment I read about AJ and RD not liking trixie! I Knew it!
I love it
Damn, I bet twilight is pregnant with trixie's kid and trixie is pregnant with twilight's kid. I mean seriously, they should make pony condoms so no one gets worried when the screw around.
Competitive sex....
I loved the AppleDash part
The tsundere is strong with this one...
Now
Man this was HOT! Twilight is going to be so sore. I figure Trixie will wait a few days before her big propos--,I mean, performance.
called it
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It's still little, isn't it?
...I feel horrible, now.
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With some
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First I ever saw of ship cameos. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Trixie_lolface_2.png Well, second actually I guess. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
I suspect the upcoming show will be titled: The Great and Powerful Feels!
Loving it.
Somehow another fan-fic called Luna's Magic Wand made my expectations a little too extreme. The chapter 'Big Adventure, Tons of Fun' had me wishing for more as I read this chapter.
But still. This chapter is as awesome as all the others, perhaps even more so.
Awesome!
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Alright everyone, on three.
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LET THE FUN BEGIN!!!!
Paypack well be dished out IN SPADES!!!
Because AppleDash is best ship!
I was so expecting the CMC to find those two sleeping in the club house.
What's that sticky stuff they're covered in?
I don't know, but it smells weird.
At least it's not tree sap.
i.imgur.com/pomc6.jpg
I'm not even sorry
*Steel's face hits the desk as he keels over, Rainbow repeating his action next to him.*
...Damn...it...not done...not yet...
"Spent...can't move..."
The famous...Rainbow Dash...can't outlast me...eh?
"I'm not done yet..."
Hard to believe we made a competition out of who could last the longest while reading this...
"Fun all the same..."
Yeah...ready for Round 2?
"Wouldn't miss it for the world!"
*Rainbow and Steel smirk at each other and push themselves off the desk. Steel scrolls back to the top of the page, and they share one last glance.*
First one to let go loses...
"Typical rules. We keep reading till one of us loses..."
Let's do this...
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Competitive sex!
"Because why not?!"
*Steel's and Rainbow's face both hit the desk at the same time, panting filling the room.*
Alright...I admit it...it was close for a while there...
"Not bad...not bad at all...I still...still won though!"
I admit defeat...for today. Next time, I'll beat you...
"You...owe me...a hundred bits..."
I'll pay you...once the Cakes...give me my next paycheck...uhh...what day is it today?
"I-I don't remember...brain's kinda fried..."
Same here...how's about a Coke and a nap...then we'll worry about what time it is...?
"I'm in...um...where am I sleeping...?"
You can take the couch...I'm fine right here...
*Steel tears himself off the desk, zipping up his pants.*
Still can't believe we made a competition of this...
"All in good fun, right?"
Yeah. Well then...ahem...I'll uh, get those Cokes...
*Steel pushes himself up out of his chair with some effort, groaning at the new pain festering in his crotch. Rainbow, meanwhile, drags herself over to the couch.*
"Shouldn't the uh...the Cokes wait till after the nap...?"
Sure, why not...? Can you get the door? It stinks to high heaven in here...
"Will do."
*Rainbow pushes herself up into a standing position using the couch as a crutch, and slowly walks over to the door. She rubs her eyes with her non-soaked hoof, and pushes the door open, a pleasent gust of wind cooling the room.*
"Ahhh...that's more like it!"
Righto...got our drinks and I'm ready for my nap.
*Steel crashes down on the couch, leaning back on it and yawning.*
"Aren't I sleeping there?"
Room for two without getting too close.
"No way, man, off you get! You said you'd take the desk, take the desk."
Hmph...party pooper.
"Just looking out for myself."
As if I'd try that. I prefer living, thank you.
"Sure didn't seem like that while we were reading and fapping."
Shut up.
*Steel groans as he walks over to the chair, staring at it for a bit. He puts his foot on it and pushes it under the desk, lying down on the wooden floor. He yawns and quickly falls asleep.*
"Out like a light!"
*Rainbow stumbles over to the couch and crashes down onto it, lasting as long as Steel did before she falls asleep.*
What a fun ride. I always knew Trixie would make a terrific dominatrix. I love the situation she put Twilight in, being at the mercy of other mares and her mistress, and the way she taunted Applejack was deliciously wicked.
I must admit, although this might incite a few eyerolls even though my feelings on this are pretty clear, that there were parts of this chapter in which I couldn't help mentally replacing the word "Twilight" with "Spike." No such thing will happen in this story of course, but it sure would be awesome to see a clopfic that puts him in a similar position. I might even bring myself to write it.
Back on topic, I'm now wondering what Trixie's newest plan is. She's probably going to revise her entire magic act in a less boastful manner with Twilight as her beautiful assistant.
1132430 IKR! Twixie and AppleDash! Two very great ships.
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Sadly, Trixie is still not my most favorite character, but you have gotten me to like her enough to use her emoticons. Anyways, that was an amazing chapter full of expressive detail. I could see every second of this seen happening, and I, not trying to be weird, liked it very much so. I am looking forward to the next chapter very much.
Now, time for chapter review, but first....
1134806 Hey, cool see you again. You should make a fan fiction like that. I would be happy to read it myself because it does sound interesting.
Now, time for the chapter review. It was very much difficult for me to do this because I was too engrossed in the story that I didn't notice any. There was, however, one that I did spot because the wording and everything was weird to the point I have to read over it a second time slowly.
I believe you need a comma in between 'pulled out' and 'Dash'. Otherwise, continuing the review, plot: 5 moustaches (5 being 5/5); characterization, 5 moustaches; visualization, 50 MOUSTACHES!; *ahem* grammar, word usage, etc., 5 moustaches (one tiny mistake can't change anything). Overall score for the chapter.... It is Princess Molestia approved.
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Keep up the good work Unahim, and I will be watching for the next chapter.
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
I dont care much for clop fics and saw that most of ur chapters were not so gave it a go. I have to admit, i dont thing ur story would be as good with out the clop scenes. So favorited and mental note to make sure im home b4 i read the clop chapters to keep from tenting in public lol. Oh and think u for updating regularly id think id go insane if it werent for the few authors who do update my favorites on a regular basis. Keep up the good work.
more just more so keep writing
Awesome chapter can't wait for more keep it up
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Actually that wouldn't be necessary as ponies and other animals are only fertile during the estrus cycle also known as heat. While sentient and gifted with free will they are still ponies so the need for Condoms is moot.
I certainly hope you keep up with the Appledash. They deserve a bit more spotlight than this "happier ever after" moment. Which is cute, mind you, but needs more!
The clop is strong with this one.
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its the best sex!!
you can do it where, when, how many, how long and how ever you feel like without feeling guilty
"... they hadn't lost their touch, ..."
Just wanted to point this little mistake out. :]
I have got to say, that was one of the longest sex scenes that I have ever read in a story. Once again, great job. Now, on to the final chapter.
well, seems like it's going to be a fun tommorrow for Mrs. Sparkle. Bring out the Pinkie Pie Cake!?!
You / you
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Trixie while a sub-par mistress. I an excellent planner.