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So short.
I have a Ps3.
Way too short.
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Dafuq was that?
Guess this was made for "Play"
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Huehuehuhuehuheuhe
Wut
Huh.....whu...Iduneven....
.......Interesting story.
Well...The idea was good at least?
I'll be honest, it seems rushed with a number of grammar and spelling errors, and I kinda think you overdid the accents a little bit.
The premise is good, but the execution could use a lot of work.
I'd say one mustache out of five
But don't get discouraged, dude
meh... I liked the idea, but it was really rushed...
I need to reed more
This is too Farm Lessons for a site like this.
The plot was rushed, Twilight's reaction was unreal, the ending was a twist on an old cliche gone nasty, and there was no buildup to make it seem believable.
I'm just going to believe that Derpy came up with this in her head.
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ugh... this was a bit rushed and now I need to find my mind :javascript:smilie('
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this fics are my addiction, man! I need more.
Sweet Celestia, am I a junkie?
too short too rapid in the pacing department
now I am going to wait while my brain tries to catch up
so much potential for a great story wasted!
That ending though.
wtf
This story was like an out of control bullet train! Too bad, it's an interesting idea.
How do you type this on ps3
3236954 You need to make a slight adjustment there, you didn't post a video link.
I noticed some slight errors, the biggest being "pitty" and "pittying", you you have an extra t there in both of them, so it should probably look like 'pity party' and 'pitying you'
I think you mean "undrunk", I think it you should probably get a proofreader, editor, or both to look over your work, you have quite a few minor errors in your chapters, and it would be a good idea before they escalate to big problems.
I kind of like this more than I thought, maybe you should redo the story with a bit more expansion and elaboration. This has a lot of potential, are planning or working on a sequel?
There's an off switch on Swag?
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There's an on switch to swag!?
7231016 yeah but you got to be a badass to use it
Now that's funny, 'Surprise Mothafuka its the end of the fuking chapter, so go fuk urself!'
Wait they took advantage of Spike......lucky basterd
At least Rarity and Thunderlane aren't married Spike.
Rape.
Rape.