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Oldtakufanboy


Original username Zoddtheimmortalone. I'm a fan of anime, but I enjoy the classics more. As for My Little Pony, I may not watch it as much, but I do like the show and I also love EG

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Night Light, you stupid idiot! Why the hell are you cheating on Velvet?! Am I the only that want to punch him in the face because of it? You can't treat women... sorry mares like this!!


Otherwise great story. I really enjoyed reading it. Have a like. :)

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Thanks for the thumbs up and glad you enjoyed

It was a truly great story! Oh sexy Velvet is great.:heart: Love it.

"What came out of me?" I asked. "I'm not used to knowing what sex is and nor have I learned about it at school back on Earth. When I got here, I was only eight and nor did I go to school here. The only things I learned are from the library, but sex isn't one of them. I wasn't one of those kids that wanted to have sex badly and get sexually frustrated."

only once question, should he even know what happened or that it was sex when he doesn’t knows anything about it?

"You can cum outside of me and that way I won't get pregnant."

a mistake as my cousin proofed.
I actually kind of wish for a sequel, maybe a longer one with him being Twilights new father and all of them reacting to the others mistakes. Maybe Twilight would believe her mother more and Shining would be the one who starts to hate the mother at first.

Out of all the Human/pony romances I've read, this is by far one of the best ones. The story is good, the situation is believable, and the selection of pony is noice. In addition, the action is really good and the fact that the two could possibly have a child is awesome! I know that there won't be a sequel, but a sequel would make this fic even better!

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Thank you for the comment. Yeah, I personally find this one of my favorite works

This is a very good one-shot.

Velvet is possibly the best pone ever, although Lyra is up there too.

Ok, its official, this is the most fucked up thing Ive ever read on this website. I know we are a bunch of anti social shut ins , but this is rerdiculous. He doesn't know what semen is, but he is over 28 years old. he has zero understanding of sex but he wants to be a father? Seriously? WTF?! Are we as a group this sexually fucked up that we write main characters like this?

"What came out of me?" I asked. "I'm not used to knowing what sex is and nor have I learned about it at school back on Earth. When I got here, I was only eight and nor did I go to school here. The only things I learned are from the library, but sex isn't one of them. I wasn't one of those kids that wanted to have sex badly and get sexually frustrated."

"It's called cum, sweetie," she said. "It's when a male shoots out his load inside of a female so she could get pregnant and have babies."

"Oh shit, did I make you pregnant?"

"No, silly," she said laughing. "It's when you put your penis into my vagina, which is what we're gonna do next."

"You want me to get you pregnant?!"

"You can cum outside of me and that way I won't get pregnant."

"Do you want another child?"

"Another child?"

"Would you like to feel like a mother again? I'd love to be a father. I've spent time helping fillies at an orphanage when I was twenty and worked there for about eight years, until I found myself working for the newspaper."

The Monk

The first half of the story was very well written and I really enjoyed it, but the fic fell apart when it hit the sex scene. I know this particular paragraph has been quoted already, but this is when the immersion was broken for me:

"What came out of me?" I asked. "I'm not used to knowing what sex is and nor have I learned about it at school back on Earth. When I got here, I was only eight and nor did I go to school here. The only things I learned are from the library, but sex isn't one of them. I wasn't one of those kids that wanted to have sex badly and get sexually frustrated."

The character is incredibly self-aware to just guess that this is sex if he was never taught what it was in the first place. This basically rushed all the character development into one paragraph rather than making the fic another 500-1000 words including a well-written backstory. After this paragraph happened the pacing of the fic drastically changed and everything fell apart.

From those words, I felt my pants getting a bit tighter, as my bonder pokes one of her butt cheeks, making her jump.

Dontcha hate it when that happens

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