Scootaloo entered a contest to write the best story, it was made by the order of Princess Celesta so she can see the ideas that young fillies have. Scootaloo wants to write the most scary and most gory story ever, how will the princess deal with the strange story that Scootaloo wrote, will she like it or will she be disturbed.
I got this idea from the fan fiction, Scootaloo writes "Cherilee's garden" by AspergerGoodness check it out.
Oh and I am looking for a fitting picture for this even though it's finished.
Chapters (3)
I think, like Scootaloo, your writing could use improvement. The pacing in this is very fast and well, the story just doesn't seem to work so far. All I know is Scootaloo found a flyer, has apperently had a dream to write a horror story. Said story that we know nothing about grosses RD out. You could have a whole chapter for her getting the flyer and her excitement in writing her story and then another whole chapter on issues she has writing said story.
Ok why is the teacher coming by at four in the morning? Also why were we, as the readers, previously unaware she had ditched school to write said story. But seriously four in the morning?
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Also basically all that has happened so far in the story is Scootaloo showing her story to others. All of whom, I might add, basically have the same reaction. Even if your writing style wasn't as bland as it is this would be boring.
2661883 Well I had since, and Cherilee came there around the time class ended.
And one note I am okay for my age.
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Never settle for "okay"
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It does sound like Cheerilee came and visited at four in the morning.
How old are you then?
It's spelled "Celestia".
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THAT'S how you know me? Ok then.
2671957 What do you mean?
I can't really comment too much on the storyline, as nothing much happened. However, I can say that this story would be a much more enjoyable read if you would put some effort into connecting sentences or strengthening your prose. Or just get a proofreader.
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You knew who I was and made me co editor because I favorited and followed you.
You're doing a good job!
2672218 I can't lie about that my original editor is out in Brazil for the summer and you did some good stories. Oh, and sorry if you didn't like my Babs 2.0 horror or canceled horror story. CMC foalsitter was my first story that I wrote when it failed I made a new form of it.
2663009 Thanks.
2672218 Liar your a liar just like the cake.
you killed celestia love of cupcakes
You spelled Celestia wrong, like every single time, except ironically enough for the title. That's just sloppy writing, man. Thumbs Down.
6528220 Apologies for the flaw, honestly, at the time I was not able to understand how to write, I was still young, but, rest assured, I've improved by a lot.
6529196 All is forgiven, but I feel like you need to fix the spelling errors.
This was a funny little fic, great job!
I think she’s not going to eat cupcakes for a while know