The greatest day of Scootaloo's life becomes perfect till it ends broken and torn, only to find that her nightmare doesn't end there.
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FUCK YES UPDATES MAKE MY DAY
No editor but I couldn’t find any glaring mistakes. Nice job, and great chapter!
Well, maybe Vibrant Lies couldn't see any mistakes.
Or perhaps, he truly holds up to his namesake.
However, for someone who isn't a native English speaker, there sure are a few of them.
Here's one of the obvious ones:
I appreciate the updates so far, however, aren't the new contents diluting the interests that we've had so far?
A lot of character development was made around Sethi. But she died in a few paragraphs on the previous chapters.
Al, the butler, has now been made irrelevant, for the spell(s) that was used on him over the many years of his service. Since it is now a fact that he was oblivious to most actions and crimes committed in the past, he cannot be considered a side-character that can be trusted by the High Blood family. Hopefully, he also cannot be used by others for information gathering as well.
New characters are being introduced at an alarming rate. I just hope that we get enough backstories, and interactions to relate to all those bodyguard, doctors, etc. That is, before their demise.
Strangely enough, Princess Celestia is, as desperate as ever, willing to go against her very own morals, for the sake of gaining the trust of Scootaloo.
Having, irredeemable scum rapist killed on the spot, instead of being judged in a courtroom under the law, is quite frankly, a strange pill to swallow from this alicorn. I guess that, she and Princess Luna now share the same mindset as the how Canterlot, and Equestria should be governed. I just hope that for her sake, it doesn't backfire on her alabaster plot (now that's roasting I would like to read).
Anyway, at the end of the day, I can't give much of a complaint.
We are all human beings after all, subjected to constant changes on our livelihood.
So, it is of no wonder to me that, after all those years, your perception regarding the story Scootaloo's Master has shifted to something different from what you originally intended it to be.
I'll be such to stick around and support you, for as long as this story is on FiM.
You have my word on that.
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spelling, it's not my strong suit
Sethi was, kind of by the way side, she was important in what she did, but at the same time in scootaloo's eyes, she had earned a quick death, not forgiven or hated, but done with. That's why her death was quick.
I don't believe i made it clear, but Scootaloo doesn't trust Al, and Al could tell that which is why he isn't going with her, and he does know, it's just easier for him to lie.
I'm not writing another book, all the characters introduced will not be expanded on.
I'm not sure if Celestia came off how i wanted her to be or not, but in this story, she's competent and a master mind, everything from Master becoming Master to Sethi becoming who she was, and allowing Scootaloo to become what she was all started from Celestia. This was just a game to her. She is by far more a goddess in this story than she ever was or is in the show.
As for how i had wanted Scootaloo's master to go, it was actually only going to be about five chapters, maybe around 20k. I had no idea until after i got a lot of feedback that it'd become what i made it today.
My feel when I could literally read this story forever. Been reading since the beginning and it's been an amazing journey, I love it.
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So long safecracker mare I like to see her more but nope. Also damn don’t you feel grim after reading a chapter.
This is just amazing treat, and I'm dying for more.
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oh yeah, i nearly forgot
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Church right?
More please!
Oh my a pregnant diamind tiara and update soon please
Please finish this! I've been waiting for years!
An update to this magnificent piece would be absolutely delightful.
Even to this day i still recommend this story to people for how much I love it
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well thank you