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PourMeADrink


I Drink And Write One Story. Slowly. Now I Just Drink. I Have No Idea What I'm Even Doing Anymore

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There comes a point when you can no longer run from the things you've done. Ryan Williams believes that he has reached this point, but sometimes, just as we are about to close one door, another opens before us, changing our lives in ways we could never have imagined.

Update: Redemption now has a live reading! Done by Teraunce, you can find it here: https://youtu.be/W4vLoB3Lbk0
Go give it (and his channel) some love :D

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 525 )

I read the first 2 chapters and I can say that was fuckin' amazing!

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Fucking amazing was pretty much what I was going for :rainbowlaugh:
Thanks!

Yes! I love it!
Forge on, Your Imperial Awesomeness!

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We are pleased by thy comment. Glad you liked it, thanks for the read!

D'awwwww, these ponies, they drive me to HHHHHHNNNNNGGGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!

D'AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW- "Dead"

when I read my little dashie I died inside this makes me happy again:heart:

CUTE DOESN'T EVEN FUCKING DESCRIBE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage:

Oh, no. This is gonna get depressing, isn't it? Oh jeez, after My Little Dashie, I don't know if I can medically handle another heartbreak.
...
On the other hand, I hear they're coming up with great substitutes for exploded hearts these days.

(Long story short, I like this, you are awesome, please continue)

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

Damn... I never thought I would see someone else attempting to do a My Little Dashie type story. Dude so far I am very impressed, I'm going to have to keep reading, not just find out how and why Celestia and Luna came to our world but also for the shear joy of the story. I hope to see more ~Celestia's Paladin

Just wanted to throw out a big thank to everyone who's so far read it, and an especially big thank you to the comment love I've been receiving, it's been unexpected, but greatly appreciated. :twilightblush:

Please continue to rate and review. Now if you'll excuse me, I have to print these comments out and eat them, so as to gain their power. :trixieshiftright:

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Not a problem, and reviews are a good source of fiber so you gain much more that their power. :twilightsmile:

this is amazing

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Don't forget to cook em' first. I ate comments raw once, got a whole stomach of paper cuts for my trouble. That was not a good day.

This is a very interesting story, and I'm quite sure you're soon going to throw something in to mess with our emotions.

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*Slyly glances at the sad tag:moustache:

COME ON! I CAN,T WAIT ANYMORE UPLOAD THE NEXT CHAPTER NOW:flutterrage:!!...........Oh...I mean...If that,s okay with you :fluttershysad:

I :heart: this story. Please update it soon. :pinkiehappy:

They are so cute when there fouls.....then they grow up:fluttercry:.

Amazing. 5 STAR!!!! please update, I can hardly wait.

A five star story without a doubt. I eagerly await the next chapter. I can't wait to see how Ryan handles 'Tia and Luna during their teens, and how this ties in with MLP (assuming that it does, in fact, tie in). Perhaps it'll even go full circle? (ie, end with Celestia/Luna starting to tell Twi, or maybe the entire mane 6, about their "Father")

First!!! sorry had to.

This was a very good chapter, I can't wait to see the next.

Well i am very disappointed due to the chapter length, but you did leave a good cliffhanger to look forward to.

Anyway.. one question this isnt going to turn Out like my little dashie is it? :unsuresweetie:

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

HEY!!! I just finished reading My Little Dashie again, then I notice this got updated. First I saw of it. And yours, sir... Is good. Of course, the same with MLD, it is not sad for me, like these other peoples. This is funny! Freaking hilarious. Not in the same powerfully, rib-hurting, comedic way MLD was, but in its own, weaker flavor, yes. Bravo, my good man, on a job partially done well. I'll never understand the 'sad' part of this whole... thing. Even if somepony generously took the time to explain it, I doubt that I would end up "shedding manly tears at this." Comments like that are a no-go for me, anyways.

And I leave you, the same way I did in My Little Dashie- expecting more for me to laugh at.

Boo-hoo-hoo? Nuh-uh

More like Tee-hee-hee. :rainbowlaugh:

An excellent read, hoping to see more from you in the future :twilightsmile:

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Some one had to, glad it was you :raritywink:
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I'm really glad you enjoyed it, thanks :rainbowlaugh:
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Yeah, I'm not too happy with the length either, but the story wouldn't let me do it any other way (if that makes sense). As to your question, no, this isn't going to turn out like MLD, it'll have it's own ending :pinkiesmile:

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Uhh...I guess thanks?

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I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm hoping that chapter updates will become a little more fluid and semi-regular (maybe I need more fiber?). :trixieshiftright: And thanks for reading!:pinkiehappy:

101420 Not a problem :twilightsmile:
As for chapter updates, don't try to force em, I'd rather wait for gold than get silver right away :rainbowlaugh:

101420 Ha!
Dumfounded, are we? It's ok. I'm probably the only one that laughs in the face of great sadness/cuteness/etc. Heck, I'd laugh at grimdark. But so far everything with such a tag, I don't see the grim or dark.
Yeah, there is something wrong with my head for me to comedy where all others see... tear-jerking sadness, or something like that.
Patiently awaiting the next chapter, good sir!

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Glad you liked it, thanks!:twilightsheepish:

Just from the comments I really want to read this... but sadfics do unpleasant things to my head.

...I love it. The writing is good, the story is sweet, Ryan seems believabl, and it's generally a good fic all around
:pinkiehappy:.

This is sweet and piqued my curiosity. :)

But could you maybe slow down a little? Ryan's introduction to our Equine friends took quite a while compared to the other 2 chapters, which felt a bit rushed. I would have loved some more exposition on caring for your mythical foal!

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.

Sir, yours is the kind of talent that got me reading fanfiction in the first place. It's a real treat when you find a shining, brilliantly-cut gem like this in the midst of fool's gold and glass. I thoroughly enjoyed all three chapters, and even if this last was a little shorter than the rest it felt to me like it ended as it needed to. Additional content would've been nice, but the chapter closed well, so rest easy on this point alone.

Since you seem to have both plot direction, character development, pacing, and overall tone and atmosphere well in hand (my usual pleas and advice rendered when I comment on sites such as these), I leave you with this one last note, which I think hearkens back to a single line in Chapter Two: There is a significant difference between "tilting" one's head, and "cocking" it.

For the love of two little fillies who in another time and place might have been the god-queens of a magical paradise, please keep writing - this is the kind of serious literary ability that brings our fandom, and the world of storytelling at large, to greater heights.

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You never know until you give it a try. What if it's only just a little bit sad?:trixieshiftright:

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Glad I could cause a fit of pique (see what I did there?) :pinkiehappy:

Yeah, I took a bit of time working the meet up between Ryan and the two sisters, but don't worry over much, the majority of this story is as much about Ryan trying to be father to two mythical beings as it is about them growing up in a world not their own. Hopefully, it won't disappoint when it's all said and done. :pinkiesick:

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:twilightblush: Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! I shall endeavor not to disappoint, and you're right, there is a difference between a slight tilt of the head and an out right cocking to one side. My only excuse (which has never failed me) is that I wrote most of this while under some form and level of inebriation or other. :derpytongue2: I like to refer to it as 'tapping my liquid muse', which while great for content, does harbor certain deficiencies.:pinkiesick:

211474 Thanks! You're a fantastic reader!:rainbowlaugh:

Not clunky at all:twilightsmile:

still loving this fanfic, but im pretty sure youre going to make me cry:fluttershysad:

keep up the good work!

Good luck with EQD.... You'll need it.

The one time I submitted something to EQD, the response I got was so awful that I decided to never submit any of my stories again. I don't need that kind of stress in my life. It's better to just stick with FIMFiction.

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Quite a lot of the pre-readers are very snooty, only accepting the stuff they like opposed to really good stories, if you are a god-send with grammar and spelling but you have a really bad story they'll still accept it. Like Fallout: Equestria.

But I digress, the chapter is amazing, it's the perfect length and seeing the reactions of Celestia and Luna were priceless.

An excellent chapter, looking forward to what you have coming next :twilightsmile:

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Everybody cries the first day *Evil Laugh:trixieshiftright:*
Seriously though, I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. And Thanks!:pinkiehappy:

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I actually submitted it way back after I posted chapter 2, I just needed to correct some minor tensing issues in one of the chapters before they'd accept it. I think I got most of it on some drunken night or other, and then sort of never got around to finishing. I also kind of wanted to wait until I had some kickin cover art and a couple more chapters before trying again. :moustache:

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So your sayin I got a chance!:derpytongue2:
But thanks, I figured that since the whole thing has sort of half-assedly been from Ryans pov so far, I figured I'd try doing the adoption bit (which I hearby trade mark as 'A Reverse Vader' ) from Celestia's. Hopefully, it came across ok. Thanks for the comment, and hopefully it stays entertaining.

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