Oh, How I Wish That It Would Stay!
Last night, as I stood and stared, I saw my mom, who wasn't there. She won't be there again today. Oh, how I wish we both could play...
The breakfast was stale. Possibly it had something to do with it being prepared the previous morning. Twilight didn't complain. In her state of mind any food would probably taste bad. The important thing was for her to be nourished, and day-old waffles could achieve that just fine.
Not too long now, the alicorn thought. Soon Spike will be home and I could ask my questions. The scroll had been prepared and rolled diligently, waiting to be delivered. A second one might have to be sent to princess Celestia, but that would wait.
The sound of a door opening echoed throughout the empty corridors. Twilight took another nibble of the waffle then pushed it aside. Time to do what I should have done weeks ago. Taking a deep breath, then exhaling slowly, she left the dining room.
"Welcome back, Spi..." She began, but stopped midway. Her dragon assistant wasn't alone.
"Good morning, Twilight Sparkle," Princess Luna greeted her. "Mind if we join you?"
"Yes... I mean, of course, Princess," Twilight managed to say. What is she doing here? Not that there was anything to complain about. Actually the Princess of the Night was exactly the pony Twilight wanted to speak to. Her concern, rather, was directed towards someone else. "Spike?"
"I know, I know," the dragon sighed looking at the floor. "I should have mentioned it in my letter. But I was worried about you! You weren't eating, you weren't sleeping," he started to innumerate, "you walked about like a zombie pony, you talked to yourself..."
"Oh, Spike," Twilight offered a slight smile. "I know, and I thank you. I actually wanted to ask Princess Luna a few things."
"And now you shall," the dark alicorn nodded. "I too am interested to learn more of your condition, for I sense there is much you haven't told your friends."
The conversation continued in the library, it was the place Twilight felt most at ease. Also she didn't want to risk them finding about the diary. That remained personal.
As Spike and Luna sat at one of the tables, Twilight began her tale. She told them of her recurring dreams, of Ikelos - the stallion she had met in her sleep, of her insomnia and constant exhaustion, of the foal that called her "mom". Twilight talked and talked, uninterrupted, until there was nothing left to say. Then, once she was certain she had shared every detailed, except those she wished to keep private, she stopped.
Spike's eyes had become as large as saucers as he stared at her in disbelief. Can't blame you there, baby brother. If I were you, I wouldn't believe me either.
Luna, on the other hoof, seemed quite composed.
"I wish you had told me about this sooner," the Princess of the Night said. "If you had, you wouldn't have gone through all that pain. From what I see you have found out why dreams and ponies don't talk to one another. They might seem similar, but dream ponies are far more different than you could imagine."
"There are dream ponies?" Spike couldn't help himself.
"Yes, Spike," Luna nodded. "The dream world does not merely contain what we put in it. There are scores of beings there, some of them terrifying, others not. The dream ponies are but a small part of its native inhabitants. Usually it is rare for a dream pony to make itself known. Occasionally they pass through then move to the next. For Ikelos to have revealed himself to you, you must have wanted something quite a lot."
Twilight said nothing.
"Although, from what you told me it was worth it," Luna continued. "Tell me, what is your foal's name?"
"Fancy," Twilight smiled. "And yes, Princess, it was worth it." So very worth it, despite the pain. "Is there a way for me to see Ikelos again? I can't remember much, but I still miss him. I miss him a lot."
"Well, for that you might want to ask him," the Luna pointed across the table. There, one seat from Twilight, sat a foal, his violet mane moving slightly although the there was no wind.
"Fancy?!" Twilight couldn't believe it. "But I am not asleep... Am I asleep?" She looked at Luna.
"No, child, you are awake," Luna hid her smile behind a hoof. "Unlike his father, your child is not a pure dream. He might have been born in the dream world, but it was you who gave birth to him. As such he is part of both worlds - neither dream, nor pony, but also both."
"Hold on a moment!" Spike jumped on the floor. "You mean to tell me that Twilight has a child?!"
"Well it's hardly a surprise," Luna shrugged. "She has been married for over seven years."
"But that was a dream! And it can't..." The dragon was at a lack of words. "It's only been a few months since she began acting like this. And now, I'm an uncle?"
"Why do you think Twilight was waking up at all times of the night?" the Princess of the Night asked. "As part of both worlds, Fancy needed to play in Equestria as well. However, since he's so young he still can't cross to our world on his own. Twilight had to do that, even if she couldn't remember it. Each time woke without a reason, she was actually letting Fancy enter Equestria. From what I see, only recently has he managed to cross on his own. Isn't that right?"
"I'm getting better," Fancy said, tapping the table with his hoof.
"I'm sure you are," Twilight chucked. "Come here, you rascal," she opened her forehooves to hug him.
"Mom, please," the foal said in the most annoyed tone possible. "No hugging. It's embarrassing."
"I know," Twilight. Levitated him next to her, then placed a hoof on his mane. "And thank you for the gift you gave me. I... I liked it a lot."
"Dad said you would," Fancy said quietly, still slightly uncomfortable being in the presence of so many beings. "He also asked me to tell you he is sorry."
"It's alright." Twilight felt a sudden urge to cry again. Her pain was deep, and it would take time to heal completely. "Talking about your father, can I see him again?"
"No," Fancy shook his head. "He told me you might want to. He said I am him now, but I'm also part you... I didn't understand what he meant."
"I understand," the purple alicorn looked away. She didn't want her son to see her crying.
"Sometimes, when I think about it real hard, I can hear him. He tells me what to do, although it's really difficult for me to reach him."
"Don't you worry about that," Twilight hugged him tightly. "You have me now. I'm here for you. I'll take care of you and teach you everything you want to know."
"Really, mom?" The foal asked enthusiastically, forgetting the embarrassment of a public hug. "And I don't have to wake you up every time?"
"Well, maybe a bit at first," she ruffled his mane. "But I'll get used to it. And I won't be the only one. Once we finish breakfast I'll take you around Ponyville and have you meet all my friends. Actually," she looked at Spike, "we can start right now."
Gently she levitated the foal to floor, a step away from the dragon.
"Fancy," Twilight said warmly. "Meet your uncle Spike..."
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I liked this. Have a mustache
6371199 Thanks :D Glad you enjoyed :)
Interesting concept. I like it!
6371524 Thanks :D
Really like using Greek myths :) (especially since mlp has so much of them already :))
Short and sweet, just what I like. I hope this makes its way into the featured box, so it can get the recognition it deserves.
For Ikelos to have revealed himself to you, you must have waned something quite a lot."
wanted
Each time woke without a reason, she was actually letting Fancy enter Equestri.
she awoke, Equestria
"It alright." Twilight felt a sudden urge to cry again. Her pain was deep, and it would take time to heal completely.
It's
"Well, maybe a bit at first," she ruffled his mane. "But I'll get to it.
used to it.
Easy enough fixes, should only take you a minute or two, have a nice day!~
6371587 Flutters! :))
Very glad you enjoyed, and thanks for spotting all those :D (maybe I should follow Spike's advice and sleep more... :))
Very Good, thinking outside the box. A very unique story. If you wanted, you could turn this into a longer serial story.
6371777 Thank you :)
It's always possible, although have my hands full at the moment.
Who knows, maybe at some point <spoiler-spoiler> might appear elsewhere as well :D
6371725
Ah you're welcome.
And I'm not to worried about the deleted post, shit happens.
6372459 :))) Thanks. :) Twice :D
I... Wow great read. The fun part is imagining twilight introducing her however I'd son to her friends and family. That and possibly finding someone to give Fancy a sister or brother.
6373521 :) Thanks.
That definitely would be interesting... Or scary :D
Technically there might be a new CMC :)
6373593 ... A cmc with dream abilities..... Oh lord.....
6373631 :) And knowing Twilight, she'll also insist on school :) And that allows for all sorts of possibilities.
(I love creating theories way too much... O:))
Holy crap, this was brilliant.
6374410 Thank you :))
Happy you enjoyed :D
My gosh. It's beautiful.
Okay, you've successfully combined elements of mystery, touching on concepts of the dream world vs wakefulness, a lot of emotion building, a nice story path, and a truly interesting character. Nicely done!
Only negatives I can see are a few formatting issues. Here are the ones that I can quickly recall:
Chapter 1 has a spot that starts thing off well with what it's doing, but stumbles with where it's going.
(Replace doing with going)
Also in this chapter, there is a mystery about a Mr. e that was replaced with an r.
(Replace r with e. Also, with a minor formatting change, the lines should look like this)
But these are few enough that they don't take away from the tale. I still recommend an editor/copious re-readings if you self-edit.
For the tenderness and emotion present in the piece, the like is earned. For the originality in the concept, as well as possible future developments, you've earned the favorite!
Looking forward to more.
6375355 Thanks :D
The myth did most of the work for me :) a Glad you enjoyed :))
6375862 you're welcome.
6375526 Thanks for finding all those :))
Currently I attempt to self edit (especially for training/contest prompts), though there are issues with that O:)
This was originally meant to be a one shot, but grew a bit :) (tend to create lore/backstory elements a lot, even if most of them don't end up on paper/screen :))
Very glad you enjoyed :D there might be a sequel at some point in the undefined future :)
(Insert 'I liked that. Another!' Meme here.)
That was amazing. You couldn't just guess at the plot and the characters reasoning were sound. Maybe we could get a sequel or a prequel...PLEASE AMAZING AUTHOR PLEASE I NEEDS THIS TO BE A THING. That is all.
6377498 :)) Thanks :D
Sequel... Maybe somewhere, sometime O:)
Prequel - two words: "Prince Blueblood" :D
I'm speechless. SERIOUSLY! This story was so moving!
6378057 Thanks :) Very much appreciated :D
Glad it resonated with you. :) As every other story, on my part, it's pure experimentation O:)
6378097 Oh? Well then, keep on experimenting! Who knows what may come out in the end?
6378102 :D I never know before it happens :P
6377715 *narrows eyes* eye don't know what you mean by prince Blueblood
)
(Did you see what I did there
6380300 Weeeell, it was mentioned he is related to Celestia in some way (canon I think?)
So, how did that happen? *dramatic music* :)
6380340
omfg I need this to be a thing.
Well, Lisa your fanfics are starting to improve. However, I love this story. I like the concept of dreams v.s reality.
Here have five mustache.
6384369 Thanks :D It's definitely thanks to all the comments and advice I've been getting :) (and reading great works here :))
That's a massive number of mustaches... :)
6384484 Yay! :) Thanks for the kind words.
You're right about the climax. Could have made the reveal a bit longer, but at that point started messing things more by ad didn't, so decided to stop it there O:)
Love creating worlds though :) From he that to be the best part of creating the story :D
This was very well done, Lise. It began with me genuinely afraid for Twilight's mental state, and ended with implications that we could ponder for a great long time. Spike being so worried about Twilight and bringing Luna was a nice touch. Thank you for sharing this work with us.
6385260 Ah, thank you :)))
Being the first person to welcome me to FimFiction, means a lot that you enjoyed :)
Indeed, it leaves a lot of open possibilities. Hopefully someday will develop them further :D
This was a very great story. Imma have to post a blog about this fic. Because this needs more attention
6385396 Wow, thank you :)
Very glad you enjoyed :D
6378104 I know this wasn't supposed to be an actual story but a one-shot but it would be nice to see a sequel to this story as it was captivating and was something I have never seen of before, so it would be really nice to see a sequel.
Kind regards, Lord_razor
6385396 you know what I think I may do the same thing as this does need more attention than what it's getting.
6386807 :) well I've jotted down some notes, but really shouldn't promise anything.
Currently still working on getting another promised sequel going, and keeping up with training prompts (my writing was a mess before those O:))
Notes that include: School, the CMC, and a crush :)
No idea when will return to them, though :(
A really strange concept, but I like this story. I'd suggest learning ways to slow down your pacing, though, because the last two chapters especially feel like we're rushing through the narrative.
6401018 Wow! Thanks, Perfect :D
Honored you enjoyed the concept :) (Ikelos sounded like a perfect fit :))
Very guilty about the pace rushing (and mistakes) :( Tend to do that on practice shorts in order to get some experience and improve in the process (thus the hits and misses).
Many thanks again for reading this and hope to be able to catch your eye with a future work sometime :)
6401431 Thanks for the catch :)
"Lots of lots of" was deliberate :) (though not sure if it's still used... o:))
Hope you enjoy :D
6401649 That's weird... I thought I had corrected the artists... :(
Rechecking
6401447 Ah. I know doubling for emphisis has been a practice, but I've alway jeard it as 'lots and lots of'. I thought I'd point it out, as it is something I do by mistake a lot. Usually when I get distracted while typing.
Anyway, very interesting story. I quite enjoyed it. I had pulled it up to read it shortly after you posted it, but hadn't gotten around to reading it. I'm really liking the style of your stories. They're also a nice break from the 100,000+ word monsters I normally read on here. :)
6401189
Eh, nothin' wrong with that as a practice, then. :)
6402134 :) Thanks. Glad you enjoyed :)
On day will try to make. 80+ k story of my own. Until then, though :)
That was such a good story
6833515 :) Thank you. Very glad you enjoyed :D
This has been in my tbr for a bit. I've really wanted to read it, but I wanted to just sit and read in all in one go when I didn't have other matters pressing on my mind, so today it was. And I am absolutely blown away. This story was amazing. I loved the concept, I love the plot. I would really like to see Twi's friends reactions (and maybe the country when they find out a Princess suddenly has a young foal?) but other than that, this is really amazing.