After a brutal fight for the Earth involving the fallen Titan Sargeras and the Draconic protector Vakarious, a battle which nearly resulted in the death of both. The draconic protector, Vakarious, has been thrown into a world that is in harmony and at peace with itself, despite never being visited or influenced by the Titans he served under for so long. And as he finds the way back to his own world, he finds that he cannot leave just yet. Especially with the ever looming threat of the Burning Legion seeking out the Arcane influenced world....
Takes place about a couple of weeks after Games Ponies Play/Just for Sidekicks.
This is a crossover with a fanfic I created involving the WoW (World of Warcraft) universe. The idea of the original idea of the WoW fanfic was, another world, with a new set of guardians, much like the dragon aspects of Azeroth, being set upon our very own Earth. That story however, is not published, due to it being no where near finished yet, and it not being finished due to the evil known as writers block. The beginning of this story, however, begins with the ending of the original WoW fanfic I am writing. It's not really a spoiler at all, it's just a bit of a less detailed fight scene for the main one.
With all of that boring stuff said, this is also my very first published fanfic, so, I'd appreciate some leniency on the insults, and very much welcome any sort of constructive criticism and ideas of things to add/remove.
I know next to nothing about WoW, however, this is pretty good. However, in the first chapter, it was a little hard to distinguish between Vakarious and Sargeras. That's my only complaint. As a suggestion, Vakarious re-summons Sombra and beats the snarf out of him out of boredom. He's a fighter in a land where Friendship and Love are the two most powerful forces, boredom has to overtake him at some point. And you make it seem like he can easily take out the Royal Sisters, surely he can revive an ancient evil tyrannical slaver?
By Luna, ANOTHER WOW CROSSOVER? Why am I thinking I started it?
Oh, yeah. A review. Interesting story, etc., I'll watch it.
2230176 I see what you mean. I'll definitely revise it a little when I get the chance, if nothing else, to at least clarify that a bit better. As for King Sombra, dont worry, I've already got quite a bit planned for him. I wont spoil it though =D And while Vakarious may come from a world that has known nothing but warfare since its existence, he's definitely far from just a dragon who will destroy an entire world just out of boredom, though he is still definitely out of place. As for him seeming like he can easily over power Princess Celestia and Luna, thats just his own arrogance thinking age equals strength. Thanks for the feedback, though, both with the first chapter and the idea for Sombra =D
2231483 Ha, I can guarantee it was quite a coincidence =D I haven't seen that many WoW/MLP crossovers at all, hence why I went with this. Though, I may just be terrible at searching too.
Very interesting story. I personally am a Starcraft person.
but nice story!
Yay! Celestia knows everything, it seems. Would you like more suggestions?
2234662 Thanks, I myself am a fan of both, I just couldn't think of any way to cross over starcraft with MLP lol.
2235071 It is starting to seem like she does know a lot, if not everything doesn't it? And of course, I'm always open to suggestions!
Sheer chance.
Don't capitalize humans.
Suggestions: Elegon is a dragon composed out of pure energy. He is a RIDICULOUSLY hard boss in Mists of Pandaria. He looks a little like an Ursa Major/Minor.divinityguild.net/wp-content/uploads/2012/11/Elegon.jpg
2239906 Fixed though embarrassing mistakes (though I do plan on revising the format a bit in the future still).
But I definitely know who Elegon is, the gist of his role essentially being a lesser version of Algalon the Observer. Sothe thought of the Ursas having a similar role in Equestria hadn't even crossed my mind. Definitely worth a thought now, though.
And He was a bit difficult the first couple of weeks, but he eventually became a quite a pushover, with my guild even killing him on heroic a few weeks ago (but I had quit playing by then).
Next chapter should be up by tomorrow though, had a bit of a busy weekend, so I couldn't get much writing in. But, as always, thanks for the input, and thanks for the suggestions!
What KIND of part?
Also, I am seeing an "indent/wall of text/indent" cycle. Might want to fix that.
I thought this was third person?
By the way, Vakarious might actually be able to hold his own against Celestia, due to the information you have given:
He almost killed Sargeras
Sargeras wields godlike power
Sargeras has apparently laughed at Deathwing
By simply showing up, Deathwing caused the apocalypse and terraformed all of Azeroth
From this, we can conclude that Sargeras' near defeat at Vakarious' hands was because Vakarious is better than Sargeras, who again, wields godlike power. But you can ignore this because I am a fan of logic.
2252020 Well, fixed those silly mistakes, as well as bettering the format/fixing the wall of text. (Seriously, my friend needs to get to editing already : /)
Although I can't really say too much without spoiling, I can say there is a reason Celestia and Luna do have the ability to over power Vakarious, which will be explained. As for the whole Sargeras thing, that's in the next chapter.
Extra prefix on intend.
Bipedal is one word, like bicycle. And it should be "the bipedal form".
Also... About the indents. Do you have a spinner that has 70% "don't indent" and 30% "indent"?
And Vakarious just broke the two laws of Equivalent Exchange. Nyan cats shall now descend upon him. Lots of them. All singing the 10-hour version.
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And Kil'Jaeden in Equestria? Creator of the Lich King?
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...As Vakarious continued to be escorted, he could finally make out a throne with a particularly large white Unicorn on it...with wings. A winged Pegasus hmm??
.A winged Pegasus hmm??
winged Pegasus
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dam wished Celestia was portrayed as more ignoret to the 'real world'
Awesome. Really loving the story so far. I can't wait for him to reveal his dragon form at the gala.
So, is this the future time, where azeroth had finally fallen to the legion, or is this in a concurrent time?
well, i guess that answer's my previous question. also, i can't help but wonder if azeroth will still get in on the action as well once things start happening.