Story Within A Story
Twilight bolted down the stairs of their castle home into the recently outfitted library, where Spike was staring at a piece of paper, deep in thought.
“Spike!” Twilight called out.
“What’s up, Twi?” Spike responded, not bothering to lift his gaze. “Any luck with ideas?”
“Yep! There’s no way we can lose this competition with the idea I just came up with.” Twilight’s face gleamed with a proud smile.
“Really? Let’s hear it!” Spike jumped in his seat, putting on his own smile.
Just for a change of pace, Twilight decided that Spike and her should try and write a Power Ponies fanfiction for the bi-monthly contest that Fanfiction Today held. However, what was supposed to be a fun and lighthearted diversion turned into hours of failed brainstorming and headaches.
“Alright, here goes.” Twilight cleared her throat, bringing Spike to the edge of his seat in anticipation. “It’s going to be a riveting tale of romance and adventure upon the streets of Maretropolis. It revolves around Hum-Drum breaking his pattern of failure, and—”
“Nope. It’s not gonna work,” Spike interrupted, shaking his head and folding his arms.
“What? You didn’t even hear the entire idea yet!”
“Didn’t need to. It’s about Hum-Drum!” Spike responded.
“So?” Twilight asked, confusion emanating in her voice.
“Nobody likes Hum-Drum! There are ponies who won’t even read something if it has Hum-Drum as the main character. They’ll just look at it, say that it sucks, and move on.” Spike plopped his head in his palms, and let out a deep sigh.
“Psh, c’mon Spike… We live in an enlightened society. Nopony is that ignorant in this day and age! They can’t just... blindly judge something for no reason. ” Twilight chuckled to herself, but earned an eyeroll from her friend.
“They can, and they will. We live with stupid ponies, Twi. The sooner you learn that, the happier you’ll be.” Spike gave her a sad nod, and turned back to his paper.
“Well, what do you suggest, Spike?”
“Okay, I drew up this little outline for review. Tell me what you think.” Spike handed his outline to Twilight, who levitated it to reading distance.
Going over the plot he had written out, her face twisted further and further into one of distaste.
“Spike! This is… This is…”
“Perfect?”
“Terrible! It’s just a cheap plot about Zapp and the Masked Matter-Horn talking in the hideout, and then they start making out for no reason! Nopony will want to read this!” She crumpled the paper and threw it back at him.
“Correction: EVERYPONY will want to read this! Look at the top stories from last month’s issue.” Spike grabbed the most recent issue of Fanfiction Today, and flipped the pages until arriving at the correct one, and shoved it up to Twilight’s face.. “You see? In the top Ten highly appraised stories in the readers poll, there are three stories like the one I planned. In addition, there are also two mature stories, and one about Fili-Second eating a baked potato. There’s a method you have to follow, Twi!”
Twilight grimaced as the thought of the story she was about to write floated through her mind. “But Spike, it’s so… cliche! We’re basically just doing it because everypony else does it.”
“Yep. Sounds about right.”
“...Fine. Let’s get this over with.”
The two spent the better part of the next thirty minutes producing the fiction that would hopefully win them notoriety from the readers. With sweat drenched brows, cramping claws and the demoralized willpower that could only come from selling out to the crowd, they were finally done.
“Okay, Spike, let’s read what we got!”
“Ahem.” Spike cleared his throat and held up their conjoined masterpiece. “It says:”
It was a dark and stormy night in Maretropolis. The town was safe for the moment, so the Power Ponies took the opportunity to relax and get some much needed rest.
...All except two.
“Wait a second, Spike. Is it proper punctuation to use an ellipsis like that?”
“Twilight, be quiet and let me read.”
The hideout had a beautiful view of the entire city, and it was currently being appreciated by two members of the Power Pony group.
“I love these relaxed nights. So beautiful, so peaceful.” Zapp looked over to her friend, Masked Matter-Horn.
“I know. These times make you think about life. About those who truly matter.” Mask looked back toward Zapp, a smile adorning her face.
“I know what you mean. It makes you think about the ones you really love.”
“Wait a second!” Twilight interrupted once more. “Now that we’re reading this out loud, I just realized how out of character they are! They’d never talk like this in the comics!”
“Trust me, Twi… it won’t matter.”
The two Power Ponies looked into each other’s eyes for a brief moment. The world seemed to stop as their reflections receded into those beautiful pools of color.
“I love you, Zapp.”
“I love you too, Mask!”
They instantly slammed their lips against each other and rolled onto the floor. Their hooves stroking up and down each other’s bodies, they were lost in a world of bliss and love. Their tongues battled it out in a wrestling match of epic proportions.
“Tongue wrestling?” Twilight rolled her eyes.
“...Yes, Twilight.”
Just as they thought the situation couldn’t get any better, their lust reached new heights. Unfortunately, they had to breathe, so their mouths separated for a brief moment.
“I want to be with you… forever,” Zapp said, a thin string of saliva connecting their parted lips.
“I feel the same way! Let’s make it official!”
The ensuing night of passion eclipsed all notions of romance and lust the two had ever felt. And they loved it.
THE END
“Well, that was worst piece of literature I’ve ever had to sit through,” Twilight said, disgust dripping from her words. “I can’t believe you made me help write this atrocity! It’s generic, cliche, horribly paced, and makes no sense. It’s just an excuse for a lesbian make-out session!”
“Perfect! Popular list, here we come!”
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I'm crying from how hard I was laughing at the end. Dude...dude...all of my yes.
4401351 i'm gonna get hung on a stake in the TwiDash groups when this gets posted
Shhh... do you hear that? It's the sound of butthurt TwiDash fans... crying out in petty whines... It is a beautiful sound
4401360 oh man, it's gonna get so hectic up in hea
4401368 ahh yes, the sound of an angry mob approaches. I revel in it
oh I fear the wrath you have called down upon yourself good sir, I shall pray in the light of the seven for your safety. But also this was hilarious.
4401960 i appreciate the support my friend
May the grace of whatever deity you believe in rescue my soul from judgement tonight 
I demand to see twilight's OC. Until then, 9/10
And a like
And a favorite
And your babies
4402000 my first attempt at comedy... succeeds!
*imitating the Heavy* BWAHAHAHA!
Wonderful story, 5 stars A+ 4 stars
You can get away with this, it's totally not twidash, thats believable right ... right 
*Reads story*
4401360
Indeed. Your username is somewhat fitting at this moment.
omg, dustin. so true... so true
Ummm . . . For once in my life I'm at a loss for words - I simply have nothing educated to say. So instead of saying something educated, I'm going to be refreshingly, honestly generic: I loved this piece! I loved the concept, I loved the execution, I appreciated the hidden jokes and the way you used satire to ridicule practically half the writers on this site . . . In short, I loved it and I will be looking forward to seeing more from you in the future.
4402064 thanks!
i made sure to ridicule myself a bit too, because I kind of have a tendency to be annoying like Twi when it comes to generic stories. 
Nobody likes Hum-Drum...
The satire in this... Man, I love it.
Extra points for irony for Spike delivering the lines on no one wanting to read a Hum-Drum story.
:rainbowderp that was deep... in a really funny way
This is where I hit the uprate button.
(Psst--it should be "she and Spike." And I still laughed!)
4402184 Thanks, sir. I wanted to give my two cents on the annoying fanfiction stereotypes in a fun way.
All. My. Yes.
It's so true.
4402194 M'am, but still applies!
4402224 sorry, ma'am. no disrespect intended.
4402230 None taken!
T-too much win!
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4402385 that gif was beyond epic
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Edit: Popular box get!
Excellent satire, my dear author. I smiled the whole way through. Normally i'd try and give a more detailed and in depth review, but I feel that would only defeat the purpose of this piece, so I shall refrain this time (that and it', like, 11:30pm and I'm too tired to do so).
You'll have my upvote when the counter doesn't read 42 anymore. Good luck in your future endeavors.
~ Lupo
Obligatory:
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Now that that's out of the way, someone write 'Fili-Second Eats a Baked Potato',
haha this story so reminds me of people on here with their editors haha. This really relates to people and i love it!
10 out of 10 for Comedy
9 out of 10 for grammar
10 out of 10 for overall story.
A l i k e a n d a f a v e y u o r w a y
Curse you! We humans need to breath!
Sad thing is, I've had a very similar conversation with my cousin (I being Twi) when I first discovered fanfiction.
Truer words were never written.
4402862 do not ask. Do.
Worth the wait of page loading.
Pretty sure you just subtly dissed 99.9% of the 'romance' writers on this site.
And the rest of them are laughing.
Fanficception!
(Yes I know the word doesn't work that way.)
Enjoy your practically obligatory fave and upvote.
You know. Since you covered the room in blood and organs from my sides splitting.
4404031
hope you have a mop handy 
and thanks man.I'm glad you liked it
I get the strangest feeling that this story is trying to tell me something. But what is it?
Oh yeah, that it requires a green thumb.
As for TwiDash, I ain't even mad.I love the cover art.
Fillysecond eating a potato reminds me of Batman eating a hotdog.
4404414 lol thanks
i thought it fit fairly well 
Yep, sounds like the average Feature Box fic.
What has been will be again,
what has been done will be done again;
there is nothing new under the sun.
This is the stuff TVtropes are made of.
4404437 And THAT reminded ME of THIS! Small world, huh?
4407608
Hahaha! Small world indeed.
For the record, I don't believe a word of that A/N at the bottom...
4402862
I'll consider it.
That sounds like an average feature box and
for making laugh with its generic stupidity.