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You have me interested. Looking forward to this whenever it's fully begun!
Edit: Wow, first time I've ever been able to say..First! xD
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please?
I'm already interested, can't wait for more.
I don't generally choose from the pickings in the new stories list, especially not from unfamiliar authors, but something spurred me to read this. I was not disappointed.
It needs just a bit of editing and proofreading, but overall it could go somewhere. Tip, however, no need to slap on that Mature - Sex tag til it is fully evident. Might scare some people away.
3390510 it's always iffy for me about that mature tag
I just don't want somepony thinking it's E for Everyone and then suddenly they can't read it anymore cause of clop 
3390537 Well, that is a very valid point. Fortunately not everyone runs from those tags, especially not if the story gets popular.
3390665 hmm, okay I'll remove it until the first clop scene
just fyi they have separate tags for twilight and alicorn twilight in the character tags
also neat idea for a story keep up the good work. you should slow it down a little though.
3390679 Yeah, I'll have to make sure to take my time. I did start getting a little antsy to the end.
Definitely needed to add this to FiE group, this might turn to be really interesting!
3390718 *giggles* I just joined the group
3390745 Hope you find other fics you like then, I definitely did.
Its always nice to see a fresh perspective with HiE fics ^^
3391247 I was actually ignorant that if there were any other female human in Equestria fics. I've only seen one, and it wasn't all that pleasant. Can't even remember it now, but that was why I thought it would be refreshing to write Amaya Ever After.
Maybe I can find some good Female Human in Equestria stories.
3391370 yeah, I noticed that too, but when I noticed, I was half done. I'm planning on editing it later.
Okay, you've slightly confused me. The description says that Amaya was brought into Equestria alone, yet there are hundreds of humans in Equestria as of the end of the prologue. Am I missing something here?
Also, I'd recommend a pre-reader/editor (or both). I saw a couple spelling mistakes. Nothing huge, but I did see substantially more "errors" in grammatical structure. Reason I say "errors" is because, while they can be considered fine right now, they could make a lot more sense if they were changed. If you're willing, I could edit for you.
But if I do, a warning. I SUCK at plotline development. I am, quite literally, a Grammar Nazi (I'm 1/3 German, your argument is invalid). Grammar/spelling is my thing. Storyline is not.
3391296A Voice Among the Strangers. Or A Stranger Among the Voices. Both the same story, just with differing viewpoints. Both are good. You should check them out.
3391296 Well if you do come across any more FiE fics be sure to add them to the group for others to view yeah?
In the morning I'll take this from my read later list and start reading it, for right now I'm getting some writing done myself.
3391419 sorry about that, I just reread my discription and it is a little confusing. Thank you for saying something. I changed it and I hope it is a little easier to understand.
Also, if you are willing, I'd be more than happy to give you a shot with being my editor. I don't really have a problem with plot and story development, and have a friend that helps me with those. I do however need my story edited and proof read. For some reason my mind turns sentences around, even when I'm speaking aloud, and people are just like, "What?"
3391422 I'll be sure to add any I find. I'm just a little tired of all the male heros. We need some toss up in the lead gender role here. *giggles*
3391448I'd love to help.
Also, you mentioned another story in the AN. I think I'll go check it out. Might find it interesting. And yes, the description makes much more sense now.
huh... I'm not a fan of lesbian dash but props for creating the first FIE X dash on this site, that i've seen at least. We need more originality on here
3391470 I agree that we need more originality. I haven't seen many female HiE stories, and thought I would have a go at it.
3391453 For sure!
3391470 I've actually seen only one other Female human x RD fic and its actually very good but I can't for the life of me figure out the name, but I'll be hunting down the fic in my favorites list and add it to the group as well, as I know its not there.
It's princesses, not princess's.
There is no space in Blueblood.
And, particularly in the first section, the writing seems to switch back and forth between present and past tense.
The description sounded nice. I'd like to see a little more about this.
3391644 thanks for pointing those out
I've gotten a proofreader/editor, so hopefully I won't make those mistakes so often now.
Ok before I head to bed I decided to read this, I have to say the idea is actually pretty good.
As I haven't seen anything like this quite yet and I've read a lot of fics already. The very idea of not just one person ending up in equestria from an event but several hundred made this that much more original, and eager to read more on what happens next.
As you've already know about the issue relating to the ending of the chapter I won't need to repeat it.
I upvoted earlier when I added the fic to the group, so I'll simply fave and watch it now. Hope this updates soon, as this is good.
Well, you have me interested. The fact that you haven't done what a lot of human in equestrian writers have done, and got to the point of "Hi, Im human. Lets be friends kay? Cool". Nope, your taking your time with the story and it dosent feel rushed. That's good :)
This is a cool story so far. You already have my like and fav.
Lets see where it goes before I give you my up vote and fav.
Is this set before or after the episode of Magical Mystery Cure?
Because if this is before, then there is no need fo an alternative universe tag.
If this is after, then it can be considered AU as Twilight isn't an Alicorn.
EDIT: Perhaps some of you have misunderstood my question. The timeline of the episodes haven't exactly been linear, and we don't know how much time has past after Games Ponies Play. For example: Winter Wrap Up came before the Fall Weather Friends episode.
3393176 I'm going to say it takes place right before the Magical Mystery Cure. Everything up until that episode took place.
3394501
Okay then.
But we still have that canon timeline to worry about as there are no definite way to tell how much time has past between MMC and Games Ponies Play. The episodes have been known to jump from season to season (winter and fall and summer and spring. Those seasons), and thus are not very linear.
3394526 I can technically have it whenever season to start off with. I'll just make it so Magical Mystery Cure never existed.
3394533
Alright. Good enough reason to make the story AU then.
It's intriguing. ^-^
I am confused how the black hole is able to suck people in, but not everything else... Plus NASA's incredible response time.
Other than that though it is interesting and will definitely poke around for more, especially since things may be explained in the future!
Also forgot to mention, that Blueblood and his wacky shenanigans.
3395015
It was NASA's Ninja Division. *nods sagely*
3395015 Celestia's and Luna's magic was halting the winds in both worlds. It was ultimately NASA's probe that sent it into overdrive, ripping everything to the portal.
Glad to see the story progressing.
Ooh another chapter don't mind if I do!
Ponies are herbivores.
Just sayin'
A couple of punctuation errors, nothing drastic. Good to see a new chapter for this story.
Sir Rustbucket Sorry I deleted your comment, I hit the wrong button and deleted it.
3529469 I've seen plenty of stories where Pegasi eat fish because of the wings, almost like ducks or sea gulls that eat fish.
3530132 Oh, okay. I was about to be offended, but no harm done. And you are correct, many fics have them eating fish. I was simply pointing out the difference. I don't think it's bad or anything.
Like I. Said before, I like the story so far. Keep up the good work.
3530164 thanks, I didn't mean to delete it. honest!
the reply and the little trash can are so near, and I clicked the reconfirm button without reading lmao.
3530132
If it makes sense to you, then more power to you. I'm just not personally familiar with the idea or the reasoning behind it. It's still an a good fic so far.
A pegasi eating some form of fish can't say I didn't expect that.
This was a pretty interesting if short chapter, though I think Jades comment really came out of nowhere I knew almost for a fact someone would bring it up anyway but that was a bit sudden.
Other then that this is thoroughly enjoyable and can't wait for more.
It looks promising so far, I'm liking your character development and the dialogue is pretty good to.
I can't wait to see how you progress this. 
... ... Something... wet... and sticky... ...
Oh... my...
I'm glad to see the story progressing and I think you're doing a great job. I also think there was indeed something in that contract that will come up later.