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NOOOOOO TWILIGHT, NOOOOOO, dood
I skipped over the clop version, but after reading this. My mind is broken, I hate reading Twilight being the bitch in a futa fic. good story, but I am very selectrive in that respect, dood. sorry.
Twilight didn't exactly deserve the 3way pounding by the way, kinda cruel, dood.
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She didn't exactly suffer under it, and she most definitely did deserve some of it Anyway, it's alright if you're selective, just forget this chapter ever existed ^^
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Tsk, tsk.
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Those crazy ponies, man. (Also, this isn't the first chapter where it is mentioned! AJ mentioned it back when she found out what Twi and Trixie did to Dash)
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Thanks! ^^
The magic probably works up enough confusion already, we can't be having that :p
For this whole chapter the song Sticky Sweet by Motly Crew played in my head. In short, me gusta.
The AppleDash was kinda funny. Competing when 69-ing
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I really doubt somepony would design a penis spell for recreational purposes and then not create it in such a way that the use of contraceptives becomes superfluous :p
>updates
Yeah! Fk yeah!
>reads
Well... THAT escalated very quickly.
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In a way, the storm had been brewing for a while now :p
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I adore that character archetype ^^
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Ack! Big words!
Quick, dumb it down before my brain explodes!
Please?
Things appear to be moving to a satisfying conclusion... not that Twilight is going to need satisfaction for a while.
Great chapter. :)
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Alright!
"I don't think someone would make that spell for fun and then make it possible to become pregnant by using it."
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100 bits is the equivalent of 200 dollars, I think, based on apple and pie prices. Ouch!
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Well, I did write a fic in which Spike puts on a costume and gets pounded by three Diamond Dogs while Rarity watches ... No, it's this scene[url], but with ponies. Well, one pony. Who doesn't get a beatdown.
this is probably one of the most messed up stories i have ever read in my life man
it was enjoyable, yeah, but you seriously need a GRIMDARK AS FUCK label to warn people
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Thanks for the error! Maybe you should censor your comment slightly for the sensibility of the ones only reading the censored versions, though! :p I've promoted your con on the blog, my 1200 member steam group, and our forums. Perhaps it'll help ^^
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She was pretending, yes. She finished the costumes in due time, got plenty of rest, then fooled Twilight into believing it wasn't so so she could listen in on them unnoticed. She wasn't expecting it to get smexy, but she certainly didn't mind when it did.
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Well, perhaps if you knew about my previous work (Cheerilee's Garden), you'd understand why I don't see this as grimdark as fuck in comparison :p The tragedy tag should be enough.
I agree with the first guy. Twilight forced into this just because 'it might be fun'? I would have slapped the shit out of trixie, burned her precious clothes then made her get the fuck out of town. and also drugging AJ and RD is HIGHLY illegal. Shame on you.
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I think it's quite normal that a fic that was designed around the idea of including clop chapters isn't as good without them ^^ You can't really cut parts out of stories and keep the same essence.
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Isn't she just?
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It's certainly a good approach, but I have a feeling certain things the ponies eat in the show would prove to be quite bad for a normal pony, so the question is how much their physiology is different...
1141995 That's cause... well... I AM an ass. Plus I find a lot of shit funny that i probably shouldn't... That's my opinion and i stick by it. Have a nice day!
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1142418 Tottaly what i was thinking...
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Can't it be both? :p
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It's a fantasy trope, mate ^^ http://tinyurl.com/ox8p5 Writing "And she fell in the way a feather falls due to the aerodynamical properties of its form in relation to the air resistance." would have been somewhat of a jarring departure from the overall tone of the story. Note that the story never actually says "And thus she fell slowly only because of how light she was, and no other elements were brought into play." It's not always needed to give your readers a full physics lesson, it can work in the background.
Also, while you are correct as to the speed at which she'd fallen if the spell only changed weight, you seem to have grossly neglected the fact that potential and kinetic energy have mass as one of their components, which would have a clear and distinct effect. The formula here is ½ mv². Now, a feather weighs a few grams, let's say 5 grams for this. Let's take 275 kg's as Trixie's weight, as I've been told that's the weight of an average light legged pony. This means that the spell, even if it doesn't change her terminal velocity, would make the force of the impact Trixie's body has to withstand 5500 times smaller. Care to reconsider her funeral? (If I haven't done it incorrectly (and assuming her terminal velocity is 125 m/s), she'd hit the ground with an energy of 39 Joule if she weighed 5 grams [regardless of her original weight], which is less than what her body would have to go through if she's galloping or jumping, so in effect, the spell -does- allow her to drop from any height without sustaining injury, even if it works like you think it does.)
If you're going to impress us all with your science know-how, at least make sure you haven't failed to consider the entire scenario :p
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Well, there'll be a hiatus after the next chapter or two, but after that there may be some more AppleDash to be had... I just wanted to make sure that, in the event that I do not revisit this story for whatever reason, the AppleDash fans have closure. I do want to come back and continue it after taking a break and writing something else for a while, but I don't want to take any risks in case it doesn't happen.
As I said, still 1-2 chapters to go though ^^
I skipped the clop this time for lack of time... that sucks...
Anyway, awesome story!
And the fact that Trixie wanted to be a maid was... surprising!
Looking forward for the next chapter!
(BTW, I stole your idea of making a chapter with clop and a non clop version of the same chapter! )
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That's fine, I stole it too :p (though that was gore/non-gore)
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Thank you for your feedback and the praise! I don't think quite up to par yet, but it's good to know I'm doing some things right ^^
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Aye, the light seems brightest after the darkness, which is why it was necessary to have Twilight be a bit, shall we say, unsympathetic for a while. Thanks for all your feedback up to this point ^^
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That's quite alright, I wouldn't feel too bad about it if I were you :p I'm not going to claim the characters stick close to their canon personas at all (they do not), but they do start off there and the progression is present. Whether an individual thinks the progression is reasonably paced and believable is something else entirely, of course! I'm not really one for making sugar sweet shipfics (of which we have altogether too many, in my opinion, with just about every variation done and accounted for) so I do tend to gravitate towards a higher degree of character transformation. Some are for it, some against it, and I don't really mind either way. ^^ You seem to be a very respectful critic, so that's just fine with me. (and I'd be lying if I said that the fact that you experienced a variety of emotions as a direct cause of the story didn't please me in some way. I'm not really averse to the negative spectrum of emotions--as my previous work attests to--and think experiencing that can hold valuable lessons for all of us.)
Perhaps I will be more lucky in the future, and I shall be able to get a full critic review from you on a different work.
Also: You rate on a scale of 1-1000? Nice.
1136572 YOU wrote Cheerilee's Garden? No wonder Twilight's characterization throughout this story has been....uncomfortable....
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/RonTheDeathEater
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/OutOfCharacterMoment