The greatest day of Scootaloo's life becomes perfect till it ends broken and torn, only to find that her nightmare doesn't end there.
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am i the only one who thought that was a serious escape trial at the begining and also i died of laughter and choked on pop while reading this lol
4179722 You are a terrible person for laughing at Scootaloo's plight!
I'm scared that these consistent updates will stop.
love this story, hate this cliffhanger still a fun chapter
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oh you
4180181 Just a quick question, are all the chapters done and just need to be edited? Or do you binge write a couple of chapters then send them to your editor? Or however it works.
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binge right would probably be correct if i didn't do it like every day, the reason why i haven't done this is because i've been so busy in real life that i haven't had time to sit down to do it much, and because of refro, he's a drug that's too damn addicting to set down
4179905 yeah i know im a terrible person whatcha gunna do call the princesses? lol
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I have been cleared by the U.S. Surgeon General as a non-addicting substance.
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paying people off to say that doesn't make you any less additive, only more so
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I'll give you 20 bits to say otherwise...
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NEVER!!!
Thank you Thank you Thank you
You really made my week.
All those updates, I love them. And I really am looking forward to the next chapters. You ve outdone yourself.
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i know it's wonderful feeding on them
Oh Celestia I so badly want scootaloo to get her freedom and come to her senses... just seeing someone lie to themselves so badly that they have ti believe it just to continue living...
Dammit. I caught up. Cooljwj, when's the next one? I reeeeeeaaaaaallllly want to see Jerard suffer. Sadly, the most I can do is sit here on my bed and RP myself into the story as some kind of OP warrior.
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editing
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Ah, okay. So, how's your day going? Mine jus started.
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mine just ended
4215326 something like this:[http://youtu.be/Njec27nCgvA?t=1m13s]?
This is AWESOME!
I know I sound incredibly sick in the manner of asking...but...
CouldwepleaseseesomeofScootaloogettingpunished?
*Goes to chant in corner*
I'm not a sick person, I'm not a sick person!
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I think your link is broken
4233799 http://youtu.be/Njec27nCgvA?t=1m13s
better?
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4233799
go to a private if your conversion isn't about ponies!
4237789 a private what?
4237794 chat*
4237855 YOU CAN DO THAT?!HOW?!
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i don't know if you're fucking with me or not, but click on his name and it'll take you to his page, then click on the envelope button and you can write him a private message
4237905 oh,that,no i know that,i thought that you meant a private chat room.
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I *think* our conversation had something to do with Jerard suffering.
4239428 FUCK THAT BASTARD JERARD! HE AINT SUFFERED ENOUGH! Oh how with each passing chapter I pray for scootaloos freedom. Whether through death or actual liberation! But then I need a *where is she now* chapter (if she gains freedom alive) to see how escaping Jerard has left her with her new (if she can fathom it) relationships and to see what sexual things that Jerard taught her she will bring into those relationships.
Shit the more I reread these chapters the more I hate fucking Jerard. Add poor Bali! As a nursing student who has seen friends and patients lose something precious I just know out of everything that was her breaking point regardless of the following things. AND THEN FUCKING JERARD AGAIN! Making scootaloo do ALL that as a fucking bet! GOT DAMNIT IVE NEVER HATED A FICTIONAL CHARACTER SO FUCKING MUCH!
well this story is unpleasant. well written but unpleasant.
i am sorry but i can't buy that the regal sisters would do nothing about this corrupt kingdom. think about it. they have built a career on slaying tyrants and monsters. whether imprisoning discord or defeating sombra, they have never let the potential for conflict and war stop them from the right thing. if they went to war, they would not go to war simply for resources, only to ensure an evil is stopped.
and with scootaloo, they could simply negotiate. they have a filly from their nation abducted and held hostage and they would demand her back, and could trade valuables in order to get her back. to say they would not waste time is to totally ignore who they are. i mean celestia will tease ponies for treating her like royalty. if the know of a pony in trouble personally, they will personally ensure their safety.
seriously if the regal sisters themselves are asking for the filly's safe return and offering goods for her safe return, i highly doubt anyone would want to risk keeping her there. even if they have their own powerful beings, the regal ones are probably infamous enough to make even the strongest weary of them. clearly the filly would be worth far too much to them.
hell i can even see the regal ones going so far as to state that they have adopted scootaloo as royalty, and to hold her captive is a declaration of war against equestria. it would make them look like the aggressors rather than equestria, and perhaps make the other nations agitated towards them too if they are capturing members of the royal family.
only other criticism is can state is that the gore is........ well overblown. things are often better with subtly.
it is a fairly well written story but the elements it has far too often clash with the show i think. largely with how the regal ones operate. if the regal ones dare not risk a war they will use other methods. they are definitely not going to abandon scootaloo so long as other avenues exist.
Uh...uh...ummm...
Nextchapestimatedrealesedate?
You might be like
But I'm like
I might create a new species of Pony called the Booksters that read and feed of good stories!
I would feed them this!
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once my edit gets on it
Okiedokielokie!
It makes me sick to keep coming back to fimfic and not seeing the chaps are done
4257235 i would be a bookster and I FRIGGIN LOVE THIS STORY
4323290 entertaining but fake
4325814 That makes sense.
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There is a club for Booksters now!
We want you!
We need you!
And if you do not join...um...um...hmmmm.
Everyone dies! Yeah, that's it!
This is a joke comment, but srsly, join us.
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wat?
>>cooljwj
What do you not understand? it was only something I think that could be able to protect Scootalo "That time" I read until the last chapter published and now is too late, she has already become Jerard Pet.
It's too late now if she already has Stockholm syndrome... and if like what it seems, Celestia could not help, no one could help except the bad guys like Discord or Chrysalis.
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ah
sorry i didn't read your comment correctly, i had to make this a AU in this world there are many countries and Equestria is not the most powerful, also i don't see Celestia, Discord or any character yet far as all powerful or unbeatable, i think it's reasonable to assume that they could be halted in the actions in fear for their nation, and Discord doesn't give a shit about it yet
I think about it but...
Discord is supossed to help Equestria if he do not want to return to Stone or lose Fluttershy. ¿right? And even if Discord could not help, the Alicorn sisters still have two card to do... "Eternal Night" and "Nightmares" after all, if the sun do not return it could be bad, and also Luna can enter the dreams of every general or king that make a war to Equestria and make it a Nightmare, so they could not rest.
Not to say, she could even enter in Jerard dream and make him have nightmares.every night. Even Jerard need to rest.
And is like you write other times, if one of the Elements of Harmony die by accident or by Jerard, no one could stop Discord or other powerfull evils
That is only mainly what i think, is something it confuse me because even if the Alicorn Princess are not that powerfull, they still have those weapons.
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have you seen the newest season? your logic needs to get checked against cannon
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Yes, but i was thinking your story is mainly based nearly the end of season 3 and before the season 4. After all you wrote the first chapter in 2013.
So i was not sure if the things of season 4 are here
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AU that means anything i want can be or may not be cannon
How much longer until the next chapter?
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editor hasn't been able to for a while
so it'll be a while longer