Ayyyy look at that I put up another chapter after... 687 years. Sorry, School has taken up nearly all of my time.
REGARDLESS, in this chapter we find out the reason of the Dragon's attack and figure out why things have happened the way they did. I'm gonna tell you now, from here on in things get a little complicated, but I'll do my best to make it good. Hope you guys like ^^
Our favorite little dragon, Spike, is just starting to lean into his mid-to-late teenage years. His sister has settled herself well as a Princess, Ponyville has grown exponentially to one of the biggest cities in Equestria and Dragons and Ponies are finally starting to get along, until recently, rumors of ponies poaching dragon eggs has put the progress on hold big time. Whilst the leader of the Dragon hierarchy discusses matters with Celestia and Luna, his youngest son, Cobalt, is sent to Ponyville into Twilight Sparkle's and Spike's hospitality. For spike, this is the first opportunity he's ever had to meet and spend time with a dragon his age. For Cobalt, this is the first time he's ever had outside contact. They both quickly realize that they tie into the war that had happened over 740 years ago, and they have much more in common than they first think, which leads to some interesting conflicts between them and the mane 6.
Hope you guys enjoy it as much as I love writing it! ^^
This is an interesting idea and I'm curious where you go with this.
Bring on the next two trial chapters! I'm looking forward to them! Also, I love the dragon book with the seal idea. I think you described it well. Its beautiful
Yes this is an amazing idea.
Please keep em coming.
Faved and wating for updates.
YAY. It is so nice to have a dragon that is not a jerk. And that goes double for royalty. I'm hooked in your story, please continue it. Please please (please X10).
3488416 I shall ^^ Actually If I have no distractions between now and the end of tomorrow, I should have them all put up ^^
3481963
Indeed, sir, Indeed~
3481905 Second chapter's up if you wanna read ^^
3474397 well the second chapter's up now so you get your chance XP
I'm curious how those two will interact with each other.
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why do I get the feeling dash will do something stupid that will almost start a war
This is going to be good.
3489928 More than likely.
She is always a suspicious prick.
3495585 if she isn't the leader of a pony supremest group then she is either really stupid or watches way to many movies
3495599
With a death wish.
Wait what spy?
3502243 I dunno, you'll have to find out next chapter :3
3502243
I see spy.
3502310 WHERE?!
Huh, it will be interesting to see Spike try out his powers and the rest of the Mane 6's reaction to it.
Yay another update.
Your story is getting realy nice.
I think hou should try to give a small descripition of what the characters are doing. For example, when Cobalt and Spike were talking, you could have added a bit of body language, and told if they were standing, sitting, or something else.
Try adding bits of body language in the next chapter, it will certanly make it bettet.
3506079 Duly noted, thank you sir! ^^
RD= bitch in any univers
3555517 oh and it's just getting started >:3
I'm kinda getting a gay vibe off of spike and cobalt
3555517 Definitely.
3556578 She needs to be burned at the stake.
3558343 You mean a Bromance?
3558343 PERFECT I was hoping someone would take note of that! I originally wanted to do something along those lines, but you're not entirely wrong either, keep reading and you'll see what I mean ^^
Didn't see that coming.
I didn't see that coming though it gives Cobalt some more depth. In all honesty I have nothing against gays and bisexuals. I have a few friends that are either bi or gay. As a matter of fact I found out more or less the same way Spike did. They either told me or somebody else did, like another member of the family.
Nice Chapter. loving the story.
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Critics Time:
I believe that you should brake down the characters dialog and insert some description of the dialog, say how they are saying it.
For example:
this dialog was Done Right.
First, don't end the Dialog like this:
it is confusing.
Second (Suggestion Of mine)
Try doing something like this:
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it was an amazing chapter.
i'm waiting for the next one.
keep the good work
3589881 hehe well you got me on a couple things ^^' I actually had less time than usual to revise so I might've missed a few little errors along the way. But thanks for letting me know, I'll make sure I take note of those next time~
3623337 Same here.
I hope Applebloom acts on those feelings at one point.
3624335 you'll see :3
Oh buck. It's Secret Of My Excess all over again.
3658094 Oh but it gets better. Much better. It's likely not going to go the way you think it is~
Here comes trouble...
HOLY CRAP IT'S GETTING EPIC
good story and all but the yoie thing kills it for I have nothing agents gays it is just not something I go and search for so sorry
3695083 I understand dude, and trust me I knew this was going to cause a rift when I wrote it. But I wouldn't count it out just yet. I have a reason for everything that I do in this story and these two doing this is a big one. I'll ask to keep around just a while longer and see where it goes, you might be surprised about it~
Okay, I know their have been hints and stuff but I'm still a bit surprised. Don't get me wrong, I'll still read this but I'm probably going to skip certain parts when they get too romantic and hope for SpikeBloom in the future.
Not what I had in mind but overall, nice! Please continue!
I new spike would turn out gay
3695110 Oh I knew this was going to happen, and I'm glad it is XD Like I said with Blaze-x, everything I do is for a reason, and this one's a big hinge~ You won't have to skip over much either, trust me on that XD
3695083 Same here.
3695646 Alright, you two, you're gonna need a PM~
Cobalt's reaction to Spike getting attacked doesn't particularly endear me to him. I mean he beats up some pretty awful ponies and gets righteously protective but in the meantime he calls them prey and peasants and it just begs the question... is that part of how he sees the world around him really? As filled with his inferiors?
But, so far this has been well written, so I'm not going to let something like that deter me!
3696256 You actually ask some really great questions, and you're going to get a few answers rather soon. Thank you for the compliment though ^^
Disgusting, foul piece of literature... if this can even be CALLED literature.