The greatest day of Scootaloo's life becomes perfect till it ends broken and torn, only to find that her nightmare doesn't end there.
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*Quiet applause from the shadowed audience*
Bravo
Great to see this story is back up! I really wish I could read the new chapter, but I remember literally nothing from this. Time to re-read! :D
........ My fucking god the contrivances that are needed to keep this fucktards heart beating just get worse, and worse, and WORSE every second. If this world is as needlessly curel as you portray, then Luna would have experienced such broken ponies time and time again. And know that their word cannot be taken, because their word is not THERE Word to begin with, it is the word of the pony who is torturing them.
Scootaloo is acting like someone who has been brainwashed. She may have the will to not want to see others hurt, but that is because fucktard has not tortured her into it, and he is currently trying to.
Luna would realize that.
"You ahve the will to not want to see your firends hurt Scootaloo. But he is trying to destroy that good part of you. He is making you hurt your friends cruelly."
And no, you 'realistic' logic is invalid. Celestia would know peace cannot be made from suffering of others, however big or small, because that suffering eventually leads ot the very conflicts that she seeks to avoid. Eventaully someone will crack and cause that war. IT would have already happened. Several times in fact.
The fact every chapter reveals a new contrivance to how he retains power just shows how invalid his power in thestory is. He holds power because plot. Its like equestrai itself is rejecting what you have written here and oyu need to throw down a new roadblock to keep it from jst ending the story now.
7657467 meh, idc i like the story so far, and just because it doesnt make sence in your books doesnt mean its bad, its like Meine Kumpf..... Not every one like it.
7657615 i try to think of ways it could make sense to others, not always works admitably. but the story is reliant on us believing the beigns that can fgiht fallen gods and keep back the darkness, are somehow helpless against a rapist and serial killer cause he has 'money and influence' in a world where neither really matter. and even his attempts to make it 'matter' fails because ultimately it is because of beings as powerful as celestia nad luna being the real force of this world still. money is pointless, yet somehow it makes him strong.
its a contradiction of things.
more so he, and a lot of writers, seem to write celestia as someone who has just gotten into politics and all that jazz. when she is literally a thousand year old entity. in world where people are psychotically murdered..........
basically its a combination of the fact that it keeps on having to make excuses and shortcuts to why this guy is still breahting, and all the darknesss has the subtlty of cupcakes after watching torture porn. Seriously, why wouldn't that who magic wave not deal with all that? This is worse that discord, worse than tirek, worse than chrysalis.
Again, contradiction.
As a whole this world does not work. Maybe it is my opinion, i find works like this extremely lazy in general, but trying to looking at it objectively otuside of my disdain for it, i am finding the same conclusion.
7657967 oh lordofmeth oh how i love your comments, but don't worry, all things make sense in time
7658409 and you have deemed them as trollign when i am pointing at rather actual issues in your story. so you can ignore the issues being brought up
7658465 i don't ignore you in anyway, but until you see what i see, you can't know what does or doesn't make sense, i mean Celestia does get captured like allllllllllllllllllll the time
I'm so glad to see this has updated!
Hoooopefully we'll be seeing the next chapter in less than a year.
7660511 i''m planning on updating at least once a week, it depends on my editor though, but i'll at least try this time
7059394 is that in the subjective way of a feeling one can have for someone, the person themself being one who is perfect at loving, one who is perfect at being loved, the objective interaction between two people, or something else?
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um, i guess the best choice you gave me would be something else, because the love i'm talking about isn't subjective nor is it about being loved or loving another and the interaction between two aren't enough to quantify the type of love i'm talking about. It's more on the base level of an existence
7676366 everything is on the base level of existance, at the very least it is such in addition to everything(everywhere?) else, i don't see how this should be set apart from anything else by it.
lets try zooming out a bit to try findding it, on a scale starting at 'the emotion itself' going up to 'the platonic ideal of a relationship as a way of interaction' with the person who is in love somewhere in the middle, where would you say it lands?
7677447 it doesn't, because it's not on a scale which can be defined, but it's more like a subconscious fate of absolution(If we must attempt to define it). A perfection by which doesn't define itself because it's just is, and always was without ever needing to be, but always intended to exist in it's own right.
7677659 well don't know about you but i must attempt to define it, i can only understand and interact with concepts by their definition, if it can't, theoretically, be articulated in a language i can't think it.
and i think the thing you are trying to explain it as being is a evolutionary or statistical pressure, like how anything alive would have a instinct to have more time to live it's life with because, statistically speaking, it will give you a better experience, ala pleasure theory, then could otherwise be gained, or how you're unlikely to come across something short lasting because it doesn't take up much time to find it in, i'm not explaining it very well but it has to do with things like game theory and finding which parallel universe you are in at the moment.
also i just looked at some of the comments and if you were planning to give this a 'it was a dream all along' ending i will slap you over the internet, i have done it before.
7680848 no i'm not planning on it's all a dream, however there is a chapter not far away that rolls with that idea, but is actually a dream
7698852 my goodness
I remember in one of the earlier chapters Twilight said that when someone has experienced a life or death senorieo, it is believed that a soul will enter the body of said person. I believe that the older scootaloo is actually master's daughter who died, and is supporting scoots in her subconscious.
7710645 i'm not sayin' nothi, but you may have noticed something a few missed
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When is the next update
7725766 my editor is still working on it, so i don't know when, but hopefully soon?