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The list of things wrong with this story is longer than the sex scene.
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#shotsfired
Worst clop on FIMfiction.
WHADAFUQ?
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You mad, author? I think that's why you thumbed down Critic's comment.
2871411 2871420 I thumbed it down for the hell of it. Also, nice to see you using your alt account Theater.
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It's not my alternate account.
Well, it used to be.
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oh! Hey best friend! i versed you as a boss recently in dungeons and dragons! it was pretty intense but i won!
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so you should check out my response to your normal account!
Holy hell, what a mess.
Now, I've never properly reviewed clop before (aside from personal thoughts), but I'll take a stab at this tomorrow. This is just so godawful that I can't bring myself to read it more than a few seconds at a time.
Excuse me, while I go read quality literature and visit /mlp/ to get this story out of my head.
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What's with the overuse of exclamation marks? Are we in Sparta?!unsuresweetie:
Again with excessive exclamation points?!
also the plot development could use more work my friend!
just reread this
and if say you should probably re write this entire, since 1. there were way too many exclamation points for a normal fic2. you were doing a horrible job of showing not telling. and 3, there were little to none emotions or drama( even for a clop) plus spike just accepting some one else's declaration on the spot doesn't make sense
overall rating 2/5 panzers
you get a panzer 2
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I think you mean "full swing!" There are a few other minor errors, it's always a good idea to read through after you posted to see if you made any mistakes.
I think you mean "accept my feelings", you need to get someone to check for errors.