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jkbrony


I love writing and MLP. So....I think I'm in the right place.

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Rainbow Dash has it all. She's popular, respected by those around her, and now that she's been accepted into the Wonderbolts Reserves, her dream of becoming a Wonderbolt is that much closer to being realized.

However, on a day she spends with her surrogate little sister, Scootaloo, Rainbow Dash receives news that will change her life forever. Everypony must deal with loss at some point or another...

Set after much of season 4, but before Equestria Games and Twilight's Kingdom.

Art by GromekTwist

Chapters (14)
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Comments ( 255 )

I want to see where you go with this

I was expecting the tragic event to be something Scootaloo had, I must admit I didn't see this coming. :fluttercry:

"Scootaloo," Rainbow said in a whisper. "Please don't tell anypony about this."

Rainbow Dash, keeping this to yourself isn't going to make you feel any better. Your friends will all worry what's wrong with you when you don't seem your usual self. You have to tell them, or you'll only make things harder on yourself. :ajbemused:

Well now, this was quite enthralling.
I'm actually quite hooked now.

I'm also truly surprised that you don't have more followers and this story hasn't absolutely exploded. Your writing style is top notch and the premise for this story is relate-able and pretty much heartbreaking.

I'll be following this story closely. You've also earned a new follower.

Thou art a spineless knave for stealing feels from my soul....

Please continue.

oh my...i cried.... 'cause my best friend lost her father....and when it's happens she was like Rainbow dash here..... now she's fine (thanks goodness) i really see that moment in this story.... geeze.... me is scoot and my bf is Rainbow dash... she's like a big sis to me....that's kinda creepy :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:
ps: awesome storyyyyyyyy :heart::heart::heart::heart: i can't wait to see chapter 2 :rainbowkiss::heart::twilightsmile:

That was... so accurate. :fluttercry: I definitely gotta read more.

This is better than I thought it was going to be. I look forward to seeing where you go with this.

This was good I liked it. Can't wait to see where this goes and whether Scoots would get preassured into telling somepony about what happened or not.

Rainbow Dash, you need to let go of your personal pride. Do you really think your father would rub it in your face on his death bed about him being right? Of course not. I know you're trying to put on a tough act, but if you keep ignoring the past and acting like it's no big deal you'll only be forcing yourself to live a lie. :facehoof:

You really need to talk with someone other than Scootaloo about this. Preferably somepony who knows what it's like to lose a parent. If you don't, nothing will get better. :eeyup:

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Yeah, but if she did immediately, we wouldn't really have much of story here, would we now?

I somehow managed to like this twice...

Man, what a way to leave off. A letter to be unread until the next chapter, which I can't wait for. I wonder, who will attend the funeral?

Ken

I can see that this has been posted multiple times, but here is is aging Beautiful story. You Sir/Madam are EXTREMELY talented, Please continue.

Ken

Another amazing chapter!!!!

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Very well written and descriptive. Looking forward to future updates!

I have a feeling that Rainbow Dash's mother death had something to do with the wonderbolts and the infection that killed dash's father will appear somewhere in the future
keep the great story :fluttercry: :twilightsmile:

Promise maintained. Looking forward to the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

Scootaloo was seated in the lobby with an extreme sports magazine, reading bitterly through an article about a trio of fillies from Baltimare who were being cited as the first pony zip-liners, one of which had even received a cutie mark for it.

Now that's just plain mean. :applecry:

Nice Chapter! Can't wait for more :)

no really write and post it now. I cannot wait.
I'm waiting..... I'll just sit here and wait you write....

I normally have the emotional range of a rock. :moustache:
A hard unfeeling rock.

:fluttercry:
This fic has hurt my reputation, darn you! :trollestia:

4817628 Geez, even rocks have emotions... I think you meant you have the emotional range of a Maud Pie. It is there, you just don't show it.

you have my attention. lets see how this goes.

Poor Rainbow. :pinkiesad2:
I hope she will get trough it somehow and hopefully she realizes that sie has not to do this alone. Something like that is never easy.

I expect the next chapter to be up within the next hour. If it isn't up by then, I may just cry! I need the next chapter like a fish needs water!

Rainbow Dash, I know you have your pride, but you can't keep bottling it up inside and expecting everything to be fine. It's only going to get better if you stop trying to pretend nothing is wrong. The more you keep lying to yourself and try to hide this from your friends, the worse it will become. :eeyup:

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Following... I need to see how this ends.

OK...Ill admit I was a bit hesitant before but...Have a like and a favorite. Its too good. I'm hooked.

What? WHAT? :pinkiegasp: Okay, serious plot twist in my mind. I was totally expected something tragic to happen to Scootaloo, and when I read what was the tragedy, I kind of had my mouth hanging open for the rest of the chapter.

This story seems so promising and I'm totally following it to the end :yay:

I totally called it. B)

Really promising so far. I might just favorite it, even after only just one chapter!

wow, this is beautifully written. At the middle of the chapter, when they walked into the house, the description was so good it made me feel sort of nostalgic. Great work on both chapters thus far, the characters are spot on (from my perspective at least), the descriptions are incredible, the story makes sense, and it's completely relatable for some people. Onward to the third!

Just as good (and cliffhanging) as the first two chapters, can't wait to see more.

Just open the damn letter Rainbow, you owe your dad at least that much.

Very well written so far, it definitely tugs at the heart strings and though it's not the saddest fanfic I've ever read, I am highly interested to see how this plays out. Keep up the good work and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Huh... Weird. I got a notification for a new chapter, but... It seems to have gone missing. Hmm...

4856408 Sorry about that. :applejackunsure: I had to reboot my computer and somehow that ended up publishing the next chapter before I was finished with it. :facehoof:

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Ah. Well, at least that's cleared up! I thought maybe I was going ever so slightly insane :twilightblush:

4856158 Indeed. You really think he'd be so cruel as to lash out at you in a letter when he was on his death bed? Of course not. You and him may not have seen eye to eye, but deep down he still loved you. :eeyup:

(Just so we're clear, you means Rainbow Dash.)

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Sanitys overrated anyway :pinkiecrazy:

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Too true. Still, some semblance of sanity is necessary to function in this socially inept world - how else are we to derive amusement from other people and their moderately boring lifestyle :) if we were completely insane we wouldn't be able to see for ourselves the glorious epitome of wonder we call My Little Pony.

It was a good chapter until the end... that's when it became AMAZING!
Incredible job, especially that scene at Sugar Cube Corner. *Faves*

Now I really want to know what was written. Curse you, for making me have to wait for another chapter just to see what,s written!:twilightsmile:

:raritydespair: RAINBOW JUST &%:fluttershyouch:$ING TELL THEM ALREADY:flutterrage:

its. so. good. engilish. cant. even. anymore. I

This is really good, I think you captured fluttershy and dash perfectly

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