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Why do they draw them with weapons like that? Oh, I don't know, maybe because it's their story, and they're allowed to write what they wish.

I never said they couldn't. I just don't understand why they're not drawn more for the actual user. Meaning, since poines are built different, the whole thing needs to be re-thought.

Besides, if you actually looked, that carbine/rifle (speaking as a former Weapons Sergeant, the difference in names hardly matters in this case) has no actual trigger guard. The safest possible thing? No. But does it make it usable by somebody (or somepony rather) who lacks independent phalanges? Yes, it does.

I just pointed out he used 2 different terms for the same weapon.
It's either one or the other. Not both. But then a 'Weapons Sergeant' should know that right?

And speaking as someone who knows what they're talking about, if YOU actually look, you'll see even without a trigger guard, the design is wrong for hooves.
The stock is wrong for where their shoulders are, (for aiming).
Working the bolt won't be possible.
Firing while aiming the damn thing is a no go.
And loading will be a huge challenge. Given they have FUCKING HOOVES!!

So, on that note: be quiet.
This isn't what the comment section is for.

Look sunshine, my comment was just a passing thought/question and I know what comment sections are for.

Now, having said that, you don't get to tell anyone to be quiet.
So how about you stop being a jackass?

All of the dark themes in this story seem a bit excessive and somewhat forced. Or maybe I'm just too desensitized to be bothered by it, (if that was your intention). But honestly, it's all just too much.
I think a more subtle approach to the darker elements would really benefit this story, in my opinion.

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i thought i hit at the darker elements lightly, and if you really are so used to it i feel rather sorry for you

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How so? I play a lot of horror games, so this kind of stuff doesn't really bug me. That's what I meant.

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ah

Oh that silly scoots...

Not a monster, not a bogeyman.
Nothing but another reason to feel better about yourself.
Understand that it's just a person (pony) -
not worth devoting any nightmares to.
- NNY (Johnny the homicidal maniac)

Even if the story ends in a blood bath, this will be interesting.
Please keep up the good work my friend and thanks for the inspiration.

Yours truly... NecromancerX69

Ps... Is the evil monster (I will call him Bob for now) just a pony with enhanced power or a real monster like slender?
Ps2... Because if Bob is just a pony, scootaloo reaction in hearing his voice as nothing more than just an hallucination is simply glorious!

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he's a normal pony, as you probably noticed scootaloo has been hearing and seeing things, blood in the shower, and when dash shouted at her, she heard his voice not dash's
it's a mental problem not him actually in her dreams

2821211 You bring tears to my eyes my good sir. In a good way.
Its... glorious!

This story is horrifyingly well written :/

chapter 2 problems; a doctor would not miss the fact she had been raped, and would not be allowed to just look the other way, even if he was bribed he wouldn't have been the only one working on her and thus others in the hospital would know. secondly if there's a search for a missing filly and a jane doe happens to show up in the hospital at the same time for a whole week, if no one makes the connection the authorities are seriously stupid. finally Scoots spent another couple weeks living in secret IN HER BEDROOM? I hope I don't need to point out everything that's wrong with that. however taking all this into account its still an interesting story and I will keep reading

The guy under me has a point Lolz the guy under me hehe talking with no names lolz

-uses chaos magic to anthrofy self- the main antagonist will writhe in pain and fear as I tear him apart, cell by cell! I will go O'malley on his arse!

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Once again bro your insane.
You me both.

2831834 ikr??

This is a well-written, and truly dark story, and since it does do such a good job at what its supposed to be, I will upvote it, but I cannot in good conscience fav this story. Sry.

Chap. One: Uehg... It's okay...
Chap. Two: On the verge of crying. Can I go read a happy fic now?

Ptst mixed with magic, bad combo

The grammar in this chapter could be better.

Fucking hell, this is depressing. I'm probably gonna seriously regret reading anymore.

HE will make everything think this is nice!

OMG. Scootadash, and now Scootabelle?! EEEEEEEEEE!

3863630 no

3221107 O'Malley as in omega from Red vs blue

2821211 PTSD right

Scootaloo needs some rips in chat

And some therapy

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Ok, red vs blue trivia, who’s speech ended with something along the lines of ‘well ain’t that a bitch’?