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Humanity was headed towards a new frontier in the year 2022. The Portgate, a wormhole through time and space, would soon bring man from his little blue globe into the infinite universe. Soon, humanity would be able to forever explore the unknown to its heart's content.
Of course, things are never as easy as they seem.
The first world they find is a beautiful yet dangerous one, populated by monsters both big and small that lurk in the trees. Hardships pile onto those who pass through the Portgate like lead weights, dragging them behind from all angles. And the world is already inhabited by uncannily familiar civilizations wielding strange, mystical powers as easily as they breathe.
The future of humanity and those who it touches are in the stakes as each decision both sides make impacts their worlds for millennia to come. Whether they make the right or wrong ones is up to nothing but fate and fortune.
My first fanfic. I thrive off of feedback, so give it to me, positive or not! I can't improve as a writer if you guys don't tell me how, so why not leave a comment telling me what you think?
Just a quick question after reading this prologue. Is the date right on the quote at the start? I ask since that puts the quote 2 years after the date mentioned in the description. Otherwise an interesting start so far.
I like it so far! Keep up the amazing work!
Nice. When is next update?
7813304 I too would like to know if there's a schedule.
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~one update per week for now, later i'll do one per two weeks if my writing gets meatier
but don't count on me being perfectly on time
7817776 perfect! Thanks for the info!
Looking forward to the updates!
Looking forward to the next chapter
So far I'm reminded of Project Sunflower. I'm looking forward to when they actually get to Equestria.
I like this so far, I am happy you decided to make tech vs magic a bit more balanced than some people do. The hydra was a ligitimate threat and took significant effort to take down.
Egad. The technobabble is really dense.
Maximize a ratio to the fifteenth decimal place?
Really?
Despite it not being a half ton of dynamite they're using, I can't help but think of this:
EDIT: Also, great story so far. It's got that "this is gonna be a good one" feeling about its mixture of style, tone, atmosphere, and pacing that's just so hard to pin down.
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Gosh darn it you beat me to the punch. I was thinking the exact same thing about the ending.
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This... feels a little out of character. Being untrained in combat has never stopped them heedlessly dragging everypony into danger before.
They certainly did better than the Royal Guard in... well, every showing of the Royal Guard. 
7858785 Oh god don't do it, guys!
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To be fair, it does depend somewhat on the velocity of the explosive. As anyone who's watched Mythbusters will tell you, lower-velocity explosives like ANFO push more while higher-velocity explosives like C-4 rip and tear more.
7858785 I think as thinking the exact same thing, I wonder how some pony are going to react to a rain of meat?
7858934 Well it could easily be chalked up to experience, having dragged her less combat able friends into danger in the past, Twilight might not wish to keep making that mistake over and over. After all she's really smart, I an in the club that go with genius level, and she does learn from her mistakes . I wouldn't put it past her to now bring royal guards to situations she knows are dangerous.
Pretty good. Don't forget you need terminating quotes on speech. " Like this.". And make sure of your capitalization, Rainbow Dash etc. I'm at work so I can't get more detailed, sorry.
Edit: "And staring ones," Minalkra said, "to let us know when it picks back up."
7859499 But... Friendship is meat-shields!
7860291 But being meat shields is all the royal guard is able to do haven' t you noticed ?
I like the part where applejack heard the gunfire off in the distance
Is the standard for that Princess Cakelestia's plot, or Princess Moonpie's plot?
Well, the description made this sound interesting, but I only got half way through this chapter before the stupidity drove me away. Basically everything is wrong from the facility layout (the portgate should be isolated in a separate structure for safety) to the expedition plan (there should be a heavy military presence to guarantee security and build a fortified base camp), and the problems run far too deep to be fixed without completely rebuilding the setup and probably revising the character backgrounds as well. You clearly failed to do even the most basic research (the Stinger is an anti-aircraft missile and thus completely useless here) or think through the logic of the setup from the perspective of whoever is calling the shots on this project, and it completely sinks the story.
First of all, using C4 to eliminate a giant body would not be the plan of anybody of military training. The blood of the beast alone would probably attract by the animals so smart thing to do would be to change location. Plus the loud noise of the explosions will also attract the possibility of encountering more creatures and it would be a waste of a possibly precious resource, i.e. the C4.
As for why the other members of the main six not going to scouted out the sound:
1 that is not how they do things.
2 Rarity Has already shown survival capabilities as well as combat abilities
3 Fluttershy Is an expert on all animals so she would be a essential to encountering a possibly new species and when it comes to animals with the exception of dragons she has sown very little hesitance when encountering them. The only exceptions are creatures of considerable size.
4 Pinkie's Pinkie sense and unpredictability have shown a multiplications to be an asset
Celestia is over 1000 years old, She's smart enough to know not to underestimate a potential enemy just because they lack magic And she's a military leader as well she would send scouts
I guess the Terrible Trio never heard about the Oregon Department of Transportation attempt to blow up a decaying whale corpse back in the early 70s with several hundred pounds of dynamite.
...Where are all the character tags?
What happens when Andrew describes Luna?
My first thought regarding the Bluntforce and this line:
[quote"DON'T SHOOT!"]Led me to this song:
I'm actually enjoying this story. Please write more!
Spaghetti. Spaghetti everywhere...
I knew it was coming but it was still nice to see a little role reversal here. Normally it’s human gets injured, comes out of the Everfree, healed by ponies. This time it’s ponies go into the Everfree, get injured, get healed by humans.
It really does change the dynamics of early interaction between everybody.
I'm sorry, why are they running from Timberwolves? Let's forget that Twilight could easily turn the lot of them to kindling with no effort. Why doesn't she just teleport them away? Or hell, they have wings. They can just fly away...
And then the human characters get to rescue the ponies from their horribly contrived doom.
I wonder how rainbow dash will react to the humans.
7998860 Well she got shot, so I imagine she won't be very happy about her predicament. Being helpless isn't something she enjoys either.
8000176 true, true.
So, DerpiDitzi, is there any upload schedule that we should follow, or is it loose and random? Just curious because I can't wait for the rest of the story, so I want to know if I can stop constantly checking to see if a new chapter was made.
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I upload a new chapter every other Friday - so this Friday. It's going to be pretty short, though, since I haven't had much time these past few days.
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Sweetness, thank you. I await more with baited breath.
If said soldier, scientist, and engineer were voiced, what would they sound like?
8030742 "Soldier, Medic, and Engineer from TF2" is the first thing that came to mind, and so is probably a terrible idea.
I feel like this story should get a POV from AJ and RD, just so we can see into their minds. Obviously they aren't comfortable with the idea of aliens, but is it based out of fear, anger, or something else? I'm curious to know.
7995328 panic and the fact that the timberwolves had the advantage with the ambush and the ponies not being able to see them in the woods well enough i presume
Also, it's likely a bit hard to hit something with magic if you don't know where the target is
This is very interesting
*tracks story*
8042675 I really don't like panic as an excuse for characters to ignore the obvious and do something stupid, especially characters who are used to danger like they are.
She doesn't have to aim to throw up a shield or teleport away or blow a hole in the canopy.
I’m surprised that Luna didn’t try just whacking Twilight on the back of the head to get her attention. Surely that would be preferable to going in blind?
I'd almost forgotten that stuff was happening on the other side. I'm guessing, in your view, Luna can't distinguish individual beings from one another from her dream-walking UI? Great work. Can't wait to see more.
8063491 Ah, but where would the suspense be in that? ;)
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There may not be, but it would make more sense for her to have tried and been unconsciously ejected from the dream or for the dream to have collapsed as Twilight woke up. As it is Luna is left holding the idiot ball.
Nice touch up on the characters. But here's a suggestion. Let one of them have a somewhat troubling past.
You kept writing discrete — individually separate and distinct — where you meant discreet — intentionally unobtrusive.