Starlight won, or so she thought. Never waiting for Twilight to return to the Castle, she went back in time and changed it on her own, before heading back through the time portal.
Where she steps out is a time she's never seen before.
Fortunately, more than one pony in Equestria's history has fiddled with time.
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Honestly, I think Starlight is a direct decedent of Starswirl, they have the same talent for time-space and destiny magicks. Still and intresting story.
A cool alternate ending. It occurred to me that Starlight now has an even better revenge than before:
She should simply send a message to Twilight Sparkle, apologizing for stalking her recently, and politely inform her that Starlight has become Starswirl the Bearded's personal apprentice in a secret location Twilight can never find. See how Twilight likes them apples!
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Huh. Wouldn't have foreseen a changeling time traveler. It would certainly make it easier to fit into various different eras - sort of like The Journeyman Project. But now that little bit is done, I liked this story quite a bit. Nice to discuss the ins and outs of time travel with someone who knows what they're talking about.
My only concern was that Starlight was a bit too... sensitive, maybe? Starswirl changes her opinions in a remarkably short time for how long Starlight had spent planning her (exceedingly intricate and technically challenging) revenge. Obviously spending ten times as many words to tell the same story wouldn't have helped, and having the futility of your quest thrown in your face by a nearly omniscient wizard is probably a bit harsher of a reality check than most people get most days, but it still felt a tiny bit rushed.
Either way, rushed or not, this story was fun; glad I read it, and interested in seeing more of your work!
6715489 I kind of fell into a bit of 'token other races' there with the Changeling. Between Star Swirl, Starlight, Dr. Whooves,
and Minuette there were already five ponies, so I decided other races needed some representation.
It's funny, because when I was writing, I was constantly hoping I'd be able to wrap up, and then I'd spend another three or four paragraphs because I didn't want to shoehorn Starlight into just instantly giving up her plans, so it takes a few twists and turns in the conversation before she finally gives it up. Her whiny outburst is a pretty good indication she doesn't like doing it, but accepts it anyways.
Of course, I could always go with what an earlier comment said, and write up a quick chapter where Starlight sends a letter to Twilight saying she's met the real Star Swirl. Twilight would go nuts
This story touched e in such a deep way I can't properly explain it. well done I say, well done.
this is easily my new favorite, if old, Starlight fic.
Yeah, that line about Starswirl always bugged me too, even before we learned that he apparently understood friendship well enough to befriend Scorpan. It's a thankless job, trying to understand and explain away plot holes in a cartoon intended for kids. Honestly though, I really admire any work that's able to work with canon (within reason).
Great idea to link up Starlight and Starswirl's storylines. I now can't unsee the parallels and it gives me more hope for what kind of stories people could tell with Starlight.
7002234 I haven't really read the MLP comics at all, but apparently one of the arcs actually makes this even worse. Star Swirl and Celestia go through a mirror portal to an alternate universe where they find a good guy Sombra who Celestia falls in love with, then she continues going through the portal without Star Swirl's supervision. Star Swirl finds out, throws a fit and forbids Celestia from going anymore to the alternate world because it will end badly, and Celestia ignores him. Spoiler alert: it ends badly.
If you add it up to the canon of the show, it basically looks more and more that Star Swirl was a responsible guy who befriended a potential supervillain and that Celestia had a bunch of sour grapes over the guy.
7020512 Yeah, I heard about that. Celestia can't seem to get a break in her portrayals.
I suppose making a bigger mess of canon is part of the danger of trying to correct canon.
Yes, let the hate flow through you Twilight!
They say the best revenge is living well. But I think the true best revenge is living the life your enemy wants to live but cannot.
Dropped the "s" from "friends".
Whole she does strike me as the sort of person to have "plans within plans" I think you meant for this to be "mind" instead.
Simple.
Fun little character peice.
Though it wasn't stated I'm going to assume that Starlight’s going back in time to prevent the Rainboom was nulled by her stepping into The End of Time, sir Tie had to step in and slap her down.
That's what such a small change as not gloating does. Without Twilight to act as a fixer Time itself has to get involved.
I want to see more Reasonable!Starswirl in fic, he's too often given the short end of the stick for such an important figure.
Though importance and kindness are not the same thing.
7081313 Fixed, thanks.
You'd be correct, the timeline does stay the same (as can be deduced from the follow-up bonus chapter). I go in-depth on my author notes a lot, but in this case I didn't really write about the progress of ideas in writing this fic. I think I started this with the simple premise of 'Starlight decides not to be an idiot and goes straight for the jugular by changing time without anypony to interfere with her, but gets shunted to the End of Time instead'. I think I originally intended for Gaspar to show up in pony form, then got fixated on the idea of Star Swirl and ran with it, which pretty strongly alters the dynamics of the story since he's an actual figure in Equestrian history.
I have another Star Swirl idea that I'm bouncing around in my head that'll more likely than not get written with him as the main character, a short fic rather than novel-length. In a way, I'm happy the show barely touches on him since that gives us writers a lot of leeway to play around with him if we so desired.
Oh! It looks like your Twilight Sparkle is evolving!
Congratulations! Your Twilight Sparkle has evolved into Rapidash!
The other thing that scene reminded me is of the burning unicorn emblem that was the symbol of the game UN Squadron. I played the ever loving hell outta that game as a kid!
Haha well starlgjt got reveal be on her in a way so ha. And neat story over all
Oh my gosh you broke my brain!?!
And also wow, was that interesting! I probably should have expected Starswirl the Bearded, but for some reason I didn't. I loved his enigmatic personality. It seems to me that you like Starlight almost as much as Trixie. I guess you have a thing for the bad girls, huh?
If I'd noticed how short the second chapter was, I'd have probably finished it last night, but now I haven't the time until later!
Bahahaha!
I laughed so hard at this! Good use of flaming angry Ragelight! I'm glad you decided to follow up to end this with her getting some final jabs at Twilight before she devotes herself to study and is reformed or whatever she's doing at the end of time. I loved the concept, and you pulled it off. This one really could have been a much longer story if you had so desired. I don't blame you for keeping them short.
7089707 wrote : "In a way, I'm happy the show barely touches on him since that gives us writers a lot of leeway to play around with him if we so desired."
Not anymore it doesn't. They brought him back. ... ..... Your Starswirl isn't so much an ass as the canon one is though.
* Ding ding ding ding ding*
Your Twilight Sparkle has evolved into Rapidash!
Congratulations!^_^
Oh dear
Starlight's voice in this letter was super on-point and hilariously petty.
Great job! This was a really fun post-script and great addition to the story.