Spike is trying to have a peaceful day, when all of a sudden he is interupted by his three rambonxious kids. Now, he has to tell them a story about him and their mother, but it won't be as simple as that.
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Haha, this is quite cute!
I'm awaiting more, fine sir and/or madam, whichever you choose. ;P
The story gets better especially in chapters 3 and 4, I've read it before on Fanfiction.net I am going to spoil one thing and say sadly it has neither a snarky Neil Patrick Harris nor the fun catchy theme song from the show, but is you like a certain British comedy troop from the 70's, forth wall humor, slap-stick comedy and movie/ TV references then you'll be very pleased with how the story goes. Stick with this story it gets better. The grammar is good and the pay off is great.
To the author: Don't let a couple of negative ratings get you down and you probably should have played your trump card early and posted at least up to chapter 3, because while the beginning is a good setup it is rather slow. Seriously dude the other chapters are FUCKING hilarious.
Peace out
I also read this back on FF.Net and must say it was very good. The only problem I have was that by chapters 4 and 5 the story kind of starts avoiding the plot. Not to say I didn't LOVE the fact that Pinkie married a Spanish Inquisipony, it just felt like filler; good filler anyways.
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Thanks for spoiling
Spike would be one of the scariest fathers in history you mess with his daughter and he burns your fucking house down
wtf?
this chapter was pinkie!
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Does he use lemons?
.....i did not expect a spanish inquisition thing....or a blatent killing of the fourth wall.
What just happened?
xD Truly nobody or nopony expects the--
....them.
And, loved the author bit, :D
Bond, the spy. Inspector Clusoue, but cant seem to indentify the Erwin one.
I'm enjoying this story more and more and more to the point where I can't help but implode even ONCE!!
You've certainly captured my attention, especially from Chapter One, and I avidly await more...
...but take your time. Your readers will wait for you.
Trust me... I felt compelled to complete many a thing for my friends, and it ended quite sloppily.
;P
But excellent nonetheless!
I can honestly say, I didn't expect the Spanish Inquisition. *Waits*
28883 I KILLED THE FOURTH WALL!
If anyone asks, I wasn't here.
I need to hide.
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Crikey!
It's Steve, The Crocodile Hunter.
and nopony points out the fourth wall died in the fourth chapter....
Next thing you know there`l be the knights who say Ni
What
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STOP, You violated the law! You have murdered the fourth wall several times. Your fanfictions are now forfeit.
31339 You'll never take me alive! I'm too clever.
xD Oh, the fourth wall for this story is well shattered by this point, so what's the point in trying to fix it.
Oh, yeah, that's right, continuity.
Heh. This had me laughing, and I think I woke up my dorm-mate. Drat.
Anyways, love it. ;3
No one expects the Spanish Inquasition.
Never have I read a fanfic that annihilates the 4th wall like you.
Ever considered screen writing for loony toons?
32521 I've thought about directing shorts and such, but I don't know any good animators or voice actors. And thank you readers for all your kindness. It's fully appreciated.
This is so *explicit deleted* funny!!!
I laughed so damn hard when Spike went into rage mode.
I also really dig your parody characters more so in this chapter than the previous chapters.
As soon as I heard Khan, I already knew the joke was coming and I loved Crazy Nightmare Moon.
Last week's Big Lebowski reference seemed perfect for this fanfic.
oh i have to do this...
You have fucking broke the fourth wall too much, I kindof liked this fic but now its just a pile of fucking gar-bitch.
CAN YOU PLEASE STOP BREAKING THE 4TH WALL? IT IS BECOMING REALLY ANOYING
......... AND BORING 
32811>>33134 Boring?
How is comedy boring? Oh, it's the fourth wall breaking. WELL, did people complain when Monty Python did it, or how about Looney Tunes, and let's not forget Pinkie. 
So, Please explain in more detail what is boring?
Don't let the neighsayers get to you about breaking the fourth wall
Anyways keep it up and cant wait for the next chapter 
33174 I meen it is not boring, i was trying to say it became a little bit annoying, please excxusse my bad English but Pinkie was breaking the 4th wall not as annoyingly as you did, atleast they did not run off-story like you, you might make it a little...you know... IN TO THE STORY
how delightful! this just tickles the border of insanity in the creative universe! loving this so much...
oh my! How delightfully surreal! *drools* i love this
KHAAN!!
'Derpy back in town'
: What was that?
Okay, I just want to say this now: I like Monty Python. The show was great. So were the movies. It's safe to say that I am a fan of dry humor. There's nothing wrong with that. But, in no way, shape, or form did quoting (and totally retelling) the Spanish Inquisition make you or your story look intelligent, intriguing, nor interesting to read in any way. In fact, it damn near KILLED your story, making whatever interest I had in it go straight to zero.
45189 Really?
It was that bad. 
I'll try harder.
I'm sorry. I was just trying to write some comedy. I thought it was funny when I was writing it. I didn't mean to offend or bore anyone. Guess I'm not as great an author as I thought.
the Cons: the story has a lot of randomness, and a fair bit of grammatical errors(these can be fixed)
The Pros: It's at least funny randomness(i thoroughly enjoyed all the python parts). And the story continues to chug along at a decent pace.
Outcome: tracked.
*Ahem* Do you feel lucky punk?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1W7c8QghPxk&feature=related
31728 As if, but I got a whole army of rangers.
Your life is forfeit! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pNA-9sl3StQ
*Facepalm* Well now its official, the forth wall is completely dead.
Not that I mind, usually these moments bypass me. You can thank Psycho Mantis for that.
Aye... Basterd knew I played Super Smash Brothers Melee..... And moved my controller man...
*Shudders*
Bond James bond
XD
So wait, first a story about spike, then cracks in the 4th wall.
And suddenly full on Pinkie Pie sanity hammer... what the hell am I reading?
No one suspects the Spanish inquisition are weapions are fear surprise ruthless efficiency and our fanatical devotion to the Princesses
your killing me you've dwindled it down to two pony's i guess ill have to read the other chapters now well done
hmmmmm your building this up splendidly
I think the mane thing gave it away as to who Spike's wife is.
A very interesting start of the story indeed. I wonder how much this will influence the future... how it all fits in.
I eagerly await for the next chapter
Keep up the good work!
Your still working on this right cause been a while since a update and its usut so amazing i don't want it to end without ending
Salvation................plz?
438535 I have not abandoned this fic, if that's what you're thinking. I just...ran out of ideas. I mean, looking over it, I really want to flesh out my characters more. Give them more scenes and stuff, but I do have to keep a backstory in each chapter as well. I've hit a brick wall and I don't know how to get over it.