Ever Growing Side Stories

JBL

JBL #1 · May 24th, 2014 · 7 · · I: Producing a Smaller Version of a Herd ·

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He saw
He conquered
He came.

The Orange Nebula

The Orange Nebula #2 · May 24th, 2014 · 3 · · I: Producing a Smaller Version of a Herd ·

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Lighting Ace

Lighting Ace #3 · May 25th, 2014 · 2 · · I: Producing a Smaller Version of a Herd ·

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I like it I hope that after 48 hours Lyra could offer his DNA this time so Rarity could had her chance as well, I wonder why she didn't want to join in as well? or is she don't liking the idea of having a foal of her on just jet?

Also 'Celestia originally did that spell to breed aliconrs' That line actually made me really sad, she at least has being trying for 100 years and so far no results, and she had success with other, that mean that the 'lover' part is not the problem, the problem is that by far none of the species had manage to 'match' an Alicorn…well all minus the humans.

I know what you are thinking but hear me up, Celestia help them reach their dream of having a foal and had being doing the impossible to make them happy, would it be so bad for them to return the favor? She, and hell even Luna deserve to be happy

Arelak

Arelak #4 · Jul 4th, 2014 · 1 · · I: Producing a Smaller Version of a Herd ·

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Cant wait for another chapter!

Lighting Ace

Lighting Ace #5 · Aug 3rd, 2014 · · 2 · II: Poor Trace ·

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Fury…I feel…fury…I just…I'm sorry I…I just hated it. They want him to to relax?

He…He will just spent the rest of the time tense how is mocking him degrading and bond him helping? its just…its horrible

yeah I know there are those that love those kind of things but…no, I'm sorry but I didn't like it.

I will continue watching because I hope is not this continuing or they stop when they see they are just worsening everything please…no more bonding, no more bucking …NO.MORE.MISTRESS

again I'm sorry over all I like your job and even though it hard to swallow at some parts its a really decent one, but this time I think you cross the line I know many will hate that comment and I deserve them but I love equality and this of domination and dominatrix I can't find it in me enjoyable, maybe if he gets payback then I can digest it a lot better, like I say its hard to swallow but I'm giving a chance to let it sink in.

Just PLEASE make this NOT a habit and make TRACE get equality, that grinning I REALLY hope he plans his vengeance, and come throw oh boy I really hope to see RARITY and LYRA beg because so far her mother antics, plus Rarity not leaving him alone PLUS…that what happen…yeah I fearing they just break him

Naduran

Naduran #6 · Aug 3rd, 2014 · · · II: Poor Trace ·

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Nice one

Arez

Arez #7 · Aug 3rd, 2014 · · · II: Poor Trace ·

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It really would be so damn weird to be in a world where sex isn't taboo.

Lighting Ace

Lighting Ace #8 · Aug 3rd, 2014 · · · II: Poor Trace ·

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Look…I'm really sorry if what I did was wrong I was just angry and need to bend out the frustration now that I calm down I wish to speak to you calm and after analyzing the chapter and the story in general I will like to give some constructive critic I may be wrong, maybe you had a plan, maybe I don't get the full picture if that is the case then please tell me and I will understand and I will apologies if anything was wrong or I just simple didn't get it.

First of all I like most of the chapter Fluttershy mom, her aunt and her…step dad are really good characters well develop and they are their own persona I specially like that her step dad and aunt help her mother get out of the shell and just got assertive (at bit to much assertive but its normal in her kind of job)
The familiar scenery was ok and it was warm and appealing and if Shy mother mom could tune down a bit she could be a very nice lady Tracy could talk maybe he can still talk in the next chapter and leave us with more than (the creppy mother that you need to keep your eye on her all the time)

With that say…I think the shower scene…well it doesn't add up (I know, I know its just me not liking dominatrix but hear me out) lets put it in perspective
#1) The whole idea of that was to Tracy to relax to let loss and get more comfortable and at the beginning it was working I actually like that part she was only trying to help him get more relax and I was picturing him doing that. With that say…mistress? dominatrix? tease? bounding? how is that helping him relax? even after releasing him she keep that act…and she was being loud, that is not relaxing that is being commanding and that only add stress fetish or not that is just…well tension.

#2) Throw all the last story you had show us that Rarity just hate stallions that treat her like dirt, that denigrate her, and treat her like an object, well if that is the case, then why is she doing that exact same thing (and don't say 'it was for Tracy to relax' my point was establish in part 1, and if that was the case she shouldn't even bring the mistress part, or the making beg, the poor man was letting lose and you are putting him to beg as a dog? that is just cold) Are you seeing what I refer, it looks kind of hypocrite on her part (having fun, trying to relax, whatever you say, it was that plain and simple)

#3) The whole tension was to not make a noise and he don't wanting to do it with that mare in the house, I get it it was so he could release tension but blackmailing, FORCING (yes it was force because she didn't stop) yelling, bounds, denigrating with the calling mistress, and finally the teasing god the teasing and how they just didn't even stop even denigrating him one last time with 'Mistress Rarity, good job' (yeah I just lost it in there) that was A-not for Tracy that was only for her and B-Only worsening EVERYTHING (and if not please, really please, tell me, how is this suppose to make him relax?)

I know this still sound like me just hating but is not I want to continue I want to see what I can't see, and the chapter was good, but…well that last part at the bad make me wonder so MANY things so again I might be just overlooking a lot of things maybe I'm not seeing as I should maybe…maybe there is more but I couldn't find it and that was I got so angry, so please, tell me what I'm not seeing or if there is a reason for why you change Rarity so much.

I'm sorry if you got mad for my last comment and I wish to know if I didn't see things correctly and if that is the case tell me, just please just answer me…how denigrating him (after they FIGHT so hard for equality) make Rarity a hypocrite becoming what she despise, and just don't stop with the teasing and making him become the target of all the jokes suppose to make him relax

……I suppose that its why its call 'poor Tracy'

My page is always open send me a PM if you wish to talk to me in private I not angry I'm just confused and just well thinking that this is a bit backwards to what you establish I can be wrong and I willing to accept it if I'm I just wish for the answer that is all

Cloudline Dasher

Cloudline Dasher #9 · Aug 3rd, 2014 · · · II: Poor Trace ·

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4792577 I didn't answer to the first comment because I had to think about it. Your second comment clarified your point a lot better, and I can see where you are coming from. Quite typically I can see it was 'out of character' for how I portrayed Rarity previously.

However, I don't know if this is like this for everyone, but for me and my mate, we know its just play. The trust there allows us to be a little bit domineering at times. I think Rarity was just trying to explore that. Though, I'm thinking about rewriting that ending. Sometimes others taking charge like that forces us to relax when we don't allow ourselves to do otherwise in fear of taking advantage, greed, stress, or the like. Like i said, however, I may rewrite it because I'm thinking it was a bit out of character for how I was trying to portray her.

Honestly, at first, I thought you were trolling. Though, I'm happy to get criticism, as long as its not someone with no reason as to why, or someone just flaming because its not in their personal interest.

As for Fluttershy's mom, I had it in my mind that since, well... Fluttershy is as she is, that her mom could possibly be the opposite. Outspoken, adventurous, and a tad bit pushy. I was actually planning on exploring that and having her 'herd' settle her down. (So to speak)

Personally, from my perspective on the character Slender Breeze, I created, I picture her always being pent up and having to act proper, that when she left her husband and joined her sister and her herd, she over blossomed and became... well... overpowering? Overzealous? Over... everything?

I replied openly just so others could also see, especially if they grew worried or curious about your comments. Though, if you want to continue, you can PM me if you like. I really don't mind at all.

Lighting Ace

Lighting Ace #10 · Aug 3rd, 2014 · · · II: Poor Trace ·

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4793954
Hey thanks now everything make sense I was just worry that will continue happening, but if only with the purpose of exploring and try to help relax then its ok and yeah maybe if you change that ending then everything add up, thanks for understand and for clarify everything

Maybe I will PM you because now that everything is clarify I might want to ask things that are best ask in private or even suggest one thing or 2

Again thanks to clarify and sorry for the first comment honestly I was just venting out frustration and I apologies for my action there

Cloudline Dasher