Twilight loved visiting Canterlot castle's royal library. The library received new books often, making every visit like a new adventure in her literary mind. She was almost jumping with joy when she saw the tall book cases containing the latest information written from many of the highly intellectual individuals in Equestria. In a matter of minutes, she had a cart full of books that sparked her never-ending interest. Turning the corner to the next shelf, she froze.
Standing in front of the shelf was a tall creature with piercing blue eyes, battle-aged gold armor, and a large, worn out halberd leaning against the shelf. It was reading a book intently. The creature sensed the frozen pony's presence, and turned its head. Its eyes locked on to Twilight's.
"Hello. How do you do?"
Cover art credit to Raptorbane's deviantART
Big thanks to my editor, Word Worthy.
Finally! A league of legends crossover! There aren't enough on this website,
This looks like a great story. I can't wait to read how this story progress. I'm going to check up League of Legends. Great job with this story. I can't wait to see how this story progresses.
Looks good. Keep it up!
Wait! Honeydew?
Shit.
Now I think about a small pony with an orange beard XD
this looks quite interesting.
The curator of the sands and the unstable alicorn wise by side? While I think vel'koz would be a more interesting pick this shows a lot of potential.
I can see this going well, but I can't help but feel something might make me get ticked off and stop reading
But that's about 99.9 to 0.1 respectively.
Also, quick fix for
and the line below it,
Princesses is the correct plural
I wonder if Nasus will share with Twi and how she will react, that he's trying to kill his own brother? Especially with how close she is with her own.
is this Pre-Lore change Nasus? (remember the latest patch changed the lore of basically any champion with a connection to Shurmia like Nasus, Renekton, Xerath, Amumu)
D CANE
D CANE
doge
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I'm honestly more interested in Celestia's reaction. After all, Sunbutt knows a thing or two about having to fight a sibling who's been tainted by evil.
FINALLY!!!!!
, a fanfic of some one from Shurima 
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5044194 Ah good point, I bet he'd even ask her, if she was unable to banish Luna, and she was beyond redemption, would she kill her little sister?
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Eh, I don't know. As old and wise as Nasus is, I'd think he'd have a bit more tact than to ask something like that. Or at least not so bluntly.
first off, I have to say, that this is a good story, a great chapter with great grammar, and it is not unbearably rushed, but you should write more (like twice or thrice the amount) for each scene, because 600 words is too little for one chapter, unless it is a oneshot, as is 1100 words. The conversations are rather linear and the overall look of it all tells me, that you want to get to a certain point in the story as fast as possible. A word of advice: don't just look at the goal; you should also look where you step, for you may come across a cliff on this particular way.
I like it and hope we don't have so long to wait for the next chapter^^
It seems that every lol crossover seems to have Susan in it. Must be some form of initiation.
I thoughtSusan (Nasus) had red eyes?
Was there a hint of Azir or was it just the name sounding the same?
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Damnit why do you gotta go with his backwards name?
5046952 Nah they glow blue. Some of his skins change it, but the default one has glowing blue eyes. This is actually a pretty interesting story, I also like how Nasus is being portrayed. It feels right. Looking forward to more, have a thumbs up and fave for your troubles.
a well done (if fast paced) LoL story with one of the few seemingly NICE champs?
Watch'd and Fav'd.
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Gosh that sounds so freaking badass.
Nice chapter. I think you did a great job. Good job with this story. I can't wait to read how this story progresses.
This seems interesting, but you might want to look into moving away from being so 'Tell' as it were. He looked. He thought. She said. etc, etc. A bit more show might be good, otherwise reading it becomes less enjoyable and interesting. There's my two cents, hope it helps.
5045510 You mind if I borrow that last part? It's an amazing quote. I've heard a few like it, but never phrased quite like that.
Damnit now i gotta go play league
as a huge fan of LoL I just loved this fic
OPEN THE GATES! The cane! It's real people!
Nasus's voice is so fucking classy. Imagining him say it while I read(Also imagining him with a top-hat, but that's a different story) made my day.
Imagine Veigar in Equestria! ...Huh... Hold on, I gotta go start writing.
i like it, nasus being one of my fav champs
This is very interesting please keep it up
5051550 Dammit i wanted to write a story about discord stepping on a lego...
Are we supposed to know who those two summoners were?
5054735 None of the summoners have names besides one or two.
I would presume he made those names up for the story
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Interesting. A comedy tag on a story about cancer.
In case Nasus ever gets into a fight. How many stacks does he have as of right now?
5049052 feel free, dude!
but I want to be credited!
Now someone needs to write a story about Diana meeting Princess Luna
You have me intrigued
While I'm a bit of a sucker for league fics, the biggest issue here is the dialogue. It's clumsy, clunky, and really doesn't feel natural.
I have not looked forward to an LoL crossover so much since Legendary was first posted, and then never continued. Please, for our sake, don't let this die like Legendary did...
Grammar could use some tweaking, but it's not HORRENDOUS. When you use ellipses, you put a space after them, and you don't put a comma after them either. The point of an ellipses is that it's like a longer comma. A comma means a short breath, or a half-beat of silence. Ellipses indicates one to three or four seconds pass, as you struggle to, how to put it... find the right word to use. (Just an example, lol.)
I guess the main problem I have in general is that this story is moving too quickly. Details are sparse, and the characters seem somewhat shallow due to it. There's more, but I do not know how to verbalise what else is wrong, nor what to do to fix it, sorry.
The cane is real.
Ahem. I agree with what other people are saying about the story. It really needs more details. It would shine if it had more. That, and an editor would help you.
Wait, so is Nasus scared or is Twilight? The way that sentence is built makes it sound like Nasus is afraid of Twilight.
Apologies for the long wait. School has been effing me lately. I'll try to get the next chapter in a couple days. Sorry again.