It’s never easy to get along with one’s parents. It’s even harder when they gave you way and denied you your birthright. This is the story of Sunset Shimmer and how she fell out with and returned to speaking terms with her mother Princess Celestia of Equestria.
This happens between Rainbow Rocks and Friendship games. Human Twilight (Or Science Twilight, whichever you prefer) would have add a whole layer of awkward.
Annual 2013 “The Fall of Sunset Shimmer” is also cannon to this but I cover all you need to know to follow the story in the prolog.
Chapters (3)
I hate Celestia in this story, she so screwed up. I really hope she realized how much of a failure as a mother and teacher she was to Sunset.
Sunset has ever right to be angry at her mother.
Persoally if i was here i walk up to her and....POW! give her a black eye before walking off, saying i don't need you anymore.
this story needs a sequel
But if Celestia is her mother, who was her fathe-
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7019859 sorry about that somehow I missed I had the complete box checked instead of the incomplete. So, Ya now it complete.
and ive justlost interest in this story
first the forgiveness bit was way to fast considering the pain it cuased
2nd you should have never brought in human sunset as in there should be no human sunset (it even seems that is true for the movies)
3rd i was expecting this story to be about sunset reconsciling with her mother but not moving back to equestria that goes against the theme of the show when you do this the messege you give is this "friendship is only magic if your friends are ponies if they are human goahead and wash your hooves of them they dont matter even if they where the ones to be there for you at your lowest point" the humane 5 are sunsets friends
This ... is way too rushed. There was no build up to reconciliation or even explanations from Celestia to Twilight that Sunset is her daughter. Human Sunset isn't needed, and shouldn't exist at all if Sunset is Celestia's daughter, as there is no way Principle Celestia wouldn't recognize her.
Sunset also has no real reason to return to Equestria this suddenly, she has life in the human world and friends that she cares about. Not to mention finishing school.
This has always been a good premise for a story, but it's not one you can just rush. Whether Celestia is Sunset's biological or adoptive mother, the basic idea is that she was negligent to Sunsets needs and focused more on being a teacher then being a mother. That is not something that resolves quickly and neatly.
Slow down, plot it out, explore the conflict and emotion.
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Thank you for your comments. I going to go back and rewrite it now.
For the time being I cliped the second chapter at Sunset leaving the party but parts before that may get rewritten (it just the place before it went off the rails).
I see now I was using earth!Sunset as a plot device for her quick turn around.
7025376 well then if you are going to change things i will be fallowing this stroy again *Smile*
The hay is wrong with ppl critizising about stuff like NEED to be happy ending and stuffs like mad? I liked the idea! You got my follow so the rest who are to stuck up on bad details can leave!
7047233 they commenting on the first version of the chapter which had a human Sunset and an unclear ending (it appeared Sunset was moving back to Equestria, that wasn't what was happening but I saw why they thought that).
The story has promise, and while a happy ending is nice, I perfer a bitter sweet ending.
The damage is great, Sunset was abandoned by her mother who thought she was doing the right thing.
Instead she adopted Cadance and such...Sighs...No, I don't think Sunset will return for good, Equestria was never Sunset's home thanks to Celestia poor decision making.
She may visit, but only that, as for calling Celestia mother ...no, Celestia was never Sunset mother, she threw it away for Poltics, and took Cadance as her daughter to the public.
Time heals all wounds but the scars last forever.
Yay a update love the feels
Awwww, it's complete? I wanted to see Celestia's reaction to the letter, and possibly them meeting again, and making up.
glad you update thoe sunset should have said she is also glad about going through the mirror as it lead her to her friends
also i dont recall was it said before sunset and twilight are relacted cus i dont like that revelation
7273330 Agreed, and I would also like to see them hash out their issues more deeply. Celestia has a lot to explain.
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I would also like them to reconcile but I could do in the space I had. The main problem is this was Sunset's story but Celestia also needs to change. Right now I am working on prequel/side story covering Luna 'talk' with Celestia. After exploring Celestia's side of the story then we will see if they can get past thier differences and reconcile in a sequel.
7289695 Ah, all good then, and other side of the story? Even better! Keep up the good work!
7289695 I look forward to it.
it feels incomplete.
I rather nto see them reconcile at all. Celestia fubar it baddly, and there no way Sunset should see her as a mother, she was never there for her as she should been.
Even if they do make peace it won;t be as mother/duaghter or student ethier, the damage was done and would take years to heal or fix.
i also hate to say this but Celestia handled everything inthe past like Politcs, and not a mother.
Adopting Candance as she did was a political move in the end.
I love to see what or how Candance woudl react if she heard the story, shock hurt horrfied for Sunset and understanding why Sunset dispised her if they met a few times alone.
7289695 yeah! cuz this just feels like it is incomplete and cut off halfway through.
This really does still feel incomplete, but I like it.
Worst case scenario three my brother hears the portal is open and charges through and scares Flash. Celestia knows he gave the pony version enough trouble
I was honestly hoping for that to somehow happen.
I read it, but felt that it could have been longer. It was short and to the point. Nice idea, but overall for a story it felt it could be longer.
I Loved this story, honestly I wouldve liked to see more of Sunset and Celestias relationship rekindle or Sunset meeting Luna, hopefully this gets a sequel eventually
Actuallly, rereading this on second thought, nah, I dont think Sunset and Celestia should reconcile, from rereading this I can definitively say that Celestia has no right to have a happy ending in this scenario. At least, I would say Luna and Sunset could possibly have a relationship to some extent as it is completely fair since Luna didn't do anything wrong in this circumstance, Celestia on the other hand just abandoned her daughter, picked her back up and delegated her to only being a student position and not even daughter. Just to rub in the burn an ascended Sunset after the friendship games would've been nice.
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Cadance was Celestia's distant adopted niece.
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Whoopie Doo Dad Daaa...Doesn't change anything she took cadence in and the message was sent.
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Yeah, I know.
Are we gonna get a sequel, its desperately needed and I would love it.