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For the first time! It's like popping my cherry all over again!
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...Cool
Wo! 14k words bring it on.
Found this by accident and HAD to post this here...
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I'm sorry.
Not gonna lie, I was expecting this chapter to take place offscreen. It's well-written, sure, but I'm really here for the plot.
And it's been so long, I might just have to re-read this entire story the next time you update.
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That was something I debated with myself as well, but ultimately I decided this was necessary as a precursor to certain aspects of Twilight's growing personality. Plus, I needed to emphasize Twilight and Spike's mother-son relationship a bit more clearly, along with including more of Shining and Cadance.
Fortunately for you, the next chapter is nothin' but plot! Specifically, Nightmare Moon plot.
6354318 Now if only plot wasn't a popular innuendo for horse butt, I would be more optimistic.
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Aw, have a little faith! I didn't exactly have outright clop in the first three chapters.
Butyeah if I had to choose between Luna and Nightmare Moon in terms of sexyness, I'd go Nightmare Moon all the way.
6354379 It's the armor, isn't it?
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Eeyup. Plus the more dark coat of fur and the slitted eyes. Hotness.
yay sexy nightmare woona
A lesson for the parents of Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon
Well then, that was most certainly a detailed chapter! I don't really read clop any more, but it's a really nice addition to a story with a, well, story - like a spice, to much and you get bored, to little and it feels bland.
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Thanks! I tried to include plenty of actual character interaction and development between them along with all the cloppy goodness. Glad it came across well enough!
OK im not even done reading but GEZZZZ no one can ever acuse you of not being through, this I decree.
Angry-mare face!
This was... really, really good. Lots of character, and those little body-language details. And I probably giggled more than I should have at Twilight's educationally-wandering mind.
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She makes a bad habit of it. Her days of growing up on the streets have trained her to always multitask, and it's sort of carried over. Even during sex, her thoughts sometimes just sorta stray away from what she's supposed to be focused on!
My god, that is one hell of a length jump........ I LOVE IT!
Not too many fics that include sex-scenes are tasteful about it...
..But this, this is quite tasteful. It fits the rest of the story well, isn't sex for the sake of sex, actually progresses the plot and character development reasonably, and doesn't feel like you forced two characters to fuck before they should.
Also, 14k words, that's nothing hard to do. I read upwards of 200k words daily, usually around 300k, so I don't understand why people bitch about a 14k word chapter...
...personally, I think that 6k-12k is the sweet spot in terms of chapter length, but 14k isn't far outside that range.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
22:43_8/24/2015
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Wait, are we talking about bitching about reading a 14k chapter, or bitching about writing one? I mean don't get me wrong, it's not hard to write that much either, it can just take forever is all. I merely wished that it had taken me less time. Next time I write a sex scene, it probably won't be such a struggle.
Also, my inherent goal in writing this entire chapter was to make the transition from the previous chapter to being fuckbuddies in this one completely organic in nature. Glad I managed that! Mission accomplished! *plays Star Fox 64 stage complete theme*
6354730 I'm more of a Princess Luna guy myself.
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Yeah, she's got that more demure, mysterious kind of attraction to her, doesn't she?
6355687 Exactly!
AMAZING!
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Crystalline just explained perfectly how i feel about this chapter. But on a personal note, this was absolutely amazing.
I can also explain why some don't like large chapters. It has to do with time management, some of us just don't have either the time or patients to read/write something that long. I personally had to stop in the middle of this and come back later due to... Business shall we say?... Anyway, this means when come back you have to pick up where you left off. This is where the pain the ass is, if either the page chooses to refresh itself or someone used the computer while you were gone, you have to find where you left off, which on even short chapters can be a pain to find (i assume you realize this part doesn't includes writing chapters). As for writing, you can in that time forget what you were going to write and be left with writers block trying to remember exactly what it was or even the idea in general. Hope this explains why Crystalline.
Edit: i just realized the way i said "business" sounds like a sex joke/reference. Just to clarify, it was not.
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It makes me glad that she has so little interaction with the waking world in the cartoon. She'll never be as mysterious as we imagine her.
The tantibus episode was good though. Bit of a sledgehammer in terms of getting her emotional problems across, but you could tell what they were trying to get across with the ending.
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If you ask me, the whole Tantabus episode was far less subtle than most others in terms of confronting such serious emotional problems. What she was doing was akin to non-physical self-flagellation, and it was destroying her from the inside out. It's a really mature subject to tackle.
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At least it wasn't like the hibernation episode, where it's painfully obvious they wanted it to be about loss, yet taken at face value Rainbow is overreacting to a ridiculous degree and the whole thing is nonsensical if you don't care about the metaphor.
I like it. You have a talent for sex scenes, evidently. The "Fifth leg salute" made me chuckle like mad.
Keep up the good work.
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In my attempts to make Spike as adorable as possible, I also made him learn the phrase 'fifth leg salute'!
Cadance is going to Tartarus for that.
Oh gosh I forgot this is an M rated fic with a sex tag...
I feel like I'm gonna be sick, and I skipped as soon as I realized what it was getting in to...
You need to figure out whether you want to write a gritty/serious story or a futa clopfic.
Both have their place, and I'm sure you could do either well, but the tone changes in this are giving me whiplash.
6756245 feel sorry for you!
7245193 I wouldn't mind, if I didn't tend to read in public places.
At this point im not sure if this twilight arouses me frightens me or just makes me feel unconformable
I was in school reading this but I couldn't skip because I thought, "What if something important happens?"
Hah! Nope, it was all sex.
Nearly a 14k sex scene...... Impressive
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Why not all three? 🤔
Yeah… Being critical payed off, I think.
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I'm inclined to agree!
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What about all three? There are those people out there....
Wow, I really wasn't sure about herm-Twi, but that was undeniably one of the best written sex scenes I've read here. It's not often that they can be written into a plot without being over-the-top/cornball.
Now loving this story for two reasons. Thinking that this should be submitted to the High Quality Mature Fiction group if it hasn't been already!
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I wasn't even aware that was a thing.
Wow, great sex scene. Really painted a vivid picture, without cutting it short or diverging. Didn't see the dildo coming at the finish - well written herm scene.
Loved the nipping of her flank.
Note: Sex scene lasts for the rest of the chapter. If you don't want to read the sex, then you can just skip to the next chapter.
I personally don't like reading sex scenes often. So a warning about how far to read and/or if the scene is important to the story as a whole would be greatly appreciated. Even if it's just in the author's notes in the beginning of the chapter.
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I'll keep that in mind, but really, the only time I write them out is when they matter in terms of character development or plot relevance.
Welp this story just got a best pony
Wow. I would’ve read this sooner if I knew the writing was this strong.
Oh and the sex scene is great I guess. I suppose I should’ve seenen it coming when you said Twilight was a herm.