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Dustin Lange

The smallest changes can make the biggest difference.


What do Vinyl and Neon do after a show?
Did anything happen at the show?
Will this affect Octavia? And if it does, how?
Is Vinyl the reason Octavia is in therapy?
Will all of these questions be answered in this story? ... maybe...

Pre-read by Strythio.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 56 )

Pretty enjoyable Slice of Life, and amazingly a fic with both Vinyl and Octavia, but not in a romantic relationship! :rainbowlaugh: (At least as far as I can tell, with the separate rooms and stuff even. Though I suppose it's open to interpretation.)

Okay, it may be a joke, but really, it's disturbingly hard to find fics with both Vinyl and Octavia, but not them shipped, I may just be exaggerating, but I'm not so sure.

Hell, at least 80% of fics with Vinyl and Octavia as the principle characters with the Romance tag will have them shipped together. It's gotten to the point you just have to face desk. :facehoof:

First let me thank you for the praise!:heart:

Second: That is something that I as well as a lot of people I talk to notice, so I thought that I would write something with them just living with eachother. Though like you said; it is open for interpretation. It is just a matter of what the reader wants from the story.:eeyup:

4317991 I know right? But I guess it has to do with the whole "everypony's a lesbian" that this fandom seems to love. :derpytongue2:

I mean really, there are stallions who are also musicians that fit both Octavia and Vinyl, you even have Neon in here for Vinyl, I mean the Vinyl x Octavia is bad, but Octavia x a stallion is so rare it's on the endangered fictions list. :rainbowlaugh:

(I find it funny Vinyl actually has more straight ships, seeing as she's more believable as a bisexual then Octavia being lesbian or bi.)

I feel like you and I get along verry well. (Have a follow!)

And now I want to write a ship-fic with Octavia and a stallion...:facehoof:

Mother of Celestia!!! I just looked at your page... all I have to ask is. "Would you like some more Octavia?"

4318262 My page consumes souls, it drives people to madness, and it can never have too much Octavia. :moustache:

:rainbowlaugh:I never had a soul to begin with!:pinkiecrazy:

4318291 Well, you still have madness to be driven to, if not already there. :rainbowkiss:

I am slowly getting there...

4318325 Good... good. :pinkiecrazy:

But then again, can you survive the First Great Air War?

Cold blooded murder, covered up with flags and lies, patriotism sells really well today, but we are paying the price.

Over our bones, profit will be made by those who told us the world would be a better place if we gave our lives!


We may be dead in a week or an hour, tomorrow it might be your turn.

Shed your wings, or be burnt alive!


Is that from something or did you just make it up?

4318405 From the song Flags and Lies by Reflected. :moustache:

You're not good at drunk...I guess I wouldn't know. Anyways-
Not bad with the story... Kinda short but not that bad... :3

Interesting song, that is for sure!
I liked it!

4318464 Yea, it's a good song, and I'm normally not one for autotune.

Bravo, bravo. :rainbowlaugh:

Once he felt he was studied up, he adjusted his glasses and tie; preparing himself for the conversation ahead.

As your pre-reader, I seek redemption for that one. :rainbowlaugh: "Once he felt that he was studied up in preparation for the conversation ahead, he adjusted his glasses and tie."

Other than that, I like it. It's a pretty straightforward Slice of Life fic, and I can see that you added some more meat to some of the scenes that we had talked about.

Course, I still think a little more meat could be added in places, Vinyl's second part and the very end in particular, but other than that, the story connects and works its purpose.

Good job. :rainbowdetermined2:

There were a few pictures of Octavia and Vinyl Scratch on the oaken shelf above the fire place. Some with Vinyl in various, silly poses.

"There were a few pictures of Octavia and Vinyl Scratch on the oaken shelf above the fireplace, some with Vinyl in various silly poses."

That reminds me; don't forget to let me pre-read the final product too, if it is dramatically different from previous versions. As your pre-reader, it is kind of my job to pick out little things like that before they go up. :scootangel:

i didint even read it yet im dieing from that description:rainbowlaugh:

Hope you like/liked it!

4605993 lol u got a like and fave from me

Vinyl's Night Out
by Dustin Lange
2,027 words

What do Vinyl and Neon do after a show?
Did anything happen at the show?
Will this affect Octavia? And if it does, how?
Is Vinyl the reason Octavia is in therapy?
Will all of these questions be answered in this story? ... maybe...

Thoughts Before: Vinyl and Octavia as foils is certainly well worn ground (I myself have trodden upon it as well.), though I find the absence of a [Romance] tag interesting. The 23/1 upvote ratio promises this to be at least passably unoffensive. Also, does the Dustin not realize that there's a Neon Lights character tag?

Thoughts After: This begins with a sloppy tense change in the second paragraph and a shameless callback to Epic Wub Time--not good signs.

Vinyl must have quite the dulled taste buds or unmentioned desperation to be able to chug vodka.

Octavia is a pompous ass in this.

Oye. This is basically Octavia answering a few mundane questions from her therapist spliced into generic scenes of Vinyl dragging Neon along while she gets completely drunk. Why is shy drinking so heavily? Why does Octavia put up with it? Why is this short collection of scenes so amazingly bland? Sadly, this story answers none of these questions. Vinyl being a drunkard is something that's been done to death, and this attempt was neither fresh nor funny. The writing was technically sound, but hardly inspired. I would suggest the author find their own stories to tell instead of trying to leech off others.

Verdict: Maybe I'm just jaded, but unless you want to subject yourself to passably unoffensive SoL, I would pass on this one.

This is Super Trampoline's 2nd Review

Thank you for the time you put into this, and I do see what you are getting at.

Now some might take this as an excuse, but this started out as something completely different. It was going to be a short story for Six Word Stories, but I kept getting things to add to it, and after a while, this was made.

It was going to just be Octavia talking about Vinyl... it might just be me, but I think this is more interesting than that.

Again, thank you! I love to see what people think of my writing!

4624715 I'm glad you don't hate me now. But please, Neon Lights has his own character tag. Please properly tag him. He feels sad that he is only refered to as "Other" in the character tag section. :raritydespair:

I looked for him, could not find him.
It might be because I am stuck using a NOOK Tablet.

4625015 He's about 2/3rds through the list of background ponies.

I give it a 10/10, "Seems legit"

I really liked it. I hope your other stories are as good. Looking forward to reading more! :raritystarry:


Well, the stories that I have out right now arn't the best, but all of the ones I have yet to publish will be better.

There was a picture of a pony on a stretcher holding his back left leg, the quote read, ”My leg!”

Yes! After 31 weeks, someone got it!


How did no-one see this sooner lol?

Comment posted by Vanilla Treat deleted Dec 22nd, 2014

not half bad. certainly warrants a like, at any rate!

This had me laughing from start to finish, I like it.

This story never gets old. :ajsmug:

Cute. Nice job.

A rather nice, bite-sized story that made me smile here and there. It makes full use of the SoL tag, so if someone wants to read something without a bigger gradation or surprising plot twist, this might be a good one for them. Also noticed quite a bunch of random grammar errors (those in the drunken speech are forgiven).

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