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My name is Spitfire. I'm the captain of the Wonderbolts; the best fliers in all of Equestria. As captain, I feel that I have a certain obligation to my team. In a sense, they're kinda like my family (and trust me, I'm usually not that sappy). So when our practice course is sabotaged and it almost claims Misty Fly's life, you can understand why that would make me kind of livid. Especially since we were practicing for this special competition meant to strengthen pony-griffon relations.

And if that wasn't bad enough, I also have this oddball stalker claiming that these attacks are gonna continue. No, I'm not kidding here. This weird pony dressed up like something out of a comic book says that if I want to stop these attacks, I have to find the dock-hole behind them. Hey, just a quick question. Why me? I mean, I'm concerned about my team and all, but I'm a Wonderbolt, not a detective! Heck, you clearly know more about what's going on; why don't you do the legwork and catch this guy?! For that matter, why should I trust you?! I don't even know who you are!

Sorry, sorry. I didn't mean to snap like that. I'm just not in a good mood right now. And Celestia help anypony who crosses me, be it that assassin or the costumed freak. Because if I get my hooves on either one of them, it's not gonna be pretty...

The story I'm about to tell you is real, although some details are debatable. I'm not gonna bother changing any names because I know there's at least one smart aleck out there who's gonna try to figure out the real names, anyway. Oh, and all you parents out there might wanna consider sending your little ones to bed. I'm gonna delve into some pretty heavy stuff, and I don't want to traumatize anypony.

((Case 1 of the Mare-Do-Well Files.))

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This is interesting. I'll fave it. Let's see where you go with this, yeah?

~Skeeter The Lurker

Hippogriff's are always awesome.:rainbowdetermined2:

And this story looks awesome.:ajsmug:

I am loving the story so far. Keep up the great writing!

So far so good...

~Skeeter The Lurker

BRD

Just a wild guess, but I think that Mare-Do-Well is The Doctor. (Doctor Whooves) :rainbowhuh:

2497043 I can kinda see why you'd think that (although to be honest, that was completely unintentional). Whether you're right or not, however, is yet to be seen. :trollestia:

This is epic:raritystarry:
Mare do well has to be a Pegasus or a powerful unicorn who can cast a spell to walk on clouds and a wing spell so due to the fact butterfly wings weren't described its probably a Pegasus .so mdw is RD flutters or derpy? :rainbowdetermined2::yay::derpytongue2:

2498159 Perhaps. But then again, perhaps not. Only time will tell. :trollestia:

Out of curiosity, why do you think it's one of those three? :rainbowderp:

2498225 well they are the only ones witH access to the costume with fluttershy having her own and rainbow could probably get fluttershy to lend her it for some event then say she lost it in order to keep it and derpy is ......... Well derpy:derpytongue2:

Griffon Cutie Marks? Don't actually think they've got any... But whatever. It's a fan fic.

~Skeeter The Lurker

2502687 Keep in mind, Honor Bound is not a griffon; he's a hippogriff. A hippogriff is the offspring of a griffon and a mare, and its body is that of a horse. Ergo, it stands to reason that hippogriffs born of Equestrian ponies have Cutie Marks. :twistnerd:

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Perhaps. But, still seems unlikely.

Your fic, though. So your canon.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Mare-Do-Well may not be the pony the Wonderbolts deserve, but certainly the one they need.

Interesting to see the 'sister' angle. Most claim Soarin' the family member.

~Skeeter The Lurker

2512859 Really? I've seen Spitfire/Soarin' shipping, but nothing about them being related by blood. :rainbowderp:

And so the mystery/fun begins.:ajsmug:
A really nice start and set up, also like how you've fleshed out the other Wonderbolts. They sound like they'll be some fun personalities.

Heh.:pinkiesmile: Any chance the Proud Pride's leader is related to a certain pastry chef?

2525236 Good eye, my friend. :ajsmug: Believe it or not, this plays a part later on. How? Oh, you'll see. :raritywink:

I'm guessing Blaze is the flame colored maned one from the few times they show a secondary team?

Shame this isn't getting more attention.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Curiouser and curiouser.

BRD

It is just me or this sound like a job for Phoenix Wright: Ace Attorney?

2563893 Yeah, that shouldn't come as a surprise. After all, this is a My Little Investigations story. :derpytongue2:

As a fellow Ace Attorney junkie, this highly pleases me. I had this playing in my head during the chapter:

Looking forward to more! :twilightsmile:

2564489 Honestly, I was listening to that while writing this chapter. That and the Objection theme I pictured for Spitfire. :rainbowwild:

2525796

Pastries laced with performance enhancing substances. Calling it now.

Wow ...........not what I expected...........IT'S EPIC!!!:pinkiehappy::raritystarry::yay:

BRD

It's just me or Mare-Do-Well is like #5 from Short Circuit? :rainbowhuh:

2717868 Well, I didn't have that in mind per se when I decided to make Mare-Do-Well a ponuculus, but I can see how the concept is similar. :eeyup:

I'll be honest, I almost never write comments. In fact, this is only the second comment I've ever written on this site.
With that said though, I felt I needed to. Why? Because this story is bucking amazing, that's why.

Mysteries aren't usually my thing, but this piqued my interest and kept me enthralled the entire way through. Also, the whole story being told as a memory of Spitfire's is something that is difficult to do right, but you pulled it off very well.

This fic easily rates in the top five I've read in a very long time. Kudos to you, good sir. :rainbowdetermined2:

2739259 Well, thank you very much. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

(Singing) Mare do well!:pinkiehappy:

Dude. I just finished this, and I have to say... a job well done. I will definitely read the sequels

I haven't even read the story yet and I already love it. Your synopsis is hilarious and very well grounded. You spell out who the main character is and what's happening to them as well as what they have to do plus you throw in character commentary. It's brilliant I can't wait to start

I read this after reading "I'm Your Wing", and this is one of the best stories I have ever read on this site. The mystery was compelling, the plot twists were stellar, and I cared about every character you introduced. Submit this story to every flipping group it qualifies for, it should be read by everyone. May kudos shine upon your work. Please submit this to Equestria Daily, it is truly and amazing piece of writing.

this fic right here isn't actually based on Edgeworth's investigation. It's more like Hotel Dusk, no loud interjection or whacky stuff, some gritty serious detective/mystery noir stuff right here.. minus the noir part.

The idea of using a different pony with the invisible partner of Mare Do Well.. eeyup, definitely an awesome idea.

4445333 I used the Ace Attorney games as more of a template for this series; particularly for the Confrontation chapters. As such, I do see what you're getting at when you say that it doesn't fully replicate the Ace Attorney experience. :eeyup:

Although I must disagree about the lack of wackiness, since Surprise's antics are a prominent part of the story. :rainbowwild:

Also, to be fair, the original My Little Investigations flash game wasn't a perfect copy of the Ace Attorney experience, either. :derpytongue2:

I loved this story, I actually found this from the one with Twilight and decided to read from the beginning.

Very good idea and awesome execution of everything that was written and stuff. :pinkiesmile:

4456393 Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

Excellent story! I'm glad I found it, and I think someone deserves another follower! :twilightsmile:

This story deserves more wievs! Have a fav, the frank aporoves!

4846380 I'm, not sure what you mean by more wievs, but I'm glad you enjoyed the story all the same. :twilightsheepish:

4846644 In my bad English, I meant thar more people should read this! And yes, I did indeed love it, and reading my way through the sequel now. looks equally promising.

I'm gonna put you on KP so fast it'll make your head spin!

I'm going to ask what might be a silly question; but what is "KP"?

4893784 KP stands for Kitchen Police, which is military slang for "You have to help the cook by washing dishes and peeling vegetables." :twistnerd:

I would like to quote Commissioner Gordon when I say:

"One of these days I'm going to nail (her hooves) to the floor." :trixieshiftleft:

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