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Is mayonnaise an instrument?

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All I remember is flying my plane away from a storm... now I'm stuck in a body of a child that doesn't belong to me, surrounded by creatures I once thought were only myths. I want to go home...


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Wow, thank you so much for getting me featured for the first time on 06/10/21!

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Comments ( 31 )

This story looks interesting so far. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Read the story, not a bad start with the plane crash idea, I wonder if it actually crashed in a cloud or something or very near the WB's HQ. For the Wonderbolts being in a hospital in flight uniform, this also got to be a PR event for them to publicize their themselves for saving a foal and show support to other patients while their at it; probably going to have a photo op with the guy. I wonder what will get the WB get hitched with that colt in some way, at they supposed to protect him from something. Or could it be that one or more member of the WB's were hopping for a foal of their own. I wonder if Soarin and Rainbow Dash will be part of the cast. And I wonder what they will make of the plane crash, definitely not design for pony anatomy in mind, would Equestria's crown get interested in it? Would have liked to have had more of a backstory for the main character, we can guess he has a pilot license and seems to hold his machine to heart, so he might really like flying even having a career as a pilot, but is no stunt flyer.

Also if you are looking commission for a cover art let me know, I am some experience in that. Here is the link to my DeviantArt Gallery and my Youtube channel.

Good Luck on your story:twilightsmile:

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Thanks for the support, and I would love to commission some cover art, but I'm broke:rainbowlaugh: thanks for the offer though.

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No a problem dude, just keep on writing, best wishes to you.

Cant wait for chapter 2!! :D

“A plane crash? That’s how I went?”

I mean, you are a pilot, you probably shouldn't be surprised :)

Did I miss something? His name is [REDACTED]

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Whoops, pretend you didn't see that...

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Nothing at all...:twilightsheepish:

Um interesting, fast paced.

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Thanks!
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It's probably going to slow a bit in upcoming chapters.

hmmm, i see no drama tag here..
i will follow this story just to make sure how it went later

The Council approves.

We await further delivery of chapters.

Great start

Interested in seeing where this goes. Best of luck to ya. ✌

Evan seems a little blasé considering he’s in an alien body and surrounded by mythical creatures. On the other hand, I guess he hasn’t fully processed everything yet. I’ll be waiting for the next chapter.

A good start

As long as there's no future bunch of... Darkness, war, all sorts of stuff...
I'm really afraid of the HIEdramatic change in life

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I don't think the world will go boom
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Honestly, I didn't really expect the story to do this well, so now I'm actually starting to plan and stuff for the first time to try and step up the quality.
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Lol
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Thanks
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Thanks
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The council shall not be disappointed
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I really don't even know what qualifies as drama on fimfiction.

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Honestly, I didn't really expect the story to do this well, so now I'm actually starting to plan and stuff for the first time to try and step up the quality.

Ha, there's the consequence to it all. Once you write well, people expect you to keep writing well.

I find it funny how many HiE stories involve getting turned into kids. It seems to me like that's the majority. Not complaining since for some reason I really like that trope, but I do wonder how that took off.

Anyway, great start, looking forward to seeing how it develops.

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Thanks, and yeah it does seem that becoming a kid again rather than staying an adult is very popular. I think the story oh to be old again made it popular.

Well this is definitely off to an interesting start, I can’t wait for the next chapter!

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Thanks for the support!

Why does Evan jump to “I’m doomed!” when he learns that a princess is going to visit him?

The WBs seem awful blasé about the fact that a Pegasus child was in a burning object that was clearly not only a vehicle, but a vehicle with OBVIOUS wings, tail, and control surfaces for aerial flight and no other logical way for it to be in the woods (it clearly didn’t drive there on those little wheels).

Also, if Dash has been a WB for a while, does that mean that Twilight has already visited the human world a few times? If so, shouldn’t she instantly recognize an airplane when she sees one?

It sounds like the WBs got there soon enough to not only get Evan out, but put out the fire before the plane was a total loss. He may still have some gear or such that could be useful. (Tablet, phone, solar charger, etc).

Also, why is this not showing up in my stories I’m following?

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All of this will be explained in the coming chapters... well it should at least.

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