Ever since Tirek had been returned to Tartarus, Celestia has been experiencing a recurring nightmare: Luna was never healed and she was only biding her time. Celestia wakes every morning covered in cold sweat and yet she knows the dream is impossible. Luna is only Luna. So why? Why can she not rid herself of these horrible images? Luna suggests a plan to vanquish the nightmare knowing it would be impossible in the dream realm. The only possible way: An old spell.
Luna and Celestia are willing to do anything for one another. Does that include becoming the other?
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Chapters (4)
Really interesting intro, got me really curious.
Here's to hoping luna doesn't become what her sister fears...
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Neat story you have here, i just finished it and i have to say at first i thought this was going to be a one-shot (didn't notice the incomplete status). Anyway i'm excited to see where the story goes from here because the first chapter is a tad short.
Very eager to see how this plays out
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The next two chapters will be far longer I promise!
Thank you for comment!
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Me too!... wait i'm writing it I know how it turns out!
4521419 Don't let the fact you are writing mean you know it. Sometimes, your own work will surprise in how they go.
4521414 didn't mean to pressure you or anything, sorry. Keep up the good quality ;)
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Not a problem! I'm glad you enjoyed!
I'm not in the mood to read this type of story, but that doesn't mean I can't help!
Ever since Tirek had been returned to Tartarus, Celestia has been experiencing a recurring nightmare: Luna was never healed andshe was only biding her time. Celestia wakes every morning covered in cold sweat and yet she knows the dream is impossible. Luna is only Luna. So why? Why can she not rid herself of these horrible images? Luna suggests a plan to vanquish the nightmare knowing it would be impossible in the dream realm. The only possible way: An old spell.
Luna and Celestia are willing to do anything for one another. Does that include becoming the other?
This is interesting! W8 next chapter!
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Fixed thank you!
An interesting thing about Equines especially horses, donkeys and ponies is that they cannot be alone. They, like humans, NEED social interaction as much as they need food. Their is a horse at the farm i work on and for two years he was kept alone in a stable, let out only to run, graze and get exercise but he had no company. Now he acts like, well the best i can equate it to is that he is as socially handicapped as I would imagine a horse would be with the equivalent of autism. He just doesn't know how to interact efficiently. he is slowly learning and he is one of the kindest, sweetest, and gentlest horses i have had the pleasure of meeting.
So Lunas fall to darkness makes sense not only from a human perspective but also from a horses herd perspective.
sorry I couldn't get to editing this story before you put it out
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however, I did catch this piece of grammar error;
*comma
Anyway, if you still want, feel free to send me anything you need proof-read and I promise I'll at least let you know if I can't get to it within 24 hours of it being sent next time.
I thought it was finished. Better double your hustle, little lady. Deaderline''s right around the corner, isn't it?
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...July first i'm almost there!
Nice little observation to see that Nightmare Moon was more than an invading force on Luna
Why do they fly back to the castle? From earlier it made it sound as if the were in Luna's room or some study.
The way it is presented is that the petitioner was worried about what conventional mining would do to the lake. The area being mined had already been sold away at 25% it's worth. I do not see how this pony was swindling power other than being a whistle blower.
Is Luna schizophrenic or does she suffer from Dissociative Identity Disorder?
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They were at the Castle of The Royal Pony Sister's to find the spell so they had to return to Caterlot.
It was in the way that the petition was written. Luna being used to olden ways of mining would be led to believe there was much more danger then in reality. Celestia as Luna figured quickly this noble was tricking Luna.
She has DID yes
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Open pit mining, depending on the geography would allow for unneeded runoff to enter the lake. I guess I still have some confusion over what the noble is asking for in regards to the mining around the lake. It is plainly obvious that Luna was used to get the land around the lake, but I am confused as to the angle of the petitioner.
Would a separate personality have a soul in this case or just be an issue of the mind? Also, would this condition have existed before Luna went Nightmare Moon on Celestia or did the lack of attention and perceived scorn push a pony that was susceptible to mental disease over the edge?
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Is it alright if I PM you? Some of this will be coming up in a sequel but I see no reason not to discuss it privately ^^
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Sure thing.
Just to bring it to your attention, there is no mention of them actually being at the Castle of the Royal Pony Sisters. Adding it to the beginning of chapter 2 would be good. Possibly adding more detail when they are leaving the castle as well, those were two points of confusion for me and when looking back, could tell they were not as well explained as I would have liked.
And together they form Voltron!
You did a wonderful job of capturing the past versions of them here.
SUSPENSE!
How disturbing would that be for your most feared enemy to go up and lick your nose?
First.
I wonder why spell dont work? Nice chapter. I w8 a sequel!
MORE of the SUSPENSE!!!
question: will the sequel be announced by adding another chapter with a link to it? Because otherwise I won't be able to tell when it's out :-/
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It will indeed
oooo, this is good. No quick happy ending; this story is only beginning!
Are these 'Celestia's' thoughts? Why would she think about retaining herself?
Hmmm, is the memory leaks good or bad... I have yet to decide.
Capitalize the first "b" so it is "B-but" and change the comma location.
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Guard's thoughts it didn't come out the way I had hoped it would.
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The wording and order of names worked together to add a little confusion at that point. Other than that I am wondering where the sequel is, I go looking, and it's not there... What?
WHAT?!
I must read more!
I suppose you will go over the reason for the failure, I am suspecting it is cause Luna if using Celestia's magic or something similar to that. Or would NMM be involved, looking to make Celestia go crazy?
4631864 actually i think it is because "Luna" does not want to switch back because she feels she has wronged her sister more... something along that
Aww, now I have the warm fuzzies.
Sequel? Sequel! Where's the sequel? Want the sequel!
Sequel? This doesn't need a sequel, it needs a next chapter!
To end this story here is like 'The lord of the rings' ending at the council of Rivendell. Or 'Star wars' ending with Luke and ObiWan fleeing Tatooine.
Wait a minute, if this story is "finished" and all it needs is a sequel, could that mean you'll work more on the "Mother" story now?
oh please oh please let it be so.
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I see it more as a two part episode. Like Best of both worlds from Star trek Next Gen.
agreed not sequel next chapter. good story
...absolutely. While you can leave the proceedings to imagination, I believe it would make for a truly delightful story.
I'd have to agree with the people demanding another chapter. You have set up quite a lot of good stuff here, but to stop at this point does not leave us with anything feeling completed. It makes more sense to continue writing in this story. But of course, that is up to you.
As is, you have set up an interesting situation. The presentation was a little exposition heavy, but making it your characters' own words kept things very readable. I'd like to see more.
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Loving this story, but is that a quote from somewhere? It sounds so familiar!
Can't wait for this to continue! Love this set-up and premise. The character interactions between the sisters are really sweet.
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Actually I wrote it myself. I write all of the spells I use in my stories.
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That's really cool!
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Thank you!
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oh i like it i can't waite for the squele it so so good ^_^.
This was a really good story! The only problem I have is that you did not use Latin properly in those couple places. Based on those sentences I'm thinking you used Google Translate, yes? Aside from that I loved it!
Into the favorites list it goes!
Thanks for linking this to me, Foalsie! I enjoyed it greatly!
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I am still not adorable!