The greatest day of Scootaloo's life becomes perfect till it ends broken and torn, only to find that her nightmare doesn't end there.
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oh celestia why! Cover your eyes twi!
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Twi's secretly jacking off in the bushes.
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Then why is she right next to me then! NOT A changling!
MMMMMMMMH!!! THIS IS GONNA BE MY FIC! OH YEAH, THIS ARE MY KINKS!
Oh Celestia, this makes me feel sick. I'm going to have nightmares for the rest of my life, I'm crying right now, this was terrifying. I can't stop thinking about this, I'm getting offline for the night.
~Scootaloo
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hahahah and it's far from over
You know what, I'll be looking forward to reading this crazy shiznit.
I'll definitely read later.
Progression is a little fast tbh.
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this is true, but the pace slows down considerably later on, i wanted to get to the painful part quickly when i wrote this first chapter
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You see this pony? Yes, the stallion holding a rifle. His name's Dusty, and he doesn't take well to other ponies messing around with his adopted daughter.
You see, Dusty rescued poor Scootaloo here from the midst of a war-torn town. He gave her his heart so that she wouldn't be broken by the death of her father. And now here you are giving the poor filly a bad rap by putting her through this? I know for a fact that Dusty knows that Rainbow Dash would never let such a thing happen to her sister, let alone his own daughter. What kind of fucking monster are you?
I should give Dusty the right to shove that four foot long bolt-action carbine down your throat. Better yet, why not invite a friend or two to hammer you up and write a 5k word story about how your demise came by an angered father, pissed off grandfather, and protective brother? Would you like that?
~ Greetings from the god damn Dustyverse...
EDIT:
PS: I should knock your ass out for having that image as your avatar. Applejack does have a stallion that treats her like any special mare should be treated. His name's also Dusty.
2815618 Said Grampa is more than willing to write that story... And I think you meant "protective uncle"... Dance is your brother, not her's
Why couldn't I adopt a puppy instead?
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Because said puppy wouldn't have picked up Scootaloo back then. You're lucky that I went back for her, otherwise you wouldn't be a happy grandpa. Thanks you as well. She finally woke up.
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i love you
I feel offended by the chapter name.
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well i imagine that's the last thing you'd be offended by but any suggestions for a different title? i just picked whatever came to mind soooo
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1st of all...
Part in red...
Also, you called it a 'rifle' first.
2nd. Why do people have pics of ponies holding weapons that they could never use?
The one in the pic would have to "shove it down" someones throat since ponies are not designed to use human made/used weapons. At least not without magic.
I now have more evidence to tell my grandchildren that I've seen some shit.
Still a pretty... "interesting" read
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Why do they draw them with weapons like that? Oh, I don't know, maybe because it's their story, and they're allowed to write what they wish.
Besides, if you actually looked, that carbine/rifle (speaking as a former Weapons Sergeant, the difference in names hardly matters in this case) has no actual trigger guard. The safest possible thing? No. But does it make it usable by somebody (or somepony rather) who lacks independent phalanges? Yes, it does.
So, on that note: be quiet.
This isn't what the comment section is for.
As for the story.
I didn't give it a thumbs down, seeing as I've read enough Scootabuse and foalcon stories on this site to make me rather strong-stomached when it comes to encountering them. I'm really half tempted to give it a thumbs up and a favorite just to piss people off.
So good on you friend!
This fic is rather dark but that'a okay since far to many people believe that MLP fan fictions should be light and happy. I being a brony of of the darkest yin find it rather interesting and hope you continue it as I would like to see where you plan on taking it. Far to many people forget the ugly side of life and try to forget about the darkness the lives in the hearts of all creatures as this world is made up of both light and darkness. Not every story has a happy beginning, middle, or end and this story is on of them. People shouldn't forget that Luna try to plunge the world in eternal night twice because of the darkness in her own heart, so the stallion in your story is much like Nightmare Moon in that regard. He only wants to hurt and abuse Scootloo for the same reason Nightmare Moon wanted an Eternal Night, the darkness in his heart is great and Scootloo's suffering the only thing that brings it peace.
I say damn the Naysayers and keep up the good work for you have allies the want to see the fullness of your vision and are ready and willing to fight for you so that you may bring it to light in the fullness of time.
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this whole chapter seemed very surreal, I mean; gets her cutie mark, can suddenly fly with no proper practice up to that point, the day with Dash (which is a few incidents) and all on her birthday where she gets a scooter from her idol and a necklace from her ex-enemy... I was certain it was going to be a dream, but it was good for the contrast with the ending... however obviously this is only the beginning and I am interested to see where it goes from here
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That has been seconded minus the fav. I'll just check when I feel like it.
River song is the name of "the doctor"'s wife
Well, that was disturbing.
hmm i love scootaloo and all but this is well i got no words to discribe it so good chapter
..................................no. just, no. bad! interesting to read, but no! not to my liking. My bypolar says that I need to kill the main antagonist!
Dude your cruel. I like you bro.
Late read, but I find this to be pretty good, for foalcon rape of Scoots.
Oh my... you take DARK to a whole new level and i love it
im tired of seeing cute happy ending stories all over this site, this is getting favorited for sure
WHY AM I READING THIS AND WHY AM I STILL READING IT
Needs a proof read, but very gripping so far.
This is on so many levels of fucked
I LOVE IT!!!!
I'm not a big fan of this kinda stuff but i am intrigued to read more
Yet another work of art. though I hope she at least lives to be in the next chapter. of course she lives to be in the next chapter what am I thinking. if she didn't there would only be one chapter. this story is defiantly getting a hoof up and a fav. nice work
Well. That was, different.
Dafuq did I just read?
"We flew into the air going to a large cloud and looking down at pegasi throwing clouds at each, a few laughing. “Come one we got to get in on this!”
Both shot down and landed on top of the cloud. Dash grabbed some cloud and threw it at another making a poof sound causing her to roll."
a missing word, missing detail, misspelling, misuse of commas, and all really badly phrased.
That many mistakes in such a small space... How could this have been missed? Why does everyone on fimfiction seem incapable of using correct grammar?
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Have you not seen how pitiful the guards are? They cannot defend the princesses for shit, or themselves for that matter. Other than that, I am liking the story so far :P
I was liking it and then you just had to put in the horrendous amounts of gore.
Rereading this, and gosh he's changed. Kind of... Welp, never mind.
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Welcome to the dark side
We never had cookies... MWAHAHAHA!!
Rereading for the third time including the first time I read this story and remembered that I actually had thought that He was a ligit monster for the first few chapters.
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lol I love it
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i'm glad