It started as a normal day, my dad and mom just left the house and my brother is still asleep. However when I get to turning over on my side I find a certain light blue unicorn next to me in bed. reluctant to tell me anything I have to cope with living with the "Great and Powerful Trixie," as she has introduced herself as, though I know her true title.
(Not wrong in anyway)
(Self-insert story)
Inspired by this. The Great and Sleepy Trixie
fast pacing :c
abnormal reactions.
not freaked out enough.
2964114 I'm saving that for my parents.
2964199 my parents would flip a bitch
2966430 Mine aren't going to like it.
FIRST!
3087593 Huh?
This is my longest story yet!
I'm going to be completely honest with you. Your pacing is far too rushed, there were far too few freakout sessions to be believable, and more than a few spelling/grammar issues mixed throughout.
Ah, the editing. Better than I thought to be honest.
Ok I have to agree with Gabe Trixie is annoying.