I am not very fond of the episode Spike at Your Service. Really because Spike was turned into a complete idiot. I wanted to write something that was more respectful to his character.
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Aww. that is sweet of how Applejack was toward Spike. I feel sad though of how Twilight ignored him, and he came back to Applejack with tears in his eyes. I hope Applejack will be able to talk to Twilight and tell her what happened with Spike in the Everfree Forest, and also with him crying.
Please continue this. 
So good i feel like dancing right now
, i totally agree, they made spike look like a complete fool in that episode, well cause kinda he does like everything for everypony and stuff, anyway great chapter
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I'm not surprise that Twilight tuned Spike out.
2655063 I will. I really hated how Spike was turned into a complete screw up in the episode. HE does all kinds of work and chores for Twilight, why can't he do the same for others?
2655136 That's a problem I have with season 3 really. It focused more on being funny than being endearing.
I like how you elaborated on the episode and such. I am not sure how his will proceed though I guess as Applejack and Spike see the other friends, the rest of the Mane 6 become upset on how Spike was seemingly left off by Twi and approach her on this. While Twi did give him a curfew, who knows if she will notice with her head in the books. A few hours she becomes worried and looks all over before Applejack appeoaches her and explains it to her. Or it could be ovt a few days and all of her friends do so and the library is in disarray. Nevertheless , she will probably beg them to help get Spike back. That's how I figure
2655261 Honestly, I think I'll go along that route, but I need to think about it. My main focus was to make Spike less of a fool. That really bugged me about the episode.
2655278 Regarding that, alotta people chalked it up to Spike's excitement and being a kid having to do something with it. Or just having an off day. For an AppleSpike oneshot, I chalked it up to him being distracted by her and the unknown feelings that were developing.
A bit lacking on the details for my tastes, but I greatly respect what you're trying to do with this. Spike at Your Service was not one of my favorite episodes, and it's nice to see someone trying to take the same concept and make it work better.
For now have a thumbs up
If only this is how it really happened in the show... You get my thumbs up just for righting this wrong.
2655305 Thank you very much. My main focus for this was to show Spike in a more respectable light, so I probably overlooked a few things because of that.
2655296 Spike may be young, but he has done plenty of work for Twilight over the years. I would think he would have learned how to get a job done right. Also, I personally doubt it was a nod to AppleSpike. I think this because during the episode, when Applejack suggested delivering the pie, Spike's first thought was to take it to Rarity, meaning his train of thought went straight to his crush. So if it was meant to be a nod to AppleSpike, that kinda defeated the purpose.
2655331 Thank you. Hell who knows. Maybe if enough people were behind it, this could be made canon. After all, the writers took a 15 year old's fan fiction and made it the basis for "Keep calm and flutter on."
Being an assistant isn't only about writing, have to be a bit of a jack of all trades.
Thanks for writing this, that episode made me super duper offended.
2655254 it is like the writers are deliberately trying to diminish his character. Take Equestria Girls for instance, they make all the Mane Six human girls, but they make Spike into a dog. For crying out loud, they could have made him like into a little boy like Twilight's little brother or something, but a dog!
I am a huge Spike fan, and I feel that is he just mistreated and excluded from everything involving the Mane Six. I can't wait for Chapter Two. 
2656143 Good to see I'm not the only one who feels that way.
This alternate way is interesting. I'm eager to read how it goes next. Though I would have expected Applejack to intervene and insist when Twilight was too focused on her book to listen to what Spike was telling her, rather than to assume so fast that she just didn't care.
2656482 That is kind of true, but to be fair, if you heard someone say something so important to their friend and they just brushed it off, wouldn't your first reaction was to be appalled?
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The first reaction, yes, but after that, Applejack might have entered to see why Twilight did this.
But no problem, the story is good, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
Nice rewrite so far. "Spike at Your Service" was decent but Spike's character was horribly tampered with.
2656736 That's why I wanted to do this.
2656744 I still feel like it was good up until the whole Spike helps Applejack but can't do basic chores. I do have my theory that he was overeagar but that still doesn't excuse it.
2656748 Yeah, it had a solid set up for a story but they ruined Spike throughout.
2656751 And the whole Twilight thing still kind of rubs me the wrong way. Twilight knows from "Owl's Well That Ends Well" how Spike feels about her so I really don't think she would've tuned him out.
The ending nearly made up for it though.
2656756 I'm definitely gonna address that in this.
2656762 I've been rewriting a few episodes that I felt were bad or needed work. Right now I'm working on a rewrite of "Hearth's Warming Eve".
I didn't put "Spike at Your Service" because I figure even with the damage to Spike's character it's still better then "One Bad Apple".
Aside from a small mistake here and there, it's a good piece of satisfactory work! Even if it seems a bit heavy on dialogue. A tad more description and/or action could counter that nicely. Though it might just be me.
Have a fave. Though I will wait with thumbs up for now.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Keep up the good work!
interesting, please continue
hopefully you will fix that 
like you i never did like 'Spike At Your Service' they made Spike look useless
2657655 My stories are a bit like that, with focus on dialogue. I appreciate the fav.
2657836 I certainly intend to try.
I agree with you; the "Spike at Your Service" Episode made Sipke look completely idiotic and accident-prone, kinda like they do with Derpy/Ditzy Doo.
I've very much enjoyed your version so far and look forward to your future posts.
2660574 Thank you very much.
spike at your service was an horrible chapter they made both spike and applejack into dicks, only good part was pinkie mustacho
2661648 Your icon is proof of that. Do you think I improved it at all?
You Know I Agree with Them, Your Version of Spike at Your Service is Actually Pretty Good.
I Can't Wait for Part 2 of Your Story.
2661672 Thank you very much.
2661680 You're Welcome.
I'm glad that your story hit the popular section of this site otherwise I would never find it. Like everyone else here, I don't like Spike At Your Service for making him act out of character. I mean the behavior and the messiness is something I would see one of the Cutie Mark Crusaders will do not Spike who is much older than they are and does things for Twilight all the time. I feel the plot would've been better if it's Spike going overboard to complete his tasks to the point of acting like AJ in Applejack Season or at least failing in tasks are explicitly things that you'll do much if experience in farming instead of things he could easily do with no problem. Like failing to cut the logs properly or not being able to use the hoe right. These things are outside of his comfort zone and the things he normally do with Twilight so it makes sense for him to mess up on THOSE tasks instead of the ones that is shown in the episode. Anyway I'm just glad that you're writing this episode in a direction that makes sense.
This chapter...I like it
ANOTHER!!!
Seriously though, good job so far. I remember being distinctly adverse to Spike "creating" his own dragon code in the actual episode, but your explanation makes perfect sense--it changed my head-canon and that's NOT and easy feat.
That said I'm having trouble understanding Applejack's feelings here. In the episode proper it's very obvious (Spike is incompetent...but so earnest and adorable it's hard to boot him out), but here it's a little more tricky. For a moment, I almost thought you were going to make Applejack slightly jealous of all the praise Spike gets and use THAT for the motivation to "get rid" of him.
However your choice to bring Twilight's dismissal of Spike to the forefront is a GREAT one. It's frightening here how casually Twilight appears to cast Spike aside like an old shoe. I'm looking forward to seeing how this all plays out.
2664177 Thank you for your comment. And a few things I should explain. The dragon code didn't make sense to me because, when in the series did it show Dragon's caring about honor? They always act out of greed and selfishness; not once did we see context for honor among them. So Spike claiming there was a code didn't make sense. Also, Applejack is unwilling to send him away because he works so hard to help her and doesn't once complain about it, and Applejack respects a hard worker.
2663201 Thank you very much.
So...I finish reading about Spike and friends fighting a werewolf, come down and what do I see in the add banner? An advertisement for MTV's Teen Wolf.
What are the odds huh? 
2670897 Wow......Twilight zone stuff man!
So... epilogue? Or a derp with story tagging?
What if Spike goes to school?
2671019 The last part of the chapter was meant to be an epilogue.
2671023 I'm pretty sure Twilight handles that.
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So, the story is complete, then? Might want to change status as it still shows "incomplete".
2671037 Oh, right, I'm sorry. That's always a mistake I make when I finish. I always forget I have to change the status.