There’s nothing Rainbow Dash can’t outfly. Except her own ego. Find out how far she’s willing to go in order to break all of her speed records and plunge straight through the heart of her own sonic rainboom!
It’s an open question as to whether heroism and sacrifice will triumph over foolishness, fatal error, and pony frailty in Rainbow’s dangerous and ill-fated experiment.
UPDATE: Included in 'Twilight's Library', how cool!
UPDATE TO THE UPDATE: 'Rainboom' has just been added to the elite 'Royal Guard' group of stories, huzzah!
Chapters (1)
Can't wait to read this!
Can I promote this in my blog so my followers can read it as well?
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Please do, kind sir!
Someone did some homework for this.
Also, Luna with the ninja skillz. I love it!
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~Skeeter The Lurker
Beautifull. 'nuff said.
Thanks for blogging about this Manes!
you're right. that is the ultimate answer.
Rainbow Dash proves in this one-shot that nothing's impossible.
Excellent story.
And thus, you prove that you aren't simply a one-hit wonder author. This was another fantastic job. Truly, the way you write is so fascinating.
If these are just your first one-shots (and I LOVE
how you referenced your first story at the end there) I cannot wait to see your skill really develop to the point where you might consider gracing us with something longer or even something on an epic scale.
Excellent work.
Tis another great one,
Another that has succeeded.
As bright as the sun,
Its setting not needed.
Quite a beauty this piece projects,
From start to finish it's quite a wonder.
It's very clear that you did your best,
Its very story you did not asunder.
I wish quite a good welcome to you,
A welcome to one of the greats.
You started fresh and brand-new,
Till now it is no debate.
Even for your own second story,
It has been quite a very enticing ride.
Rainbow's encounters and all her glory,
To simple words stride by stride.
I bid to thee and fare well,
Upon the future yet again.
Only time shall eventually tell,
Another masterpiece, friend?
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Thank you, 5-0-9, for liking my stuff;
Writers love praise, and can’t get enough.
(Not bad, eh? Don’t worry. This part of the verse
Starts off pretty good, but it gets a lot worse.)
The Fashion Pony, you know, went back in time
I’d say a lot more, but it just doesn’t rhyme.
Rainbow Dash is the one who tries so hard to please,
She just flew too high, and started to freeze.
Next story’s in April, if things stay in whack –
Spare you a guess, it’ll be ‘bout Applejack!
It’s set in a dark future, so raise up a beer;
Or you can skip all the drinking, and just see my blog here.
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Oi, tha's beautiful mate
Yet another great story, sparks. Truly, between your first story and this one, you are conveying a wonderfully introspective journey that delves into the heart of each Mane Six member, creatively illustrating what you believe makes them tick within the scope of fantastically creative scenarios and a wonderful background plot thread. I'm glad you've gotten the motivation to continue with these stories, as I am eagerly anticipating to see what you do with Applejack in your next one.
That being said, I feel I would be remiss if I didn't offer a little critical feedback on this particular tale. While reading, at times Rainbow Dash felt a little . . . off, to me. Not Out-of-Character or anything like that. Just . . . off. I can't exactly say what is was that was sticking out to me. Maybe at times her diction and phrasing felt a little too, formal? I don't know; all I can say is that at points Rainbow Dash didn't sound like Rainbow Dash to me, but like another pony playing Rainbow Dash. And considering how fabulously you channeled Rarity in your last story, that little bit of dissonance stuck with me throughout.
With that out of the way, I want to iterate how much I can appreciate all that you were trying to do in order to flesh Rainbow out as a three-dimensional character--something particularly crucial in a first-pony narrative like this one. It's very easy to fall into the trap of flanderizing Rainbow into a series of cliches and singular traits: the dumb jock, the egotist, the Wonderbolts fanatic, the Daring Do enthusiast, etc. This reductionism certainly comes across in her language in these portrayals as well, with her spouting how "Everything is 'Awesome!'" every five seconds (*cough**cough*Equestria Girls!*cough*). Your Dash, though, like Rarity before her, has depth. She has dreams, goals, and confidence, but also doubts, fears, and flaws. She has intelligence, sass, and a sense of humor, but also arrogance, a lack of foresight, and a touch of vulnerability. In other words, she feels very real, and that makes it easy to follow along with her as she goes quite literally to Infinity and Beyond.
Other parts I liked? Your take on Luna is masterful. Wise, mysterious, and conveying a bit of a harder edge than her older sister when interacting with others. And the repeat joke about Daring Do was a nice, equinizing, touch. The interactions between the various members of the Mane Six felt very natural and in-character--they certainly sound like a group of conversing friends would, whether in a time of calm and camaraderie or sorrow and concern. Your pacing and narrative description are excellent, keeping things moving while giving enough details when they're needed for the reader to get a picture of what's going on. And as with your previous story, the uniqueness and creativity of the underlying ideas behind this story are tremendous.
In all, this story is another great accomplishment on your part. Well done, sparks!
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MG - I'm on the road this week but I would be remiss if I didn't respond with a quick 'thank you' for both the critical and the thumbs-up portions of your review. I'm especially glad that you enjoyed my attempt at keeping Dash from getting too 'one-note', the portrayal of Luna, and the little running joke I sneaked in re: Daring Do's fandom.
I'll be considering all the feedback as I construct the next story in this same vein. As you correctly intuited, I'm looking at creating a 1st person POV, introspective journey for each Mane Six member I write about. Whether I go past 3 of the 6 will depend on whether the next story soars or not; but hopefully it'll be something both different and entertaining.
Again, thank you for the detailed feedback, it is very much appreciated.
Best,
Sparks
This is as Rainbow Dash would say.... AWESOME!!!
You certainly have a way with words, Sparks and I don't know why but I laughed so much than I should on the Daring Do stuff especially when Luna made mention of Yearling's dreams... and you placed that in a serious part of the story too
I loved the way you describe Rainbow's flight and speed as well when she's pulling that quadruple sonic rainboom. You pictured it in your mind and successfully delivered every moment in words, not a lot of people can do that, not that technical! I mean, when I picture out in my mind a beautiful scene and try to find words to write it down, I mostly end up with: On the park...
Anyway, I can't wait for AJ's story!
Keep rockin', Sparks~
I feel bad for not running across this sweet awesome story sooner
it was a bit sad and happy at the same time you certainly have a wonderful way with words thank you for the amazing story
You were right, this is fantastic. I thoroughly enjoyed it, though there was one line where Rainbow said
which struck me as weird. The rest I found to be excellent; the descriptions of flight, and what happens during it, the way you portrayed RD, most notably her knowledge of the colors and terms for the feel of the air, as well as the description of the multiverse. Really awesome.
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
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Thank you for the kind words! Life, paid writing work, and finals have moved me away from putting up more...but that should change in the next couple weeks or so.
Lovely! I can absolutely see Rainbow trying something like this, pulling herself up by her own mane so to say.
The many worlds of ponies were a cool addition, too -- the different generations of the show, I assume, plus possibly some fanworlds, too. And the Daring Do joke was perfectly timed, a bit of humor releasing the tension of Rainbow's predicament and her rescue.
You expect a comment about how awesome this story was? Its needless. What i wish to point out is how you always seem to treat the changelings with a slimmer of hope that "You know what? We'll manage." thats the spirit!
4652453 "You expect a comment about how awesome this story was? Its needless. What i wish to point out is how you always seem to treat the changelings with a slimmer of hope that "You know what? We'll manage." thats the spirit!"
Thanks nionio! And yeah, it's important to me that the entire changeling issue is one that is open to change...it was a terrible mistake that led to the conflict, it wasn't inevitable, since from their POV, it was the changelings who were wronged!
4645339 "Lovely! I can absolutely see Rainbow trying something like this...
The many worlds of ponies were a cool addition, too -- the different generations of the show, I assume, plus possibly some fanworlds, too. And the Daring Do joke was perfectly timed, a bit of humor releasing the tension of Rainbow's predicament and her rescue."
Thanks L-n-M, yeah I could see Dash doing this, and you were right about your assumptions about the other worlds. Also glad you liked the Daring Do joke, it helped leaven an otherwise tense scene.
- Sparks2037
4659391 Oh yea i mean sure they did do bad thing but retaliation aka revenge never helps. Celestia should know about that.
I am definitely glad I saved this story till third on my journey through your catalog.
Rarity was as good as her word, or perhaps even better. I love being able to place exactly where in the convoluted of knot time travel to place this story. (And a side note: Dash, you are so wrong about your friend)
Seeing how the three stories fit together, I'll spoiler tag this next bit.
With these injuries, how did Rainbow deal with the Changling war? How much had she recovered? This story gained so much gravitas after reading Apple Family Last Stand. Dash isn't there, and I think I know why.
I cannot express how impressed I am with your world-building. Combined with the fact that you write the characters so well simply magnified my enjoyment.
Thank you, thank you, thank you. I (hopefully) look forward to reading more of your work.
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Hi Stormy - Again, thanks for your praise and kind words for my stories and both the world-building and appreciation of the characters. I'm especially glad that you noted (via the use of clues in the background) where exactly this story fell in the knot of the time travel narrative.
And yeah, Dash is *so* wrong about Rarity, ain't she?
- Sparks
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I wanted to parody Dicken's famous quote from a Christmas Carol (Scrooge was better than his word.) but I decided not to force it.
Simply put, in a single paragraph you established the consequences of a previous story, reassuring us that Rarity learned her lesson from the four ghosts of fashion yet to be, and assured us that she has her priorities straight, but she is still Rarity.
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One of my old favorites, the title is 'Stand back and watch me watch me shine sister!'
For all her generosity, it was the lesson she truly needed to learn.
Gee Dash, way to very nearly break reality.
Interesting story.
WOW... that was great! now to see what the hell the rainbooms did to the world.
Ice Rings of Tigrin. Really? a Titan AE reference? <>_<>
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<chuckles> Yep! I threw that one in to see if anyone caught it.
To my knowledge, Shadowhawk, you are the first! Glad you liked the story.
- Sparks
4888063 a Great movie, now all we need is Planet Bob
Absolutely amazing. I'm not sure what more I can say.
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Thank you! Be sure to check out the other two stories, they tie into this one.
Ice rings of Tigrin
For real bruh
Great story, I'll probably check out the other two stories soon too :)
more faster of flow, more danger to go!!!