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Just a simple university student from Michigan.

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This story is a sequel to Heartaches By The Number


One year since Big Mac and Pinkie Pie got together, and they have never been more happier. Although some bumps show up along the way such as Big Mac's fear of getting intimate or Pinkie's sister also having a crush on the stallion.

Things don't seem to be going well between Fluttershy and her special somepony.

And Cheerilee has learned to love again, but with someone quite unexpected.

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 80 )

At least she knows she is a crazy bitch.:pinkiesmile:

Seems like an interesting story. I can't wait for the next one. have fun.

Big Mac and Pinkie needs to find a way to save the Cakes' lovelife!!!

Now that you're doing a sequel to a story I liked, I feel more comfortable with a bit of crriticism, so:

Writing that 'she flirted' or 'felt a bit sad' is too abstract. Try to instead have actions that convey the same, like fluttering her eyelashes or her smile faltering.

The way Pinkie thinks about Mac not wanting to get intimate seems to fit poorly with the parts just before and after it, which seem to say he's merely oblivious. I mean, him just acting the part because he's uncomfortable ma(e sense, but it's not indicated by his actions, like looking strained at Pinkies suggestiveness.

I'm also a little worried about all these plot threads you've set up. TVTropes calls it 'four threads, all waiting' due to how stories tend to slow to a crawl as the author tries to write essentially several stories at the same time, with them all suffering as a result. Any of these prompts would make a good story basis on their own - maud-pinkie-mac, cake drama, lonely cheerilee, and the yet unrevealed problems fluttershy has. And of coursec us readers all have our preferences for what we'd rather read, so it looks like there'll be a lot of waiting for the characters we're interested in to start doing stuff again...

I better not be sensing any CheeriLight. :ajbemused:

Nice chapter, so now we have a plot twist. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Nothing wrong with a little cheerilight! :twilightblush:

Do you like rocks?

Baby, I'm no Fred Flintstone, but I can make your Bed Rock.

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You deserve a medal.

"Don't you normally talk about these things with your cousin Joy Stick?"

I forgot that my OC was in this universe :rainbowlaugh:

This is going to get awkward. Great chapter.

Knowing Maud she'll tell it like it is.

"At least she doesn't see me as a crazy bitch." mumbled Cheerilee to herself.
"At least she doesn't see me as a crazy bitch." mumbled Sparkle to herself.

Big Mac is going to wish he hadn't taken Maud's love for Granite.

Oh boy. I thought though Pinkie and her talked. Man this may not end very well.

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They did talk.

Those who are emotionless are bolding and straightforward.

*Reads the prequels title* than *Reads Title of this story*

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When is the next chapter

When Maud tells it like it is she never waste anytime.
Just imagine if Twilight and Cheerilee go all lusty lust when they're sober.
Spike really needs to score.

I hope that Pinkie really doesn't want to share Mac. That would be disastrous.

I could do without the homosexual bits, but in all truth, I just skip over them anyways. Other than that, this story is winding up to be extremely entertaining.

Sad. I wish though they would have worked that out. Pinkie, your plan is insane, and not in a good way. Best of luck with the next chapter.

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Even Maude knows it is insane. But decided to go along with it just for the heck of it.

If the Cakes are going on their honeymoon, who's gonna watch the twins?

Bulk Biceps and Fluttershy? Interesting.
Cheerilee needs to go to the one pony who knows Twilight longer than anypony or in this case somedragon.

Talk to the Poor Stallion. He is Traumatized here and doesn't have to have sex. Please Maud. Help Pinkie REALIZE THAT!!!!!!!!

Don't you bucking dare Mac.

Is Maud in heat?

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No.
That's a different story for another time.

4318919 I can't even think what will Maud look like in heat.

Maybe, perhaps, you should focus more on Mac's story and less on the others? I don't know. They don't interest me as much...
Sorry?

'Strong' resemblance is the correct phrase, not high.

Nice way to end this chapter. Good job with Maud's character. I think you captured it correctly.

Next chapter shoud be we need talk/ score 10

Huh never thought that Double B would be a father figure for Scootaloo.

Scootaloo as Bulk Biceps daughter = new headcanon

Wow. Go BULK. YEAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Single again? My God... It's been so long - I've forgotten what that even feels like...
Were I to come across such a situation (and I pray to God that I never will), I would more than likely revert back to a hermetic lifestyle in which I would avoid all human contact and slowly develop into a pail emaciated creature, skulking about the hallways and talking to my cats...

Way to go GentleBulk!!!!
Big Mac better not play 'on the other side'.

Please fluttermac now :pinkiecrazy: :yay:x:eeyup:

That was funny reading Pinkies reasons for not going for other stallions. The same with Spike tell Twilight he knew about her. Great chapter.

You should make a side story about Twilight and Cheerilee.

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