Silver Spoon wanted nothing more than a summer spent shopping and hanging out with her best friend. Except when she finds out Diamond Tiara went on vacation for the entire summer, and her dad forces her to run his summer lodge by Swan Lake, Silver Spoon knows this will be the worst summer ever. Especially when she finds out who her first customers are.
What's worse is after a canoeing mishap, Silver Spoon finders herself drawn to a certain crusader.
Can she resist Sweetie Belle's charms?
Edited by: Elric of Melnipony
Proofread by: RaylanKrios
For contodaslasganas who was promised a Spoon fic a long time ago.
Chapters (2)
Interesting start so far. I like Silver Spoon stories that expand on her character. Her interactions with the CMC and the shenanigans the latter got into were fun to read. I'll track it for now and possibly favorite it in the future once more is released, but I think it's good so far.
Also, this is just me, but I'd recommend cleaning up the description a tad. It sounds a little repetitive at times in my opinion. Nothing major, but I think it would be a wise decision to improve that bit a little and make it flow better.
I like what I'm reading so far. Although if I may offer a suggestion, you may want to increase the numbers used in your distance measurement. A single striding step for a human is usually the equivalent of about a meter/yard, so anything that's only ten "strides" away would be so close as to not require a sign. Maybe increase those by a factor of ten (95 and 100)?
5682168 I changed up the long description. I really suck at that part.
5682204 It's an Equestria unit of measurement. It will be explained later, but it's not a literal stride.
5682256 It's okay. Descriptions can be tough. Anyway, I'll make sure to read the next chapter when it arrives.
Oh! Loving the start of this story!
Very refreshing. I'm just wondering if this is a...*aherm-aherhm* story.
I hope not.
...thumbs up and tracking.
Ok, some possible corrections:
1. He’d smile as she excitedly ran from one store to another, frivolously enjoying the spoils her her new summer job.
2. Along the path, a cool wind gently chilled what was already shaping up to be a hot day. The trickling of water from a near by stream added an ambient background to the nonstop babble-chirps emitting from unseen locations.
3. A fine snow dusting remained on the some of the tallest peaks.
5684471 Glad you are liking it so far.
No it won't be one of those stories either. Only teen rating. Thanks for catching the typos too. 
I almost thought it was going to be Spoon x Colt story for a second there. But then I scrolled down. xD
Nice, a Sweetie Spoon story. Haven't seen one in a bit. I am so reading this when I get back! <3
AWW~ COME ON!
It ended like, at that point you just wish a story would just continue. But nope. You had to go and end it at a perfectly fine scene for the next chapter to transition into.
Loving this story. Silver's dad owning a camping boat rental place? Being outdoorsy and stuff? I wonder if her mother is more of the Rich and Elite who just happened to fall for his 'rustic' charm or something. :P
I'm betting Diamond's dad probably wanted to have more quality time for once with Diamond and pulled that annoying "No. You hang out with your friend every single day." excuse.
Loving the pacing so far. Hope this takes its time. Summer fun and chance to find some accidental love?
Crushes are so cute. Let's see what happens!
P.S. More please! <3
Liking it so far, really interesting!
Aww, for me?
That means I have to get to working on that other story. You know which one...
5685278 He may or may not just be an eccentric billionaire.
more is on the way.
5685319 It took me a year to finally get around to this one.
Yeah, I tried to commission a ABxSB? I forgot.
5685324
Hopefully I'll have it done by the end of either next week or the week after.
5684513 I am so glad to hear that. Also, can't wait can't wait can't wait! Hope you update soon. I'll be waiting.
Well, that was a very random string of thoughts. Silver's mind wanders at speeds even her brain can't keep up with when it comes to filtering that little mouth of hers. But Sweetie Belle does have a cute mane. Good thing she went down the less crowded cove, wouldn't want any birds or chipmunks catching her speak such embarrassing confessions. :P
Those three really are impossible. Get their flanks saved and STILL manage to squeeze in some deal. Things are going to get weird for Silver Spoon from here on out, that muzzle to muzzle may as well been a kiss far as that silver coated filly was concerned. "Her eyes were glazed back" geez, girl gots it bad. xD
Something tells me Silver has been missing out on awesome friendship times with Di with how secretive she's been. River rafting is like something all rich people do at least once in their lives. It's not just for ponies like the CMC. Oh but the chaos, the adorable chaos of coming back to a potential three way love triangle of Di, Sweetie, and Silver Spoon in the middle with two fillies fighting over her? Too cute a thought.
Wait... man, how have we not had a story like that before??? I need to talk to some people about this. We need more ponies fighting over Silver Spoon in future stories. Whelp, got sidetracked again with my own imaginings again! lol
Nice chapter. Looking forward to Day 2.
Found a couple of typos; let me know if you'd like any help, and I can PM you.
5709582 Them damn typos are bound to show up
. PM them to me please.
She, she, she. I'm not sure how much the last one (after the semicolon) is needed, but no matter what, it does make it sound clunky.
What?
I understand the sentiment I think, but it is a bit repetitive to include the picking and the sentence would flow better without.
So, not bad, though the time with Silver on the path was... odd. It just ended up feeling forced just how angry she was when this seemed like a decision she would have found out at home or sometime before then, but even if that weren't the case, her decision to get happy, only to go right back to angrier then 50 woman who just found out they were cheated on was a bit jarring. Mix that with grammar and punctuation mistakes, and sometimes my ability to follow was a little.. rough.
However, it was cute and you do have the other characters somewhat solidly. Some of the jokes even got a few smiles from me. Going on to the next chapter now.
The whole time I've worked this place with daddy, no one has used the flare!
Wouldn't this make more sense the other way around?
This may be just, "It's Equestria", but why would canoeing be dorky? In fact, because they use hooves, unless they're specially designed, wouldn't this be an incredible feat for a pony to be good at?
The normal phrase is 'cut her off' not across, and it is still awkward to just have after dialogue like that.
You still make the question mark a comma here, as asked implies the question mark and you need the comma for the transition.
So yeah, that odd feeling didn't go away. Almost anytime Silver Spoon thought of Sweetie and had embarrassing thoughts come off as very random and out of the blue as it had no lead in or thing to be reacting to. However, the one time it did work was the twinge of guilt, mainly for the subtlety to it. And I think in the end that, and the distracting amount of error (the above ones are by no means all of them), is why I can't quite enjoy this fic. I don't mind this mood for Silver Spoon, making her an insecure bully who has to overdramatize EVERYTHING for being dorky or uncool, because it does fit. However, it feels hamfisted, even for a child. There isn't a moment where it gave us a chance to breath or let Silver feel like herself instead of simply some snobby bitch. The closest we get to is the romantic subplot, but I've stated my problems with that.
I will say I do see potential with the story. You have left yourself a lot of options and the small worms of doubt in Silver's mind for the romance to possibly work. I think the main thing holding you back is a the lack of an editor a prereader with a finer tooth comb for consistency errors or to tell you when you are trying too hard. Also an editor who does the same, but with spelling and grammar errors. This is good, do not get me wrong about that, but a better story is trying to get out and being held back by a smudged marker and a five year old screaming in my ear.
Dangit! The only thing terrible about this story is...
...no more new chapters.
I should have waited till chapter 3 came out before reading chapter 2!
When oh when will it come out!?!?
Possible correction:
1. Silver Spoon panted slowing her rowning and flexing her shoulders.
So cute, silver spoon is my number 1 for a reason.
This has so much potential, you seriously need to continue it. I would hate to see this story unfinished.
5873547 Same here.
This story seems to be out of Twi-Fi range. We need to setup new cables around the area. Darn Canterlotian nobles trying to block startups from servicing stories with little to no internet access.
I hereby vote we setup more poles and get this story some much needed Twi-Fi servicing!
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A very well done Silver Spoon story.
that was piceless! Funniest thing I read all day!
so those little maniacs loose 3 oars, have to be rescued and Silver Spoon ends up paying THEM?
yeah that sounds about right.
can't wait to read more.