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Pinkie, never interrupt a person deep in thought, right author?
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and like Rarity said, 'No Spoilers'
good chapter, please update soon.
so same story as spikes bride only ANTHRO?
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Different storyline. Just same title
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Indeed
Amy mare who has a roll in the hay with him would never go back.
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Meaning?
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When mares get laid by Spike, they can't go back to stallions.
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Quotes James Rhodes in T.A. A.O.U "You just have to make it weird"
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so whos gonna be in it? OC's or the mane 6 plus?
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A bit of mane 6, bit of cloudsdale's mares, canterlot mares, las pegasus mares, Crystal Empire mares, Manehattan mares.
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Princesses too And ember? And if your adding the mane 6 why aren't they tagged ?
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Just princess luna. Ember? need a reason. Tag mane 6? Because only half of them involved.
I think this could be interesting if it is done with some real feeling and thought behind it. I think if you are going for more than just a clop story you really need to show him connecting and becoming important to the females he meet out, and that doesn't mean he sleep with ALL of them before he go or sometime even do anything intimate. It need to be about showing that bond he has created and that some don't want to break. I think the Pinkie scene really through off the momentum of the chapter to be honest it just came out of nowhere and it didn't really get back into pace as it than jumped into a Luna clop right out of nowhere. That could have used some more fleshing out and set up I feel to make it really feel like it made alot of sense to happen. But it is the first chapter so the story is still finding its flow. I hope to see more from it
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That is the original idea
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I honestly like the idea of not all the Mane 6 being with him. I think it makes it more believable in a weird way. That not ALL of his friends would want to be with him like that, some might just want to be friends with him and I think he could use some female friends on top of romantic ones. I think also showing him messing up with some girls ending the route with them either by a mistake on his part or they just don't like the idea of sharing would be interesting as well.
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Not to mention they will find out later that he is hiding something from them.
Very well done.
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thanks
good chapter, i can't wait for more.
Don't forget about the Mane 6's pets.
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try my best not to include that
Love the stories so far.
So this is still going then?
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of course. There are four or five cities I need to cover
This... is quite interesting... im definitely keeping my eye on this.
This is interesting. I can't help tho that think Spike is being a bit of a jerk to Twilight alot of the time. It seems he can't help but take shot after shot at her when all she has done so far is try to help him with his honestly bit sexiest mission here. I mean so far two mares out of really almost all of them haven't shown signs of interest in him so that is some plus I say. But so far Spike hasn't shown traits that would make every mare in the world fall for him, hell he can't for what might be a good trait for one mare wont work for another. Just being good looking and exotic wont be enough to really win someone's heart. That is why I am hoping that really only one female from town end up with him and he doesn't just bang them all and somehow get them all or sleep with them all and then pick one making it so he took advantage of his situation. I honestly can't see him with Rarity, her only perk to him is that she is good looking. But for personality and really EVERYTHING else I really think Pinkie would be the best match for him. She would be the one who would keep his life from being boring and make it always fun. She would be the one who would treat him most like Spike and show 0 shits about any title no matter who it is. We rarely see Spike and Pinkie stories anymore and this is the prime chance to see a good one
Is it weird for me to hear or in this case read twilight calling herself spike's assistant
P.S. it is assistant not assistance
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Don't worry. It is still too early for everything. There are much to explore in Ponyville
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well, He is a prince and Twilight is just a normal unicorn. So yeah, I make it a role reversal.
I do see this becoming something better. Also i think you need an editor.
Tweaks can be made, BUT i like how its shaping up.
good chapter
Once Fluttershy notice how Spike loves animals just as her BOOM! Shamelessly in love.
What do you think rainbow's going to do.
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just what normal antagonist would do
wow can't wait, its gonna be a fight inset it?
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maybe
you tease, lol.
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well, developing an antagonist is different from developing a villian
Good point, ok ill wait to see.
This was.... odd. Honestly what Spike did was creepy as well. I mean when he stop, told Shy to come to his place, strip, and wouldn't let her leave when she clearly wanted to. And made her stay there overnight. I mean honestly if you did that with ANY woman she would be pressing charges against you. It kinda feel like he took advantage of the most submissive of the girls to make her do what he wants. And of course it all works out because he is seen as a good guy for it and Shy is now no longer scared of the dragon that forced her to stay with him and not leave even tho she clearly wanted to.
She'll have perverted dreams about Spike on a daily basis.
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I believe you didnt see the word heavy rain in the story
No pleasing someponys.
PS great chapter.
well this is interesting but... it feels so shallow ;I no buildup, no details ;/ you need to up up your game
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Trying to explore Ponyville and the mares more so i will try my best to build up the main character
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following Star Wars idea
Now i remember why I'm not tracking this story. The story reads like a instruction manual, boring and uninteresting.
I'm sorry while the spelling is good, and the story idea is great,............the way it's written really makes it boring, feels like a instruction manual, it written so bland.
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*chuckles* gee thanks