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Just saw the update and before I even read:
1. Happy Halloween!
2. YES. UPDATE. YES.
edit: 21? wow, thats a REALLY high live reader count.
Great chapter as always, and looking forward to more.
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Not as high as you might think. I've seen several fics that reach the 30-40 range. Still, a pretty significant number when you think about it that way!
Oh, and Happy Halloween! Get spoop'd.
Cool! We've been waiting for this chapter for a while. It paid off!
forgot to close the translation brackets
I feel like Zebrican should be capitalized, but there's a lot of places where it isn't.
your actions
Also, am I an idiot for not understanding how a healing potion has anything to do with mass murder?
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Gah, missed those.
Healing potions of the sort Zecora could make are both unheard of outside of Shaman alchemy, and extremely difficult to make. Twilight sees an opportunity in having access to them because they have amazing healing properties that can fix any damage done to your body, given you can drink the entire potion before the injuries you've sustained kill you. That's a BIG leg up if you need to throw suspicion off yourself, especially if witnesses saw you get stabbed or shot, but then when someone comes to see you you're right as rain.
7685774 So, the most expensive way possible to cover her ass if she ever decides to forgo subtlety and get in a shoot-out.
Yeah, I can see that.
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Mmmhmm. It's the quickest solution, and by far the least suspicious to the average pony. Even the police wouldn't expect something like that.
7685784 Unless she makes a habit of publicly mending fences between Zecora and Ponyville.
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Well, that's only if ponies suspect she's a Shaman, isn't it?
7685791 Clever.
This was good! Happy halloween
Clever fallback plan. Twilight is very good at seeing potential resources very quickly.
I honestly like the torture scene. Not because it's torture, but because of the content. We get a real honest look at Twilight's motivations. It's all out there on the table. Yeah, it's been said before, but never like this. We've seen her hatred, just not this blatantly honest. The rest of the conversation with Zecora really nails down Twilight's personality, who she is. The fact that under the psychopath, there is a pony capable of being saved.
Reminds me of
http://ytcropper.com/cropped/TI5817cdeb3f911
Ahh, that's another chapter read of a brilliant story. But I still can't wait for the return of harmony chapters or chapters like the grand galloping gala or a canterlot wedding, so much potential! Mainly any chapter where any of the mane six go to canterlot is to jump up and down, singing the pony pokey while burning down half of the town for! Hopefully the mane six get to meet Twilight's parents, that would be fun to see that situation. There is just so much potential in this story and thats probably the main thing I really enjoy it.
PS can't wait for more Octascratch, may not be the best ship, but it was my first and one that got me into the actual fandom. Shame it was a dark and sad fic
A very different approach to technical pacifism. Though the trust seems a tad forced in a way, it isn't immersion breaking given the chapter itself. Overall, this seems more a backstory refresher for the reader to also tie/advance the plot to me, and done to be seamless for the pairing.
Nothing against zecora, or twilight here. Just the way this chapter stood a bit more as a to progress things kinda deal.
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Trust me when I say, the next chapter will give more clarity about Zecora.
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You are somewhat correct about this chapter. Zecora's role is mostly on the sidelines, but she does serve an important purpose, as was shown. She's very wise for her age, and she is another character that Twilight can turn to when she needs to talk things out. Zecora may not approve of what Twilight's planning, and Twilight likely never wants Zecora to know more than she needs to both for Zecora's safety and for the safety of her people, but there's no denying that Zecora can provide a lot of insight in ways that Twilight may not think.
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Funny thing is, I didn't even put it there. I've just been writing it, and suddenly it's showing up in groups. Not that I mind, of course.
7701371 Lol, good to know. I mean, TBH I don't have a problem with it, in fact... I actually enjoy that kind of content from time to time I just personally think this story, for a more than a clop story, overdid it a bit. Esp. at the beginning. that said it isn't at any point so bad that I'd say it ruins the story.
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Shame it's a particularly sub-par revolver in all other aspects.
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Sizzle the Salamander is a fun-loving, but responsible little guy that has an entire team of forest critters that regularly have to dump water on him to put out the fires that erupt from his back, so he doesn't accidentally set the forest on fire. It only takes a single tiny spark, after all.
Yes, I DID just make that up off the top of my head.
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...It's called an alternate universe for a reason. It's even tagged as such. Events have changed, the tone of the story has changed, and we have drastically branched away from the more carefree nature of the show. Instead of being neurotic and socially inept, Twilight is cunning, cautious and more than willing to smack-talk and kill, as is befitting her upbringing and mental trauma. She learned how to survive very quickly in a world where the idiots are either meat shields, low-rank thugs or dead bodies. I'm not exactly sure what you were expecting from an AU where Twilight is used and abused by the Equestrian Mafia. I will say, however, that you should probably read further before judging her personality. There's a lot more to her than what you see in the first few chapters.
As for her being a hermaphrodite, eh. At first it was just personal preference, but it has developed into an actual character trait by now. For example, it's the main reason she wears clothes.
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But seriously, give it a bit of time. This IS an AU for a reason, so of course it's not going to feel like the same Twilight right off the bat. It's like complaining that root beer doesn't taste like grape soda.
Awesome story so far, great work.
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Well, I do know everything that's going to happen in the story already, but not in this specific way. Gadget's lack of magic is actually a product of her low-income upbringing. She lived in a house of several orphans with a lone caretaker that didn't even speak Equestrian, which made making money extremely hard. I won't pretend to know what that kind of life is like, I've never lived it, but I do know what a bread sandwich is, and what kind of life that can be.
Because of that kind of life, Gadget focused far more on getting money however she could instead of going to school. The lack of a formal education doesn't necessarily make her stupid, she's smart in her own ways and has her own strengths, but it does mean that she's never really had access to proper arcane reading material, which is a necessity in a young unicorn's development of their magic. This made her rely on her magic even less as she grew up, to the point that her magic is damn near stunted. With enough work she could bring her magic up to the level expected of someone her age, but she's spent her whole life relying on her body and her wits instead. Without Twilight's intervention, she'd likely have never attempted it.
That being said, she'll probably never be affected by that shroud stuff the same way Twilight is. Twilight's inability to see through it is a product of her years of arcane study and practice. She's developed herself in a way that Gadget hasn't, and while there aren't any obvious physical differences, there is a clear line between them.
7735072 Alright, I'd kind of forgotten about that.
more chapters soon
A good chapter although Zecora fails to understand that Zulu and Twilight are in entirely different situations. So much so that the comparison is impossible to make.
Twilight is motivated by revenge.
Zulu is motivated by Xenophobia and pride.
Twilight is also doing this to protect those she cares about.
Zulu was not protecting anyone.
The only thing they have in common is that they both had anger issues...that's it..
The argument that she is putting Spike and her friends in danger is answered by Twilight herself when she says that since she is already part of the Mafia it is only a matter of time until they try and come for those she cares about...you do not retire from the Mafia.
Zecora comes off as naive rather than wise.
I swear, every time you introduce a new backstory to a character I compare it to others I've read before. You've come out as a front-runner every time. Vinyl and Octy, AJ's parents, Pinkie's magic, and now Zecora. I'm really going to be sad when I catch up to the last chapter.
BTW, my other favorite Pinkie explanation is a small reference to her being an "Arcpony" in The Immortal Game.