"After all these many years, Lyra finally convinces Twilight Sparkle to teach her the most powerful summoning spell in all of Equestria. With this knowledge, she plans to summon the mythical creatures known as 'humans' to her world. Little does she know that her world is about to irrevocably change."
He looked at the other man. "How was that?"
The other man nodded. "It will suffice."
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Edited by King of Beggars, Midnight Blaze, MrNumbers, and PegasusMesa.
Image is Large Hand with Splayed Fingers by Florentina Pakosta.
Chapters (1)
Oh god, it was so freaking terrible. Your metaphysical imagery was particularly ineffective, no rythmic devices to counterpoint the surrealism of the underlying metaphor of the humanity of the Vogonity, which should contrive through the medium of the verse structure to sublimate this, transcend that, and come to terms with the dichotomies of the other. And one is left with a profound, yet unvivid, no insight into the... the OTHER STUFF! Yeah! And your editors suck too!
Upvoted.
Well done
5514196 Have you ever considered trying to recreate Douglas Adams' works? Your statements left me confused, giggling, and slightly aroused, all at the same time. just like Douglas Adams' works.
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I did have an idea for a fic that had everything but a good tone to drive it along... Now that I think about it, such an Adams-esque tone would be great for it. Thanks for the idea!
Interesting indeed.
Clippers game?
Bruh.
Is this a fake story?
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But Soaring you don't even like football.
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Only on Tuesdays and Thursdays.
GS 4 lyfe.
Reality is only a matter of perspective.
What I'm trying to say is that one thing can be real to somone while just a mere illusion to the other, defined by the point of perspective they stand in.
Great story, great idea, pretty unique at it, too, bravo!
I didn't expect it to go this way, neither to end this very special way, but it works out just well.
Though I wonder. The only chapter it has counts a total number of words of 2827. But the wholse story has 3862 words.
Where are the missing 1035 words?...
-Zeph
Poor Lyra. What a dumb stupid pony horse.
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I don't know. My assumption is that when I imported it from Gdoc, it counted all the notes as words.
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No, Gdocs isn't that stupid. Isn't there a hidden, unpublished chapter?... Because that would explain it.
5528407 I have been informed it is a caching error and should resolve itself. I am saddened to inform you that I did not, in fact, write a hidden chapter.
Oh, I liked this. Very nice to see Lyra's reality totally supplanted and messed with like this.
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Ah, such disappointment. But oh well, I guess nothing really changed afterall...
Though I do hope that we could see something in connection with this story, in the near future.
Well, have a good time!
-Zeph
I love stories that tackle the structure of reality and the creation of new minds. And, if the new, sapient, self-aware Lyra isn't sent to Sadistic pony-hell simulation, I see a silver lining.
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Too true, Arararara.
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that's me!
I wrote a review of this story. It can be found here.
Not half-bad. The writing was solid, but the twist was revealed a bit too early.
It did remind me of The Stanley Parable, though, which is never a bad thing.
Huh.
Now that was deliciously sci-fi. Very Twilight Zone worthy there.
5616525 I always liked the idea in "A World Of His Own". I really like to play around with it. Great show, great episode.
I tried to hold off on reading the Anthropology entries, as I'm not familiar with the source material at all, but you hooked me in well good and proper here.
There's honestly nothing I can nit-pick at here. T'is a great use of the contest prompt and a stirring piece without going over-board on the dark theme.
You shall be a worthy opponent for the finals.
Cool story, bro.
5527743 fimfic's story-length counter is broken. Sometimes, it gets stuck, and changes to the story no longer updated the total story word count.
5635533 Not cool enough.
Wow, dang. You've got a skill for reinventing tropes so they don't suck. :D
Fucking humans, man. Every damn time.
Fuller review here, but in brief: a clever, SF-flavoured twist on the tired old "Lyra is into humans" trope. The reveal comes soon enough that the ending feels a bit slow, but it's still quite refreshing.
Very well realized fic. I love the juxtaposition of how surreal it all seems to Lyra, with the mundanity of the humans' dialogue. Great usage of SF tropes as well.