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A chance encounter in the park allows Sunset to clear the air with an old rival. Upon realizing they have more in common than they knew, Sunset takes a step she never saw herself making, but she will take the time to do it right.
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This was adorable. That and I'm a sucker for second chance stories. Speaking of which will we be seeing more of this pairing in the future?
7256471 yes i plan on making another story but once i get a little bit more comfortable writing again i actually wrote this a while ago and then i kind of got alot of crap on the google doc and almost deleted it because of that but im glad i didnt
Read. Pretty good. I'd recommend it to anyone.
The story itself is good, if a bit rushed in places. The big problem that I'm seeing is a big lack of mechanical polish. There are numerous, consistent, and pervasive errors with grammar and punctuation. Commas that aren't need, missing commas where they are needed, misusing homophones.
Which, again, isn't to say I dislike the story. It just lacks quality editing.
I loved
It is one of the best I have read 
no matter misspellings, that helps do better
I hope you continue writing more of them
in the future
good work
I would highly recommend this story to pretty much anyone, even if it has a couple of spelling and grammar errors. Keep up the good work!
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im gonna go back and fix it up but not atm cause of certain people who almost discouraged me from ever writing this story
7257069 OK.
7257076 but other than that i am really proud of this story and i definitely now because of everyone who liked favorited and commented well i wiil write more definitely
7257080 Yay!
Do you think you could edit my story when I'm done with it? It's Teen, Romance, Slice of Life. The characters are Scootaloo (Main), Rainbow Dash (Side character, not quite background character, a bit more than that), and Cheerilee, (Minor/Background character).
7257088 hugs :D thank you soo much everyone who did and Thank you to The Abyss for pushing me to post it
7257092 Look at my last message? I changed it a bit.
SO CUTE!
7257155 glad you like it
That was a cute story and I really enjoyed reading it! I can always get down with reading some good SunDagio stories.
7257838 thanks :D im glad you liked it
7257069 don't worry
you are a good writer friend
7258262 thank you that made me smile :D
7258282 that makes me smile too
7258594 yayy :D
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7257838 so to those who have commented(which is why im tagging all of you) Im currently in the process of thinking of doing a story several months to a year after the events of this story..:) but it might take me some time to do it
7259086 Take the time. There's no shame in being thorough. Again, enjoyed the story, it just needs a little love in the mechanics department.
7259099 oh yeah :) i worked on non-pony projects to kind of get better at the mechanics while this kinda..sat and gathered dust but i finally because of all my wonderful friends.. got the courage as i said to post this
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7259203 im already 600 words into the next story
7265859 that's great!
but do not try too hard
This was cute. I really enjoyed seeing a softer side to Adagio.
7282499 Then you'll probably enjoy the next story i do. :) its kindof a sequel to this one
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to all of you who have read and commented there is a sequel up :D https://www.fimfiction.net/story/333996/heartbeat
Wow I'd never imagined that Adagio could be so soft, this has inspired me.
7308075 :3 im glad you liked it
7308106 It was nice.
Cute... 'tis cute.
Sundagio done right, i approve
I love it, it's good to see a softer side of Adagio. Although one question I have is where the sexual content is that requires the Sex tag. Is it the girls' make out session, the implication Sunset made at the end...? It's not that big of a deal, but I'm curious.