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jkbrony


I love writing and MLP. So....I think I'm in the right place.

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For helping her complete a lengthy assignment, Twilight decides to treat Spike to breakfast, which will unexpectedly call forth their withdrawn thoughts and feelings and allow them to gain a deeper understanding of each other.

Set shortly after The Crystal Empire arc.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 30 )

I really liked reading this story. Twilight and Spike are both very much likable/sympathetic characters here. Good work, :moustache:

Wow. That was great!

Very well written, especially for your first story! I've got my eye on you.

It would seem like something Twilight would hold onto, she has a significant inferiority complex.

You've really nailed the characterization on both Twilight and Spike here.

Really great work, you really managed to capture how inseparable Twilight and Spike are! I could even see it growing into romantic relationship overtime, because in this fic, they already act like a couple where one supports another! :twilightsmile:

3550186 Glad to see you here. And I agree with you.

Well isn't this a lovely surprise? A new author delivers one hell of an opening punch to the fandom. This was a lovely little story, and I really feel like you knocked the Spike/Twilight dynamic out of the park.

Twilight was in her 'Everything is fine' mode, and it took a whole lot of coaxing for Spike to get her to realize that everything was not fine. We also get to see Spike maturing from his earlier showings in the series. He's still young, but he shows a level of depth and maturity that you really don't expect from him.

Very well done, sir. Congrats on your feature, by the way. That is quite a first impression to make!

-Lumino

Always nice to see these types of stories where both Twilight and Spike pour out their inner feelings of guilt and self doubt. It just makes for some very good story telling. :twilightsmile:

That was a good read. Inbetween episode stories like this is what show how deep Twilight and Spike relationship really is, and I love it.:moustache::twilightsmile:
Good Job!:trollestia:

3551153 I think it's a shame this wasn't a romance fic. It had a lot of potential.

3551207I feel you on that. Still the best pairing in this show, in my opinion.:moustache::twilightsheepish:

This was very, very well written. They are true to who they are and you showed some realistic conversation, I really liked this, even better this could go in a lot of directions, from friendship, to romance to siblings, I prefer romance but I'm find with them being brother/sister if it's the case:rainbowlaugh: a really great job:twilightsmile:

to finally be finished after three lengthy, sleep-depraved days.

I think you mean deprived.

Other than that, good shit. :pinkiehappy:

Wasn't my cup of tea. Spike seemed way more insightful than I've ever seen him in canon, and you skimmed the Unfortunate Implications line with Spike's nailing of Twi's mental illness and him giving her a couple of sore verbal slaps in the face in places, which she shrugged off pretty well. I didn't hate it, that said. You've captured Twilight and Spike pretty well as individuals. You've also got a great grasp on plot progression. I just couldn't get behind the character interaction because a) It was cringe-worthy in places with how callous it was and b) half the time it seemed like you were writing with your observations, not Spike's.

Just want to say, that was amazing. You really portrayed their characters well.

Comment posted by jkbrony deleted Dec 21st, 2013
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Good work, no doubt. :pinkiehappy:

This is my fifth time reading this story. I seriously love it that much. :heart::pinkiecrazy:

Ah yes...now all is good! :moustache:

Yes! This was definitely a great read. A simple pairing without the pairing. I enjoy short writings like this. Brings out things others would normally overlook, when actually they are quite relevant.

10 out of 10 for slice of life
10 out of 10 for grammar
10 out of 10 for overall story
A like and a fav going your way. Good job.

I've come to call these sort of stories "episode closure fics," something written that feels entirely like the characters straight out of the show, written to tie up the loose ends of small but important cliffhangers that weren't covered.

This one's a bit lighter than most stories similar to it, but it's still a well-written piece that I enjoyed. /)

Really nice. Spike does feel too adult to me, both in how he spoke and in how he dealt with the theme (which was lampshaded in the story itself to great effect); nevertheless the story was still excellent :twilightsheepish:

Nice story :moustache:, though the odd metaphor of the Everfree was somewhat jarring.

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