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This whole fandom is insane! Insane I tell you! (But kinda in a good way!)

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Rainbow Dash, who has finally achieved her dream of becoming a Wonderbolt, is about to be deployed for her first tour of active duty, but before heading, she takes some time to say goodbye to her close friends and loved ones, including spending a very intimate moment with a certain little pegasus filly who has looked up to her and adored her for so long. After all, who knows how long it will be before they see each other again...

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From what I understand, the Wonderbolts are actually based off of the Navy Blue Angels, which is a branch of, well, the navy. Also, I'm no expert myself, but wouldn't being called for active duty imply that there's a war going on? :rainbowhuh:

While the details might need polishing, the key parts of the story are pretty solid. It raises an interesting dilemma for Rainbow Dash (being torn between multiple loyalties, which Discord used to corrupt her), and her way of dealing with it was spot-on, I felt. Quite a beautiful piece, my friend. I salute you. :moustache:

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I looked it up and apparantly soldiers can still be put on active duty during peace time. Kind of as a precaution in case a war does start up, I'm guessing. Glad you liked it, though.

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Not really true. Troops on active duty are in deployment to an active role. That doesn't mean combat. And the Navy Blue Angels are combat pilots who are on a four year rotation with the flight team.

2491849 2491900 Ah, I see. Thank you both for clearing that up. :twilightsmile:

That was damn beautiful. I really look forward to reading more stories by you in the future. Keep up the great writing!

:fluttercry: that was amazing

equestria going to war? :P "Now, listen closely you cut-rate Gabby Gums. If the Dual Throne was going to conquer your Empire, it wouldn't look like this. It wouldn't involve polite little press releases where you lot sit around slurping gelato while Celestia's protege' announces she's trying to find one of your long-lost historical treasures. You wouldn't have your precious Crystal Heart back. You certainly wouldn't see the lawful heir to the throne in her rightful place.

"The only warning you'd receive before you woke up to Celestia and Luna on your thrones would be the sun going out. "
"That's right. Darkness in Day. That's the only warning the Gryphon Empire had before their little act of invasion 400 years ago got a response.... a nice little mid-day eclipse. Twenty four hours later Celestia and the Solar Army were rolling up the last of the Gryphon Emperor's army like a pastry chef rolling up a blintz. It was a century before the sanctions were lifted and before any Gryphon was allowed to carry anything more intimidating than a butter knife. To this day the Gryphon Kings whitewash the seat of their thrones at the very thought of going to war with Equestria. They're not too fond of eclipses, either, come to think of it.

"THAT'S what a takeover by Equestria looks like!

This was lovely.
Well done. :twilightsmile:

I really hope we get to see Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo get developed more in season 4.

It was a good read.

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Same here, man. Thanks for reading. :twilightsmile:

Emotional and able to tug at the few strings still hanging from my... that organ other people seem to have... anyway, so good work on that score. Will be checking out some more of your written wares at my earliest covenience.

All the feels, man...all the feels.

:raritydespair: This is totally, and I mean, totally the best story I've ever heard!
Now if you excuse me, I will be crying myself to sleep. :twilightsmile:

This was wonderful! Not sure whether I should favorite it (it's complete, after all), but it's definitely getting an upvote.

(BTW: as far as I'm concerned, the sky's the limit on Season 4, just like it was for Season 3 before it started. That's one of the best parts of being a Brony, IMO: the anticipation that almost anything can happen to our favorite ponies, and we get to see how they handle it!) :pinkiehappy::coolphoto:

A really cool fic! Nicely done!

Comment posted by MythrilMoth deleted Oct 10th, 2013

Beautiful story, and fuck that retard who thinks you're an idiot for saying the Wonderbolts aren't just an areial stunt flight team. Yeah I read his comment. He's the real idiot.

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Thanks man. It's nothing to get all up about though. If the guy wants to judge fics before reading them and name-call (he called me an idiot, ohhhh, I'll never recover from that :ajbemused:), let him. Speaks volumes about his level of maturity.

Beautiful story. One of the better Scootalove stories I've seen. :heart:

:scootangel: :rainbowdetermined2:
r the best of sister's

This was a very sweet story...
And now I want a sequel about when RD returns.

Well. That slapped me in the feels.

Also, I didn't know you had an account here, man! I've been following you On FanFiction, and I've been wondering for a while now if you were ever gonna update When Good Ponies Go Bad. That story is violently incredible.

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My god, I almost completely forgot about that story. I just kinda lost interest after a while. I may go back to it at some point though. I gotta get in the right mood again since I haven't written anything in a long time.

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Hey, that's okay man. I've waited this long! :twilightsmile: If you ever need help, you can PM me here, or you can find me on FanFiction under the same name, which is where I spend a majority of my time. I just come here to read.

This reminds me of somthing

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QnXzbvGoPr4

Also :twilightsheepish: being a unicorn may not have not have effected the story it would take like two seconds to fix and the cmc having cutie marks would effect the story but if this was s3 or before it would be fine

Is there any chance we can get a sequel of this when RD returns?

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I haven't felt like writing anything in forever. Maybe though. If I can think of something good.

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I might have an idea for one if you're willing to hear it. PM me if you're interested.

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Thanks for reading and faving. I might take you up on that.

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