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LightningSword


Me. Take it or leave it.

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A former villain on the road to reformation, still facing the consequences of her past actions. Five girls, together again, thinking fondly of the help and guidance they got from the pony princess from another dimension. And one troubled boy stuck in the middle, who has given up on love, and life.

Sunset Shimmer has reformed, but she knows she must right her past wrongs—there is a boy on the roof of Canterlot High, declared worthless and unlovable by Sunset herself, ready to believe her right and jump to his death. With help from Applejack, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie, Sunset must talk him down and convince him that what she said in the past isn't true, and that he deserves to live.

Meanwhile, the boy thinks back on his numerous attempts to prove to her, and to himself, that she was wrong. His solution: ask the five most perfect girls in school out on a date. Their mutual response: no. He must learn that love doesn't work that way, that a lack of romance is not a lack of love, and that he desperately needs help before it's too late.

Set in the Equestria Girls universe. Props to HudsonHawk for the title, and an extra special thanks to xoxPinkiePiexox for the excellent new cover art!

Chapters (11)
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Comments ( 301 )

Wonderful. I've waited for this fic for a long time, and it's everything I wanted and more. Deserves a fav for sure.

5375375 Thanks so much for the high praise. There will be more!

“Oh, balderdash, darling!” Rarity assured her.

Haven't heard that word since my 5th grade English class. Clever? Maybe?

“No, it's true! He's going to get hurt if we can't help him!”

That bothered me for whatever reason. I doubt Canterlot High is actually high enough to give fatal damage to anyone, but I'll suspend my disbelief. My real problem with this isn't that he'll "get hurt", he'll die. It's probably nothing, but I'd like it if you say it like it is.

Other than that, the chapter looks pretty good. Still loving the concept and your writing style.

Happy Derping,
DerpyMuffin7

5382516 Suicide is a pretty intense subject. I guess it's my way of softening the blow.

Im impressed so far. Im looking forward to seeing where this goes :twilightsmile:

This is intense Its really well written, Im looking forward to seeing where you take this.

Loving this story so far, keep it up! Don't know quite what it is about stories of suicidal grief that grip me, but this one is just a real joy to read through regardless! Looking forward to chapter 4!

5397929 Thanks! Glad you enjoy it! :pinkiehappy:

This came out really quickly and reads really well! As bad as I feel for poor poor Dac (and can sympathize with him in a few ways), I kind of really want to know how Rarity turned him down now! Looking forward to any further material! But do remember to enjoy Christmas too and don't run yourself too ragged ;)

5404958 Don't you worry about that. The whole thing is actually done. Just didn't want to put it all up too quickly. :raritywink:

I think I'll post Rarity's chapter tomorrow, then space them out a little more over the holidays. Thanks so much for reading, and happy holidays! :pinkiehappy:

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damn bro that's hard and if I were in his shoes I would have tried the same way because all of the things that had happened have got to be painful and depressing.

5411019 Believe me, I felt guilty about putting poor Dac through all this. :fluttershysad:

“You, on the roof! You are in violation of school rules! You're damaging the roofing! Get down from there!”

:facehoof: The suicide prevention hotline is waiting for this guy.

I'm hooked.

This... chapter... I like it...

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God, you're such a dickette Dash!! :facehoof:

Touching stuff, really is... The ways Dac "rationalises" his pain & attempt at suicide are shockingly accurate in their portrayal - speaking from my own personal experiences, it can be insurmountably difficult to take even mere compliments for granted when you're so continually put down & in a foul mood when surrounded by said people, let alone in a suicidal state... Though I won't resort to such insulting comparisons here. I genuinely want to see whether Dac lives or dies now! Though I do hope you had a wonderful Christmas in either respect LS ;)

5432602 Your wish is granted.

Just . . . no more smashing. Deal? :rainbowlaugh:

5433640 Thanks so much for the praise. I've had some experience in this area myself, so I'm glad I was able to represent it accurately. Thanks for following along. Hope you had a good Christmas too.

Happy New Year! :twilightsmile:

This is some deep stuff. I want to say I'm glad this doesn't happen in the real world but this almost sounds like a personal experience.

5433843 In a way, I suppose it is. I've never threatened to jump off a building, but many of Dac's feelings and experiences were my own at one point.

5433869 I was hoping you weren't going to say that but I kind of expected it. I hope you don't feel that way anymore. Nobody should.

5433878 No need to worry. That's what writing is for. Writing it down really helps. I appreciate the concern, though, and I hope you enjoyed the story. :twilightsmile:

5433886 It's a good story. It puts a lot of things into perspective. I'm glad you don't feel as you used to.:pinkiesmile:

5433694
Deal.

I shall punt instead. :rainbowlaugh:

Also, I geniunely winced with Dash's actions. Sure, she didn't know how hurtful she was being, but still... ouch...

Dac sounds a lot like me in high school. Not suicidal but definitely felt like an ugly, unlovable CHUD. I had a few girls as friends, but never had the courage to ask them out, and if they were interested in me, my Asperger's kept me from picking up any hints.

What I'm saying is...

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The story is getting deeper and deeper to the character than the other fic's I've read

5434035 I was the same. I had a group of girls that used to hang out with me in high school, too. Not sure where they are now; tried to reconnect with them, but it didn't work out.

The resulting feels largely went into the making of this fic. :fluttershyouch:

5434918 Glad you like it. There's more coming soon. :twilightsmile:

Damn you and your awesome storytelling skills making me want more... FINISH IT! :pinkiehappy:

5455313 Relax, it's finished. Just spacing them out, is all. I don't wanna put up the whole thing too quickly. :raritywink: Thanks again!

5455379
Okay... :pinkiesmile:

How many more chapters?

I love this Story. I wish there was a way to Rate every chapter.
oh well Ill just leave supporting comments instead.
Nice work my friend. :twilightsmile:

5455727 Thanks again! And thanks a lot for the follow. :pinkiehappy:

5455429 We're about three-quarters of the way through. Getting close . . . . :twilightsmile:

5456909
Okay... I can handle it...

Uh oh... Withdrawals....

5456939 Next one will be up in a couple days. Hang in there. :twilightsmile:

Wait a minute, the Twilight flashback, the romance tag....

Ye-no, screw this, I'm outta here.

5472615 Relax, there is no Twilight/OC shipping. Far from it. :ajbemused:

5480150 :twilightsmile: Nice reference, but Twilight would be a lot more eloquent than that, wouldn't you think?

I wonder what she wrote. This story is... well... saying very well done doesn't do it justice and saying its fantastic doesn't fit with the mood. Hmmm I love this story Im hooked I cant wait for another chapter. I really don't understand why this doesn't get more attention. :twilightsmile:

5481256 Probably because I've only been a member for less than five months. Newbs like me don't get a lot of attention right away. :ajsleepy:

But I really appreciate the reviews, and I'm so glad you enjoyed my story that much. The story's almost all posted, but the next chapter may just be the best (as far as I can tell). Thanks again for reading! :pinkiehappy:

Wow...just wow. This is one heck of a good story thus far and I honestly hope you continue with this a little longer, and I wish I found your stuff a lot sooner. That poetry was from you? I like to write poetry myself (although I don't think I'm really that good.) Your words composed were really deep and I know very well what Dac means. I thought you did an excellent job at the characterisation of everyone and the pacing to this story is just right.

You have earned yourself a new follower my friend! I look forward to reading more from you and hope to read more of your poetry! Simply well done for the emotional rollercoaster that is this deep tale.

-Frost:pinkiesad2:

5492076 What a great review! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I worked especially hard on this latest chapter, and I'm glad to know that it has paid off. Little tidbit: the first poem in Chapter 9 is actually written in the dactylic pentameter (one stressed syllable followed by three unstressed syllables, or a dactyl, repeated five times per line).

Thanks so much for the support; there are only two chapters left to post, one of which is an epilogue. I hope you enjoy them! :pinkiehappy:

The ending of this chapter makes me think of these songs:

5492179 Old school tunes! :raritystarry: And they really do fit the theme and mood. Thanks again!

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