Hi there, I can sort of write a little. And you're going to LOVE ME!!
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Pinkie knows something about her world that nopony else understands. She is always on display, and Pinkie has made the best of it. It seems that nopony understands why Pinkie behaves the way she does, is it fear? Is it insanity? Or is it that the fate of all equestria is in her hooves?
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Interesting twist to the Fourth wall gag on the show...very interesting indeed.
She knows the Doctor's name?
Excuse me , I'm wondering, how do I read story's. Because I don't know how to.
I like it. I like it a lot
It's kinda dark lol.
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Just click the name of the chapter
Oh thank you so much
Okay, creepy
There's a story called; "The Fourth Barrier" by the way
Maybe ya should read it
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Click the chapter that you wish to read
I've read many fanfics.
This is one of them!
Wow. Deep. Makes me want to take a hammer to my TV when MLP is on and pull Pinkie out. And Twilight. And I can't forget Fluttershy. Or Trixie.... *spends ten more minutes reciting ponies she wants to get out of the TV*
This is interesting. Great idea. I wish I thought of it.
She needs to break the fourth wall again. It appears that this version has forgotten how though.
D'oh
Nice. Very Lovecraftian.
ahahaha no why stop no ahh
This was rather dark, in a strange and original way.
I have three comments on this.
One being that you told that story yourself, and didn't let Pinkie Pie tell it. I learned something about showing and not telling. You told that story and I was unable to see what Pinkie truly felt, what she truly did to stop the invisible monster.
The second thing I want to tell you was that this was EXTREMELY original. I never thought that Pinkie might be so crazy just to amuse the invisible monster behind the invisible wall.
Third, do you read your stuff before you post it? Becouse there were multiple incidents where word choice could have made the story flow better.
This sentence should be reworded. Maybe something like "Derpy's voice sounded different, and after being teased, refused to speak."
Read both sentences, and tell me which one flows better and which one gives a better description of what happened.
As always, thank you.
3556465 I totally agree with you on all of those points. This was an early fic and I haven't really put much time towards editing the original. I was never really happy with it and planned to edit it, recently actually, but got sidetracked. Thanks for the pointers, if I have a chance I will certainly rewrite this story.
3556483 Anytime. I am working on helping others out along those lines as well.
I did notice that you are better at writing than about 60% of writers on this site.
So thumbs up to that
the bronies are watching you pinkie
I enjoyed this. It could've been a bit longer, but it was still very good the way it is now. Have a favorite and a follow.
And here we have a plea for help...
Oh my God...
Favorited to help others see...
Woah...
I. Love. This.
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One. Pinkie did tell that story herself. That was her speaking throughout the whole story.
Second. Derpy realized she sounded different and was afraid to speak. That’s alluding to the episode they remade which was “The Last Roundup” season 2 episode 14, giving her a different voice after the soccer moms raised such a stink, so she had no lines in later episodes that she appeared in. It wasn’t until the 100th episode called “Slice of Life” Season 5 episode 9, where she finally spoke again.