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TheBrianJ


I am a conglomerate of Engineeriological and Writeological forces with a Ponypreneurial spirit.

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One year ago, there was an incident in the town of Modus. Many ponies got hurt; one pony was blamed. A pony who was different. A pony who never fit in. A pony whose entire life changed in the blink of an eye.

One year ago, Night Glider was exiled from Modus. Now, it’s time to go home.

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I'm excited to see where this goes! Onward to Modus.

“Night Glider, who are you trying to convince?”

I like this line a lot.

Special Thanks: Raz, Props, Skirts, Pilot, and SS&E

Skirts is so good at editing that he's two people :trollestia:

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This is very strange because I distinctly remember typing "CSquared" when I was putting that in.

Like, I'm not joking here. I SWEAR I did that. What in the fuck.

Off to a pretty solid start. Though, I think Night Glider's gonna be in for a rude awakening. Trying to get some closure and contacting her parents are all well and good, but if she's expecting to find a home, I expect she'll be sorely disappointed. It might just be a by-product of being dragged around the world while I was growing up, but I've always felt that the home you make for yourself is more important than where you happen to come from. Especially when where you come from rejected who you fundamentally are, as in Night Glider's case. I guess we'll see. Based on your projections for this fic's length, I expect things'll be a bit more complicated than they first appear. I, for one, am looking forward to it.

ooooooh, I'm loving this...

... also, if you want another editor to look it over, consider me available.

Modus is sounding worse and worse for a holiday destination.

More than ever, I find myself doubting that she'll find what she's looking for in Modus. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Modus sounds less and less desirable to go to.

Am I correct in assuming that the other named ponies (and Starlight herself) will be making an appearance?

And now she has two friends!

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What do you mean by Other Named Ponies? As in the Equal Four? Because they were in Chapter 1.

So let's see... we've got the incident that got her exiled, an upcoming conflict, and a very good framing here.

And yet, after 4 chapters, we still don't really get how she's different. Wings? Coat color? Strength?

You... you're touching close to the limit for me... hopefully we'll be getting an answer soon?! :pinkiegasp:

Either way, you've earned the like from me so far with excellently structured and timed introduction chapters. :pinkiesmile: If we have a payoff on the how within one, maybe two chapters? Especially if it's unique and epic? Then at that point will the favorite be earned.

Looking forward to the next few chapters!

I seriously think this story warrants the Mystery tag at this point. I'm itching to know what this "difference" is.

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Thanks for the kind words!

As far as the secret goes... the official "reveal" will be in a few chapters, and I can promise you everything will be explained in full. THAT SAID... this isn't going to be a blind reveal that nobody can see coming. There will be clues. In fact, maybe there already HAVE been :pinkiehappy:

7269714 I'm tired, have a headache, and took multiple times for me to read this chapter, and the previous ones. So this is my guess. It's probably sexuality or gender or something like that. Based on what I remember from the first chapter.

I'm about 90% sure it is bat ponies.
There was reference to a hunt, and I can't think of any other pony tribe that would hunt (except maybe seaponies, but they're out for other reasons). It would also explain Night Glider's talent for heightened awareness of her surroundings.

"Night Glider, open this gate! Night Glider, tear down this wall!"

Hehe, sorry.

You made Starlight Glimmer more creepy. Nice work. :) Or as I call her, Butt Crack Glimmer.


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Yeah... good luck un-seeing that.

Hey! This is pretty good!

Woohoo! It's alive.

“Sure,” Night Glider replied. “I know you, Dusty. You’re just looking out for me. I appreciate it, but I’m ready to do this.”

“Well, that’s what’s important,” Dusty said. “So, got any other stops before you go?”

“Nope,” Night Glider said. “Straight shot to Modus. Normally takes eight hours to get there from Palmacolta.”

“And you and I both know you can make it in six. So, what are you gonna do when you get there?”

“Listen, Dusty,” she said, clearing her throat. “It’s been so great to see you, but I think it’s time I hit the road again.”

Dusty nodded. “Got any other stops before you make it there?”

“Nope,” Night Glider said, getting to her hooves. “Straight shot to Modus from here. Nothing between me and… and home.”

An odd repetition. It's not word for word, but it is perhaps a bit too similar to sound right.

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Oh wow, nice catch, haha. Made a few edits there. Thanks!

I'm sensing a theme here. That Night Glider's so caught up in looking for the place that she thinks should be her home, and the ponies that should be her friends, that she's ignoring her actual home and the ponies who actually want to be her friends.

I have to wonder if Modus is populated entirely by thestrals or a similar race.

The griffons said that there weren't any "normal" ponies and descriptions of the ponies of Modus has been conspicuously absent.

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- A town of "Different" ponies.
- This town engages in hunts, indicating a taste for meat.
- Town flag is moon themed.
- Night Glider seems to have talent, or training, in navigating by sound (like echolocation)

It's thestrals/bat ponies. I'm calling it.

7418304 There were hints at least several chapters ago, when they were talking about how she couldn't properly keep watch at night and stuff.

Ima read this later on, nice start!

NIGHT GLIDER~ :yay:

You know, for some reason it never occurred to me that they might be bat ponies, but it does make a lot of sense. It would explain why Night Glider was an outsider, why they go on hunts, why the town is shaded, and why Night Glider can use a form of echolocation. Not to mention the fact that none of the other citizens of Modus have been given a physical description. I mean, I guess we'll have to wait and see, but I'd almost be more surprised if that didn't turn out to be the case.

As much as I love this story, holy crap does it make me angry. That's probably a good thing.
6/7 eggs

“... I hate Modus.”

Yeah, I don't blame you.

Okay, I'm almost positive they're all thestrals, but my god you are driving me crazy with the suspense.
This is a great story though, so I'll let it slide.

Calling it now, the ponies of Modus didn't like her because she's part bat, right?
It makes sense, given the limited clues we've been given.

7286030 sorry, old-ish comment, but there is one thing in the previous chapter that sealed that deal.
she used echolocation to determine where the eels were as they were attacking.

No matter her thoughts on Modus, she should still see her family. Because really, family is usually all you can fall back on.

The fact that Luna is not even getting mad about how the the thestrals treated Night Glider makes me quite angry.

“... I hate Modus.”

"Good. Because you... kinda slept straight through your time to visit your parents."

"What."

"But you don't want to visit them anymore, so it all works out!"

Somewhere there's a meteor with this town's name on it.

So did I miss something, or have we not learned what makes night glider different yet?

Anyway, great story. Very under rated. Keep it up!

Why is Luna not getting upset about this? She knows how the town is and how they would treat anything not like them, but why is she not angry with them for treating Night Glider like s***. It's like she's shrugging and saying "it is what it is". She's the Princess of the Night! The townspeople are batponies! I might have this wrong, but I'd think they would treat anything she says as Word of God (though they might be so far out that they are out of the loop about everything).

I'm sorry. I DO like the story, but this just bothers me.

However, the story isn't over yet, so something may happen in regards to that or other surprises. I look forward to your next update.:twilightsmile:

7567538 Even from the perspective that Night Glider doesn't necessarily need to know exactly what Luna is planning to do with Modus, counseling that deliberately refrains from questioning a scapegoat's decision to jump right back into abuse is unethical.

Put bluntly, Luna should have told her it was a bad idea to go back there, same way anyone should be prepared to tell a battered woman it's not a good idea to keep going back to her husband. Especially when she is, you know, Dream Princess.

7493516 I think it's because the rest are bat and she isn't.

Going great. I can see why Night Glider would be frustrated with Modus. Keep it up.:twilightsmile:

Just a question, is this complete now or incomplete because usually epilogues mean the end but the incomplete status, which is equivalent to that of every thing, clashes.

Also, YAY. Love this story, very enjoyable. Just another question, so what is Modus exactly? I know it is a racist place, but who lives their? I can't write a question for me life can I? I'll just end this comment mid sente-

-King of Eggs

7675594 Modus is a whole town of Batponies.

Congrats on a successful ending! :pinkiehappy: Nice work as always, my friend.

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Oh god, I knew I forgot something. Yeah, the story is complete :)

And Modus is (putting this in spoilers just in case) an entire colony of just bat-ponies/sarosians. Night Glider was born to bat-pony parents, but as a mutation; she is just a pegasus, although she does posess some bat-pony traits such as increased hearing, echolocation abilities, and better agility while flying.

7675772 Huh, I was thinking it was the other way round but then I realized Night Glider is a Pegasus. During one of the chapters when it mentioned her hearing made me believe that she was either a bat pony (despite the fact she wasn't) or is just born abnormally. I guess I was wrong on both accounts. I don't know if the black box of annoyance needs to be used but I just want to use it.

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